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THE FINAL MIXED AND MASTERED VERSION OF THIS TRACK IS AVAILABLE ON MY DEBUT ALBUM, "SOMETHING".
http://www.simig.com/records/artists/peter/peter.htm
THIS VERSION HAS OLD VOCALS (first take)AND A ROUGHER MIX.
This is a simple guitar/vocals song. After all the big productions I've been doing lately I felt the need to just do something raw and simple, going back to my pre-Garage Band days. This is a one-take on an improvised melody. The lyrics were written a few years ago.
Lyrics:
Sometimes I get caught in the moment
And I know nothing more than what I am
Then it comes on like an ocean
A million leagues pouring over me
I’m a vapor, silent roaming
Folding clouds of muddled memory
This is nobody’s home
This is nobody’s home
And the moment is gone
And there’s so much more to the story
And I’ve lost it, I’ve lost it, and the lost can never know
There’s no point in going on
Well this is nothing more than giving up at best
And I know nothing worse than settling for this
A cup of coffee and a second thought
I fold the ticket in my hand
I’m on my way
I’m on my way
One of these days, I’ll know where I’m going
And I’ll count the miles, rolling under me
I’m coming home
I’m somewhere lost on the waves
And the moment is gone
And there’s so much more to the story
Hardware:
Mac G5, Taylor guitar, Audio Technica MB4000C mic, M-Audio Quattro USB interface.
Software:
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Wow &mdash 05/23/05 - 05:09:10 PM
There is something very moving about listening to you
sing this.
Some wonderful raw quality that comes out that makes
one want to listen again and again.
Beautiful guitar melody and very good lyrics.
I agree, that sometimes, less is more,
very much more.
SlimGirlFat
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A very fine performance &mdash 05/23/05 - 05:14:38 PM
Your vocals continue to go from strength to strength,
Peter. It's not easy to do a song where the voice is
this dominant but you've carried it off with aplomb.
Much credit to you. It sounds wonderful. [ Reply to This ]
A very fine performance &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:09:21 PM
Thanks, Rebsie. You are the Queen of upfront/accapella singing at MJ. [ Reply to This ]
Excellent &mdash 05/23/05 - 05:22:01 PM
Adult angst, very well done. Superb production, Peter. I'll
email you about that. This is a beautiful song, simple,
stunning.
8-9-8-8 [ Reply to This ]
Beautiful Melody &mdash 05/23/05 - 05:29:44 PM
Excellent, sensitive singing and guitar playing.
For some reason I expected to hear a lone acoustic violin
come in (I guess this song or the mood of the song is
triggering memories of some other song). [ Reply to This ]
Beautiful Melody &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:13:18 PM
Thanks, Mungo. Actually, when recording this I thought about how nice (if
anything additional) a fiddle would sound on this. [ Reply to This ]
Like that sound of the Taylor &mdash 05/23/05 - 05:59:18 PM
Like that sound of the Taylor &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:22:36 PM
Thanks, Bill. This was my first time trying out the ability to record on multiple
tracks at once in GB2. I put my Audio Technica MB4000C condenser mic near
the sound hole and plugged in the internal pickup/mic in the Taylor. I sent
them to two seperate tracks and panned them a little left and right, and I used
light multi-band compression on them. Using Elixer mediums except for the
bottom E which broke and was replaced with a Martin SP+ Phosphore bronze; I
think Atwood uses those. [ Reply to This ]
perfect on this rainy day &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:00:51 PM
what a perfect song to hear on this cold, rainy day ...
haunting, contemplative in the extreme ... your vocals are
excellent ... lyrics are poem ... i love the way you sing "one
of these days, i'll know where i'm going" ... with voice
break ... very expressive ... i do agree this could handle
additional instrument but really, this is good as is! ... oh!
