this is a nice song. It has a good classic feel to it.

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I'll get the nitpicks out of the way first. It could use some fine tuning on
the EQ. Everything sounds a little too squeezed. And, okay, this is really
anal, BUT, when you sing " a first order derivative", you stretch it out. It
would sound better if you sang it fast, short and syncopated. Lastly, you
don't need that last voiceover at the very end.

Okay, that being said. The songwriting is first rate, the arrangement
excellent, the singing also. This one's in my Library.

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Nice energy, straight forward classic rock. Solid tune. The humor is very
nice, could use even more. Couple of ideas: With the relentlessness of the
beat, a moment to reset, a little break might help, to let yourself (and the
listener) take a breath between sections. Also, I'd love a little change in
vocal range, either through a layered harmony or a modulation up or
down in a bridge when you maybe think about something else for one
moment but then go back to the main theme. In my ears, it needs a
moment or two of variation to really soar. But solid tune, again.

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Yes, great remix and great song!!
Wow!
Silver

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i like this, its has a nice energy, as Tobin pointed out. I also like the
idea of not simply thinking about someone when you shouldnt be, but
actually thinking about not thinking about them...which i guess means
you are thinking about them...lol! Anyway, its a good idea to revolve a
song around. The little humerous phone call bit was an interesting
addition too. I think some more variation in the vocals wouldnt go
amiss, but other than that, great track! :-)

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Another great tune. You guys always sound tight. What's good about
this is obvious, so I'll get to the critical bits: 1. I think the backup
vocals during the chorus could come up a little; I can hear them
enough to know they are there but not very well. They seem about
right during the bridge part though. Might sound nicer to have them
sung at a harmony pitch. (Just a thought) 2. The phone conversion
parts, well, honestly I don't care much for that in there (seems a little
hokey and stilted). But aside from liking or not liking that phone stuff
in there or not it sounds much too loud in the mix.

That said, I must repeat, this is solid stuff. You guys have a great
sound and come off as pros. Always catchy and smart. I'd buy your
album if you put one together.

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Really first rate song-writing. I just love the line "I'm thinking about not
thinking about you". Keys are outstanding- man I love hearing keys
(especially organ) and synths in a song...

Nit pics? A couple- thought the backing vocs could have been louder
along with the organ piece just before the phone bit.

It's a terrific song that will go nicely with the other music I've downloaded
of yours.



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a pop maker! This song contains variety of idea and great melody.
Thanks for sharing syddavis! Your song all cool!


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It's funny, of all of the cliches in pop music, the you're-not-on-my-
mind
cliche is the one that I enjoy deriding the most, because if this former
lover really wasn't on the songwriter's mind, the song would have been
about something else, right?

But here you have circumvented my complaint by having the song
actually be about you thinking about not thinking about her. Just
that little twist. Such a fine line...

The first-order derivitive line tickles my math degree, just like
the C line in Yahoo Girl tickled my computer science degree.
I think you're very good at this geek-pop genre. I hope to hear more.


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wow, the form scraping routine ate my plus plus.
That's allright, just a chance for me to say more.

The constructive comments that you have received so
far contain excellent suggestions, especially the one
that suggests making the mock phone call either
more subtle, more realistic, or absent.

But, really, that's a bit like complaining about Cindy
Crawford's mole.

---
<a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/14549">my latest track</a>.

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this is a feel good song, i think. good for a getting-over-you song.

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I like the whole track. Like your vocals very much.
Excellent rythym great arrangement and sounds.
very very cool song, Yes, I'd buy your album too.
D/L
SlimGirlFat


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This is a cool tune. The "...thinking 'bout you..." backing vocals make
it. Nice touch. Great use of different instrument sounds too. And, of
course, awesome voice.

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Yes nice vocal works for a nice pop
type of tune. Nice writing as well and the arrangement
works well

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Okay. I am quite obviously not a music expert. That being said, your target audience isn't just limited to music experts is it? The beginning of the song hooked me in and the changes and beat kept me listening.

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I love this song. Sounds very professional. I especially loved the keyboard
solo! Good job, would like to hear more!

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I love this song. Sounds very professional. I especially loved the keyboard
solo! Good job, would like to hear more!

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I love this song. Sounds very professional. I especially loved the keyboard
solo! Good job, would like to hear more!

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Wow very cool song . u know i'm not thinking about this song, not
thinking...........

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