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| amani said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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thanks thanks for the feedback. could you suggest where i could "make things change more" examples? Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| Mystified said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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great start! Hehehe. I remember my first loops song--which was my very first composition in GarageBand. :) Welcome to MacJams! You've done a nice job of compiling and ordering these loops! The bass about 1/3 in was a bit dwarfed (soundwise) by the percussion--not sure if you wanted that, but an instrumental solo like that is a nice touch and I'd like to hear it forward in the mix more, myself. Very cool first post. You have a good ear for composition. Looking forward to hearing more! Thanks for posting this! Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth
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| amani said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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great start! Thanks for this detailed feedback, Mystified. This helps when I'm thinking about doing the next songs. I'm going be looped-based for a while-- unfortunately until I learn to play a real instrument. --- Just having fun with GB. Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| drakonis said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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Puts the "EEEeeee" in Funk. Funk is not my genre, so I cannot offer any comparative critiques, but I can say that, although I'm not a funk fan, this was rather nice to listen to... you had a nice balance of rich bass kick drum, midrange guitar, and high end percussion, good staging of beats, then soft pauses... seemed to hold together well. Nice intro song, you came in with a splash! Welcome to MacJams! ttfn, Drakonis Check out my latest song called Lullaby for the Inner Child
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| amani said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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Puts the "EEEeeee" in Funk. Wow, thanks for this feedback. I'm definitely feeling welcomed. Feeling inspired to learn more. --- Just having fun with GB. Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| SlimGirlFat said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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Welcome to Macjams Good first track up amani. I like your choice of loops and your arrangement is pretty good. I do think the percussion is up a little bit too high in places, the synth that comes in is very nice, perhaps yuse that a little in the beginning of the track so it is not quite so unexpected. anyway, well done. look forward to hearing more from you. SlimGirlFat Check out my latest song called Not Enough
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| amani said 1621 days ago (June 18th, 2005) | |
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Welcome to Macjams Slim, I'm going to go back and review the song with this feedback in mind. Thanks so much. I need this. --- Just having fun with GB. Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| TennesseeVic said 1619 days ago (June 19th, 2005) | |
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Nice breaks and all that The bass starts with a strong loop, but then doesn't do a whole lot in the rest of the piece. That feels a bit unbalanced. In fact, the bass goes down in volume. Try to keep that energy up. The sound effects are cool. If you throw in some more (and put some more processing over them) you can actually milk this drum loop into a whole composition. Check out my latest song called Tecmo Superbowl 2009 w/ Dead End (MJRF 2004)
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| amani said 1619 days ago (June 20th, 2005) | |
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Nice breaks and all that Tenneesee, I hear you on this critique. I think I work myself into corners when composing (like the song I'm currently working on) and I don't know how to get out. Very interested in what you mean by "milk the drum beats." --- Just having fun with GB. Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| mandolinquent said 1619 days ago (June 20th, 2005) | |
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Welcome! I agree with Tennessee Vic and Mystified about the bass losing energy... but it's a nice blend of loops. Bear in mind also that most people here have heard every single Jampack loop several times over already on other tracks; so it's hard to be fresh with them, but I think you've succeeded. Thanks for joining in... Check out my latest song called Had We But World Enough
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| amani said 1618 days ago (June 21st, 2005) | |
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Welcome! Definitely agree here. If I hear that frickin RnB Horn 5 loop one more time, I'm gonna puke. But I guess many loops start to wear you if you're limited in your musical abilities. --- Just having fun with GB. Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| perceptualvortex said 1616 days ago (June 22nd, 2005) | |
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Nice grooves I agree with everyone else that you have a good start here. My stuff here is also loops only, so I can sympathize with the challenges you're facing. The grooves here are nice; now it just needs some stronger lead melodies and changes. Get yourself a large supply of loops and make the most of the ones you have via effects, or by combining similar sounding ones. Check out my latest song called Machine Man (w Beastie Boys)
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| dapickle said 1616 days ago (June 23rd, 2005) | |
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well... it gets boring in the middle (all drums) so you should add more instruments at that part, at least a bassline or something. this song is just begging for vocals, though. Keep at it. Check out my latest song called Same As Today
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| amani said 1614 days ago (June 24th, 2005) | |
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well... I'm afraid many of my songs are going to be begging for vocals--which I can't provide. Wish I could. lol But thanks for your feedback. --- Just having fun with GB. Check out my latest song called Night Talk
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| Drew Kopr said 1605 days ago (July 4th, 2005) | |
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Cool groove! It starts out very cool, but then the volume of everything but the drums dropped out. Otherwise, this is very cool. Check out my latest song called WinterSong
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| lexiexd said 1573 days ago (August 5th, 2005) | |
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good song just wanted to say i like this song |
| lexiexd said 1573 days ago (August 5th, 2005) | |
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good song just wanted to say i like this song |
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juedm
use of loops. that's what most will probably say!
Maybe go for adjusting some volume levels and making things change more would be cool for this piece.
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