... and guitar is lovely too ... [ Reply to This ]
perfect on this rainy day &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:26:01 PM
Thanks, StarFlower, and welcome to MacJams. As I said in my reply to Mungo's
comment, I think a fiddle could fit in there nicely. [ Reply to This ]
Sometimes all you need... &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:04:05 PM
...is a guitar and a great song. You've got both. Brilliantly
simple. Great lyrics and vocals. One of the things that
really makes all your stuff stand out is the quality of the
lyrics. Excellent job. Thanks for sharing. [ Reply to This ]
Sometimes all you need... &mdash 05/23/05 - 09:01:48 PM
The simplicity of this... &mdash 05/23/05 - 06:39:59 PM
Oh man, Peter &mdash 05/23/05 - 07:00:51 PM
Cheers for this &mdash 05/23/05 - 07:42:33 PM
beautiful lyrics, singing, music.
This perfect creation gives me something to aspire to. [ Reply to This ]
Yea, PG Unplugged &mdash 05/23/05 - 08:23:07 PM
I love it! Your voice is smooth and tasteful. Dig the lyrics.
Voice and guitar (wonderful playing btw)....I'm so glad you
posted this. It's great to hear a "raw" version. You've
done it beautifully. Keep fillin up my IPod Peter...always
enjoy your music. [ Reply to This ]
What the hell... &mdash 05/23/05 - 09:38:10 PM
This is the third consecutive song I've listened to tonight with an ocean theme and song art. Wierd.
Songwise this is another terrific piece. The stripped down soulful sound really fits you well. While I like pretty much everything you've done this song has such honesty and feeling... really. I am amazed at the beautiful simplicity of this. [ Reply to This ]
What the hell... &mdash 05/24/05 - 06:20:24 PM
Wierd is actually spelled weird... in case anyone is grading for spelling and
grammatical errors. [ Reply to This ]
What the hell... &mdash 05/24/05 - 09:33:33 PM
Low key gem &mdash 05/24/05 - 01:25:49 AM
Very nice tune, I like the simple production - the voice
and the guitar are all you need to carry this one. You
could add other stuff but I think that this sounds fine as it
is really!
S [ Reply to This ]
great!!!! &mdash 05/24/05 - 06:01:20 AM
very nice. nice vocal and the beautiful guitar;) thanks for
sharing.
- Hawks [ Reply to This ]
coolness &mdash 05/24/05 - 07:05:59 AM
This is full of cool and style. If that's what you're looking to do, you've succeeded....as a song, though...you lost me in the waves...Lots of cool lines, but extremely abstract...the words don't really flow with what you're playing...it's like you wrote a poem and are just playing some chords and singing the words randomly....like I said...it's cool...but as a songwriter I'm always looking for story and melody and hooks and climbs...et al...so forgive me the critique. One suggestion in keeping with what you have right now is to end with the title....something like:
I'm coming home
And there's so much more to say
And the moment is gone
I'm somewhat lost on the waves
same words...just rearranged to display your title dramatically.
Great work and presentation
Vidid [ Reply to This ]
coolness &mdash 05/24/05 - 03:36:36 PM
I appreciate the comments. I wrote the lyrics almost five years ago to a very
different melody. I think the original melody did a better job guiding the
story of the lyrics. The section changes were much more distinct. I recorded
it with a friend and made a big, wall-of-sound production of it. We never
finished it and I wasn't happy with it as it felt overworked, though musically
there were some very cool elements.
I decided the other night to just do something entirely differnt with it,
something simple and intimate. This was a practice in restraint. The melody
is entirely improvised. I did three takes but found that the first one was the
best. The lyrics actually go on for a few more lines but when I got to "and
there's so much more to this story" I felt that that's where it should end, so
that's where I ended it.
Without the guidance that the original melody gave I know the lyrics come off
more abstractly, but overall I'm happier with this simple unadorned version.
