I think the overly abrasive distortion sets the tone nicely. The words are pointed and the whole thing just has a great "raw" quality to it. I like the accompanying higher vocal a lot. I would suggest polishing this up, but I think it may lose some of it's charm. Has an early college indie feeling to it.

(And, not to find something funny in a serious subject, but your typo in the description had me rolling in the floor. The possibilities for "the downward spiral of addition" are endless.)

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Thanks, I fixed the typo. LOL!

You got what I was going for here. Anger, rage, abrasiveness, fear, confusion. Just raw and ugly, the story of a life destroyed.

kind of built around the movie "Requium for a Dream"

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The music is great. Loved it. It fits.

The only trouble I have is with a couple lines in the lyrics.
They took away from the song (my opinion).

Specifically "her religion was herion" and "she didn't love
herself".

You have beautiful imagery going on with "lost in a fog",
"she bore the stigmata on her wrists", and "then she let
go".

With imagery like that, having being 'told' that she didn't
love herself or that she was addicted to herion seems...
forced...

Other than that little nitpick, I really liked the piece.

nyakki

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Thanks!

I agree that some of the lyrics are a little obvious, although you sometimes have to be in order to illustrate a feeling. Thank you though for the honest opinion, I appreciate that you took the time to read them and comment.

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Lyrics were fine. Good drumming and the distortion does
fit with the lyrics although it was a bit daunting at first. I
really like when you stop and have the little harmony
singing.

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Thanks!

I kind of wanted it to be shocking and ugly and distorted to illustrate the feel of the subject.



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