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Rough track before I finalise - constructive critisism very welcome
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| Gav said 1588 days ago (July 22nd, 2005) | |
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Promise Hi Steveg, Thanks a million for the feedback. I recorded this the night before I uploaded it and on hearing it again the bass does sound too much. The mix does need loads of work but since I'm new to garageband and the whole mixing thing I'll have to knuckle down on that one! Cheers Gav Check out my latest song called Understand
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| nisper said 1590 days ago (July 20th, 2005) | |
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Great start Overall, very nice piece. Agree with steveg. As much as I love bass (and I do), it is mixed a little heavy. Violins are a nice touch. Check out my latest song called Loose Anna By You III (w/ Epileptic Gibbon)
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| Gav said 1588 days ago (July 22nd, 2005) | |
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Great start Thanks nisper, A friend of mine who's plays violin in an orchestra did that in ten minutes. Very talented. I just micked him up and let him fly! Will be back with a more polished mix so thanks alot for posting and watch this space! Gav Check out my latest song called Understand
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| bronco said 1590 days ago (July 20th, 2005) | |
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Nice vocal I would have a softer opening with maybe the acoustic strumming first before the electric. And strictly for my taste I like a cleaner lead sound on this type of melodic song. It seems like you have two different styles going on in the same song. On the one hand you have a nice voice, a good melody and a sensitive violin and then you have very loud distorted guitar and bass. And the overall volume seems too loud, I had to cut my volume when this song came on. Also the ending went on for too long doing the now nowl. Don't get me wrong, I like the song and you but the production and arrangement does need a lot of work. Check out my latest song called Strange Feeling
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| Gav said 1588 days ago (July 22nd, 2005) | |
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Nice vocal Hi Bronco, Thanks for the post - very helpful. I like your suggestion about bringing in the acoustic first quietly. I does seem to blast out - especially with the high volume you mentioned. The guitar does seem a bit rough and ready but it's something I plan to mellow down a bit. I will bring some drums into it too to make the 'now now now' bits a more dynamic but I agree with what you said about it being too long - think I'll fade it out sooner. Glad you like it and really appreciate your suggestions. Gav Check out my latest song called Understand
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| SingingB-dayCard said 1590 days ago (July 20th, 2005) | |
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Cool Great vocal style. Good rhythm guitar, I like that catchy riff too. It does sound unpolished, but it's got loads of potential. Check out my latest song called Pop Rock Birthday Song
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| Gav said 1588 days ago (July 22nd, 2005) | |
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Cool Thanks alot. Glad you liked it - unpolised, yes. will have a revised version soon - thanks. Check out my latest song called Understand
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| Komrade K said 1569 days ago (August 9th, 2005) | |
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It's all there Great vocals and tune but as you say, it's a bit rough as yet. Would suggest some instrumental sections - maybe a couple of full length breaks - as there's a lot of vocal right now which (combined with the strummed guitar) gets a bit wearing after a while. If you do have an instrumental bring the fiddle right forward - it'll have a lot of impact. Glad you said there was a real fiddle on the track - I was going to give up playing if that was a Garage Band instrument! Check out my latest song called Ye Mariners All
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| Anyse said 1564 days ago (August 15th, 2005) | |
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oops! Well, I think that you posted this one in the wrong place. I was startled to hear an electric buzzing through. However, I really like this melody as well as some of the vocal treatment. It is really a surprising pearl among the oysters. I wasn't going to listen to it at first but you sucked me in. Darn! I hate when people do that! LOL Add a mandolin to this one which, at times, would replace the electric guitar. I can really see this as effective in the verses but not in the chorus. Please, vary the backup acoustic? guitar in the slow parts because it becomes a bit tiring after a bit. The "No, no, no, no" needs to be quieter and not compete over the regualr verse and lead singer. This is not a good place for wo voices to be "equal." It needs to have the notion conveyed that there is conflict psychologically rather than one of physcial blatancy. |
| paxeden said 1397 days ago (January 29th, 2006) | |
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very emotive this is overall an excellent song in terms of vocals and ambiance... what you have captured here (which I think lacks in most music these days) is that sweet "realness" and crunchy up-front sounds that feel like heat or 5 O'clock in august... this was present more often during the 60s and 70s with singer-songwriters...and seems to get processed out now. the ending is perfect. my biggest suggestion is to pick a place in the song where you think you could drop out some of the backing instruments and let your vocals and perhaps one instrument stand alone for 8 to 16 measures, preferably having the instrumentation re-enter the song at a point where there's an important lyric to punctuate. That would break up the song a bit and create a little tension buildup...then payoff! love it. -pax Check out my latest song called mister
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| E-Frame Wrecker said 477 days ago (August 5th, 2008) | |
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Nice Enjoyed the instrument selection. Acoustic, Viola, and a gritty guitar and a very charismatic voice. I'd keep it like this and record another. Great job. Check out my latest song called Being With You
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| Gav said 473 days ago (August 10th, 2008) | |
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Thanks Thanks alot for the comment. Its been a long time since anyone dropped by this song! I actually re-recorded this a while ago an re-titled it 'smile' if you want to check out the finished version! Its a bit different. Thanks again for dropping by! G Check out my latest song called Understand
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| Gav said 473 days ago (August 10th, 2008) | |
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Thanks Thanks alot for the comment. Its been a long time since anyone dropped by this song! I actually re-recorded this a while ago an re-titled it 'smile' if you want to check out the finished version! Its a bit different. Thanks again for dropping by! G Check out my latest song called Understand
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steveg
Liked the 'lectric intro, seemed a little "electric country" too
Still you sing better than I do, but overall it's okay although
the bass seems overpowering at times. Sod it can you dumb
down the bass, use some more electric guitar and let me
know
Cheers