And there is a certain satisfaction in keeping the first take for me. [ Reply to This ]
great simplicity &mdash 05/24/05 - 09:03:35 AM
Up there with some of the simple stuff that jonx has been posting lately. Short, too. It does sound sort of improvised and I kept thinking that this is like a gem that could stand a lot of polishing. But maybe it's just a pebble tossed up by the waves, and that's enough. Great singing. I would have made the guitar a little louder maybe. [ Reply to This ]
great simplicity &mdash 05/24/05 - 03:42:25 PM
Thanks, Jim. I'm actually considering extenting it a little from the middle, giving
it an instrumental section and bringing in a simple fiddle part. I just need a
fiddler to play a part. Other than possibly doing that there's nothing else I'd
want to add. [ Reply to This ]
Existential hopeless beauty &mdash 05/24/05 - 10:53:13 AM
I like your voice so much, and your guitar playing is
perfect, a great setting for this poetry music, the
simplicity is arresting and wonderful. A slice of thought, a
moment caught and expressed like poetic philosophy. I
loose the thread of the stream of consciousness lyrics
once or twice, but the sense of floating is profound and
constant. "...the lost can never know there's no point in
going on...", altho this is not necessarily logically true, for
the lost often give up, I understand what you mean, and
the way you sing (wonderfully) it says that you are giving
up despite the actually meaning of the words, and the
moment is very affecting. "Well this is nothing more than
giving up at best / And I know nothing worse than settling
for this"... such a sad, sad, hollow verse, such existential
resignation, so well stated. Very strong writing. Love the
track, simply love it. You become just the sort of artist-
hero Camus defines, as he decides there is no way to find.
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Existential hopeless beauty &mdash 05/24/05 - 04:02:40 PM
Thanks for your comments, Tobin. Interesting. The line, "...the lost can
never know there's no point in going on...", is a kind of puzzle. I wrote it to
mean like when on says "My wife can never know of this", in the case of this
song referring to Hope in a hopeless situation. I knew that it could be read or
heard in very different ways but decided that I kind of liked that.
I've only read one of Camus' books, "The Stranger". I really liked it. The last
lines really stuck with me.
"As if that blind rage had washed me clean, rid me of hope; for the first
time, in that night alive with signs and stars, I opened myself to the gentle
indifference of the world. Finding it so much like myself--so like a brother,
really--I felt that I had been happy and that I was happy again. For
everything to be consummated, for me to feel less alone, I had only to wish
that there be a large crowd of spectators the day of my execution and that
they greet me with cries of hate. (Meursault)
---from "The Stranger", by Albert Camus[ Reply to This ]
Existential hopeless beauty &mdash 05/25/05 - 04:14:33 AM
Nodding head vigorously to, Tobin. If it's not too poncey to say, it's a
perfect moment of exsitential anxiety, beautifully distilled. [ Reply to This ]
Poignant songsmith &mdash 05/24/05 - 11:17:06 AM
This reminds me a bit of Simon and Garfunkel's
"Bookends", a bittersweet, tantalizingly short snippet of
life. Great acoustic guitar playing, great singing, great
lyrics, great recording/mixing, I can't think of any
constructive criticism... oh wait... uh, in the song art, the
seagull is just out of the frame! ;-) Anyway, I really
enjoyed the intimacy of this recording, very nice!
ttfn,
Drakonis [ Reply to This ]
Poignant songsmith &mdash 05/24/05 - 06:23:03 PM
Thanks, Drak. The seagull would have been in the shot but he couldn't find any
passers-by to shoot the picture for him with his camera; that's one damn lonely
seagull. [ Reply to This ]
Simple and Smooth. &mdash 05/24/05 - 01:58:44 PM
I like the simple stuff sometimes better than the big productions. Sounds great!
Thanks!
