That is a funny story, that you accidentally found out
about the internal mic on your Mac!

I liked the overall ambience, and your voice was appropos
(good singing). The mix of blips & symphonic
orchestration & kick drum was interesting. Some critiques
though... having the drum kicking panned over to the
right was distracting, you may want to bring that closer to
center. The piece was somewhat static, not much of a
buildup. You may want to try building up more layers as
it progresses, as well as intensifying the drums too. The
final acapella singing was a little too loud and sounded
like it clipped some... and you may want to leave a single
bass note (cellos?) under that final sung part, instead of
leaving it by itself... dunno, those are my personal
thoughts. :-)
ttfn,
Drakonis

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Hi Drakonis

Thanks for taking the time to listen and for providing such thorough feedback.
When you talk about 'intensifying the drums' do you mean just cranking the
volume up - or something else?

Thanks again

KK

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You'll probably never read this but I've just listened to this track again for the first time in over a year and everything you say is absolutely correct - your a fine critic and I really welcome your feedback.

KK

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If you hadn't said that the vocal was an accident I would
never have guessed ... it sounds absolutely right for the
song. Funny how these accidental things often turn out to
be just the job. I love the synth sounds, and I think you've
combined them really skilfully. Maybe it could do with a
bit more variety towards the end ... but it really is a great
sounding track. I'm impressed!

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Well what can I say Rebsie? Thanks very much - I'm all aglow!!

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… because there's so much derivative rubbish out
there. But this helps to break down some of the
cliches and goes somewhere interesting. My main
caveat is that I reckon it's a little too long. It's got
great ideas but you use them up before the end and
from there on in you're just repeating them. Maybe
shorten it a little or do something new in those last
few minutes. Otherwise, though, this helped me feel
better about the genre.

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Yeah - I wasn't sure about the length, sometimes it works well for me and
sometimes I'm not so sure. I have a saying which goes: "If in doubt, cut it out" -
and perhaps I should listen to myself!

Glad I've been able to act as a positive ambassador for the genre!

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Nicely done. I really enjoyed listening to this tune.

You should have more accidental discoveries. They come out good.

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