Your voice is unbelievably beautiful, evoking Kate Bush and Tori Amos but conveying tremendous emotion, too. The song is a perfect match of voice to lyrics and the piano just sends it over the top into Perfect World.

I hate to just rave on and on, but I wouldn't change a thing about this. I'm about to give my first 10.


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What a great find. I love this, how the melody shifts in the
most subtle yet so dramatic ways. You have a great voice
and you deliver the lines with such sincerity. The violins
sound perfect in there. While I like the arrangement I don't
care for the tone of the piano; it sounds too... twangy,
particularly on the hard-hit notes. That's the only critical
thing I can say about this.

So nice to hear your music. Welcome to MacJams.

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I downloaded your song and found that none of the Artist
info had been filled out on the mp3 file tags. A lot of people
forget to do this. The problem with leaving the info blank is
that when people download it there is nothing to attribute
the music to the artist; it just gets filed in iTunes as "Artist:
Unknown".

You can either set the artist info to automatically be assigned
to your songs in the Garage Band prefs or fill in the info
manually in iTunes.

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There's not a darn thing I dislike about this song.
Excellent lyrics. Whatever that sound at the beginning of
the track reminded me of a grandfather clock ticking the
hours away. Love the build up to the ending. This is a
seriously nice piece of music.

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again
you are extremely talented.. Nice to have another female
vocalist on Macjams..
I agree with Pg that the piano sounds a little tinny compared
to the softness of the strings and your voice, but a great
track nonetheless
D/L
SlimGirlFat

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Well constructed, arranged and sung. Beautiful piece.
There is a depth to the vocal that is perfect for this. I
agree with some previous comments about the piano, but
that is fixed easily enough.

Some technical suggestions--posting lyrics helps
tremendously, especially someone like me who is
musically dyslexic and focuses almost completely on the
music instead of words unless I can read along.

Some general info about how you put the song together,
the software, mics, keyboard, etc. is also interesting for
those of us who are trying to do the same thing.

And if you don't put your name on your mp3 pgreenstone
will crab, crab, crab.

Again, Welcome to MacJams. This is a good way to show
up, dove. 9-8-8-9

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This is very, very good! I can agree with piano being a little
bit too sharp on the higher tones, but the voice and the
arrangement...woooaaahhh! What comes to my mind is
Portishead for some reason, not musically, but in your voice;
so rich, deep, sincere... The string really help lift it where
needed and adds a softness that works perfectly. D/L.

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second helping of that fine vocal delivery....uh huh.....very
soulful...the saloon piano sound was ok to my ears....your
voice packs such emotion.....to itunes with u....and my
ipod...!

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Excellent, what everyone said. Glad you posted this. Since you said you don't have regular access to a computer, I hope sometime you will see that we're all going crazy for you.

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Excited that you have posted here.

Again nice singing, (heard you on Shame)

Thanks for sharing these tunes

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Beautiful vocals, great arrangement, real emotion.
Although your voice is a completely different tone in
general, certain low notes reminded me of Sinead
O'Connor's sweeping soulful tone. Outstanding.

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i hear kate bush more than anyone - nice one! there's something about the piano that's not quite right - maybe its the way it was recorded/miced

anyway, a lovely piece - hope to hear lots more from you in the future

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This song has many layers of melodic variety and
expression, and nice change-up of rhythms. All of these
elements keep the interest high in this song.

I must agree with some of the other commenters who
mentioned the piano sound here....it really is a bit too
bright, for my ears anyway. I can see where you were
going with it, providing a punctuation for the emotion of
the lyrics, but it ended up being too much by the song's
end.

This is a great tune, regardless.

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great voice. Good deliverry. I like how this song had
purpose. Your lyrics were great. Just a good song overall.

Mr. S

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Thank you.................for sharing this beautiful work..................Very very good!
PB

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Beautifully performed, but I couldn't quite get the gist of what it's about...sounds like it's about some trying and dying...pretty depressing stuff...just seemed like a bunch of examples of pathetic people....I think it needs a bridge to explain or give hope...more style than substance...Good though...Leonard Cohen's been doing it for years...lol

WM

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when depressed, it is hard to put details together. it is hard to shake sad childhood memories, maybe because you feel helppless, like children often do. you caught it all with this. wished you'd complete the song page better, though, with artwork, lyrics, a more complete description...

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For all your comments, a hearty thank you and big hug go
out to you-this was the first song I ever wrote. More on
that later---I'm getting lyrics to my friend so she can type
them up. Thank you for listening--jd

-glad you're liking it.

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...the Kate Bush and Tori Amos connections...

...and in good ways...

But your voice is still your own.

This sounds fresh, melodic, emotive...the piano IS trebly/
metallic on my system, but that is somewhat improved by
the nice solid bass tone underneath...

The songwriting is perfect. It's a little opera. Centerpiece
of a show. Lights go down, single spot irised on the
piano...

This is real good.

Ed

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Not typical. That's something hard to accomplish and you seem have done it!

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