DL/9s! [ Reply to This ]
nice. &mdash 05/24/05 - 02:15:01 PM
As much as I loved the entire song, the ending completely sold it. Awesome. Makes you mad that it ends :) [ Reply to This ]
nice. &mdash 05/26/05 - 01:37:38 AM
A beauty..,. &mdash 05/25/05 - 01:35:46 AM
I came here with that sense of MJ duty because you'd
commented so nicely on my last. But what a treat to find;
this is a wonderful, delicate song. Beautiful words. Your
voice is great on this. It works brilliantly as it is, stripped
down, but I'd like to hear something like a bass or a string
arrangment coming in late in the song; at the "One of
these days..." verse. [ Reply to This ]
A beauty..,. &mdash 05/26/05 - 01:43:32 AM
Thanks a lot, Mando. If there's anything I'd like to add to this it would be a
fiddle somewhere starting in the second half. I'd need a fiddle player. [ Reply to This ]
really nice song &mdash 05/25/05 - 02:16:45 AM
nice tune &mdash 05/25/05 - 11:20:13 AM
'nice tune' &mdash 05/25/05 - 11:13:32 PM
great lyrics & vocals.. gonna make me cry. the words turned
into a full-blown film after hearing 'i fold the ticket in my
hand'. really brings it all home & sets up the last line. very
well done [ Reply to This ]
'nice tune' &mdash 05/26/05 - 01:50:01 AM
Thanks _nder. I'd been moving around a lot when I wrote this, all to often
having to think to remember where I was and where I was going. [ Reply to This ]
i am definitely impressed... &mdash 05/25/05 - 11:34:17 PM
great sound... really clear and precise. I appreciate the
poetry of the song.
Incredibly moving... [ Reply to This ]
i am definitely impressed... &mdash 05/27/05 - 11:44:37 PM
That's so cool! &mdash 05/26/05 - 03:28:46 AM
That's so cool! So simple, so clean! Great lyrics,
voice and understated guitar. Keep 'em coming! [ Reply to This ]
great stuff &mdash 05/26/05 - 03:39:16 PM
A clear voice, greast lyrics and a guitar.
What more do you want?
A great track. [ Reply to This ]
Very nice &mdash 05/27/05 - 02:48:19 PM
Reminds me of early Springsteen - really like the variation
in the vocals between the phrasing.... very warm acoustic
guitar paints the perfect backdrop. Some great lyrics too!! [ Reply to This ]
Very nice &mdash 07/20/05 - 01:12:17 PM
nothing to say &mdash 05/29/05 - 06:38:34 PM
awesome!! super!! &mdash 06/05/05 - 05:07:09 PM
wow... ladies would go crazy if you sing this to them
playing the guitar by the fire!!
very beautiful. great vocal. great lyrics.
nothing more to say! loved it.
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awesome!! super!! &mdash 07/20/05 - 12:53:05 PM
Thanks, JH. Now if only I could be in close proximity to those girls gone wild. [ Reply to This ]
Beautiful...simplicity &mdash 07/20/05 - 11:34:32 AM
This is wonderful Peter. I've had this in the collection for
awhile, but forgot to stop by and comment. Just want you to
know how much I enjoy it...everytime I listen to it.
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Beautiful...simplicity &mdash 07/20/05 - 12:50:41 PM
Thanks, Blaine. I have a new version recorded with my new equipment that I
haven't posted yet. Same thing but much better sounding. [ Reply to This ]
lost in the acoustic waves &mdash 08/23/05 - 10:07:14 PM
one of my favorites...i love the simplicity and purity of the song...minimalistic, stripped down to the core with just the sound waves from your vocal cords undulating in the air [ Reply to This ]
A's &mdash 09/19/05 - 12:59:12 PM
Nice! &mdash 06/21/08 - 04:16:35 PM
Would love to hear the new version, nice track and lovely performance and work. I enjoyed it...
Take Care
- Yeman A. Al-Rawi [ Reply to This ]
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sing this.
Some wonderful raw quality that comes out that makes
one want to listen again and again.
Beautiful guitar melody and very good lyrics.
I agree, that sometimes, less is more,
very much more.
SlimGirlFat
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