… but it's not half bad. On a critical note, I think the shift
in style that comes about a third of the way through the
track, and then vanishes again shortly after, is totally out
of keeping with the rest of it. It spoils the flow of what
otherwise is a pretty good piece. I'd also consider putting
the spoken word parts a bit higher in the mix – I could
barely hear them, making them offputting rather than
intriguing. But overall this is an interesting effort and
bodes well for future postings. Nice one!

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Funnily enough, that bit is the one bit I redid when removing Peter Cook from the original, and I did it in a hurry, plus the dog ate my homework ... well spotted, guv, and I hope to do more like this when I'm a better slide player.

Cheers.

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"You read him his rights while I shave his legs."

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I like the feel of this, definitley in the realm of the Animals by floyd. I think the slide parts are stonger when they're not multi-tracked, a little slide can go a long way. I highly recommend trying a ceramic slide on acoustic. I bought a moonslide and it sounds really smooth and creamy. anyways, I like the tune and keep the slide stuff coming.

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This is why I love MacJams - the criticism is always constructive. I'll have a go at remixing this after I've had a closer listen to Animals again, and I'll check out a moonslide when I'm in the U.K. over the summer.

Thanks for the encouraging words.

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"You read him his rights while I shave his legs."

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The music is refreshing, but the spoken bits seem like an afterthought, perhaps because they appear so late in the song, as well as being hard to hear. My suggestion would be doing one of two things - either starting the words earlier, inculcating them as an integral part of the piece, and making them loud enough to be heard (what good is a joke if you can't hear the punchline?), ... or dropping them completely. Right now, it's trying to be two things at once, and acheiving neither. My vote would be for keeping the words. A selection of Peter Cook-isms would work well with this music, and it would be a good comedic project to work on. (I still remember being blown away, as a teenager, by the sly humor of his 1967 "Bedazzled.")

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As it's a work in progress, I welcome your ideas. I'm leaning towards dumping them in favour of a slowed - down version. It'll have to wait until August either way, as I'm off for my summers hols. I'll have time to mull over what to do. (The Peter Cookisms I'd like to include are so rude as to be totally inappropriate to the music, so it's perhaps better to drop them.)

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This is the Exorcist meets George Harrison and has a good time (which lets face it is unusual). Great.

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It is a bit Tubular Bellsy. I remember listening to it in the Music room at Stafford Grammar School with my old pal Richard. I wonder what became of him?

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"You read him his rights while I shave his legs."

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