Reminds me of REM! Sweet diddies Capt. King Snake!

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I thought I had heard the last arrangement of this, but I guess not. :)
Your voices mix very well - and the song is somewhat radically and
surprisingly transformed here with the additions and rearrangement. Very
well done.

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Good collab. Nice mix and good vocals on both parts!
A catchy beat, as well.
Good job!

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Thanks, Einar.

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is not one of my favorites, but this tune sounds good with
the words chosen. Richard your voice is very good on this song,
but what I really loved were the background vocals, those were
fantastic and my favorite part.
Now, I have to have Mr. Wounded for some background vocals on
my songs :)
Good collaboration guys.


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Thanks, Johnny. Yes, those are awfully cool passages TW laid down. My
favorite parts too!

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This is cool, really like that guitarplay in the intro. The vocals sounds great. There are even som times during this tune that it reminds me a bit of the doors!?:) killing stuff

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that im not best placed to comment on this song.
But as they say, I don't know whats good, but I know what I like.
This sounds reassuringly well produced, by which i mean
everything works nicely, and moreover you've got a nices tyle of
singing.
I also respect the idea of putting a cool poem to music aswell, i
recently did a dnb tune with someone "mcing" the rhyme of the ancient
mariner over the top.

On the ngative, the excess of echo on the chorus makes it sound a
little cheesy in my book.

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that im not best placed to comment on this song.
But as they say, I don't know whats good, but I know what I like.
This sounds reassuringly well produced, by which i mean
everything works nicely, and moreover you've got a nices tyle of
singing.
I also respect the idea of putting a cool poem to music aswell, i
recently did a dnb tune with someone "mcing" the rhyme of the ancient
mariner over the top.

On the ngative, the excess of echo on the chorus makes it sound a
little cheesy in my book.

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that im not best placed to comment on this song.
But as they say, I don't know whats good, but I know what I like.
This sounds reassuringly well produced, by which i mean
everything works nicely, and moreover you've got a nices tyle of
singing.
I also respect the idea of putting a cool poem to music aswell, i
recently did a dnb tune with someone "mcing" the rhyme of the ancient
mariner over the top.

On the ngative, the excess of echo on the chorus makes it sound a
little cheesy in my book.

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Thanks, broadside. We appreciate the comments. Very insightful.

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thanks for all the neat comments!


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Music was extremely well done! My own personal taste could have used
a little less reverb/echo on the counter point vocal. The lyric that wars
are fought because of love came off as nonsensical at best and
disgusting at worse. I know poetic license and you were just trying to
have a dramatic symbolism. But the idea that the very worst thing that
humanity has ever done is for the wonderful emotion of love is just not
computing. We blew the arms and legs off of that Iraqui boy for love?

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Tom was thinking Helen of Troy. I'll let him say more about that. I agree that
there may be a disconnect between Shakepeare's theme of "lovers quietly
accepting mutually comforting lies in their advancing years" and the theme of
"anything for the love of a woman". But Tom's chorus sounds so cool that
many people don't care what he's singing. Maybe I was careless in allowing
Tom to enfold his lyrics into the Shakespeare sonnet. Maybe not. It's an
experiment, man. Hopefully, this will spawn something in another artist. It
was just too cool to not post.

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Yes, I thought of the Helen of Troy angle also and if it had been pitched that
way as referring to one mythical war and not all of them in general then I
could have accepted that. Of course, I am maybe over-reacting. As you point
out most people pay no attention to the lyrics if it sounds good and I did like
the music as I pointed out. I came into songwriting from writing poetry so I
always pay more attention to the words than most folks.

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I pay LOTS of attention to the words, too. I also came to music via my own
tortured poetry. I am making an exception to my rule with this song. Her are
some other thoughts I penned to Tom, just so you know I was on top of the
dilemma from the start:

"Tom:

After I was able to relax, and with zero ambient noise in the room, I listened
to your mix of WMLS several times. I think it's a rap. I like it very much. The
percussion, electric guitar and organ are superb. I do understand your words
now. There is an interesting counterpoint not just with your ambient vocals
but with the words you sing...another take on the dynamics of a man's
relationship to a woman. Shakespeare speaks of the lies lovers whisper to
each other in advancing years...lies that keep them in each other's
embrace...call it "gentle conquest and control". War is like an invasion of a
tent wherein lies the forbidden fruit -- the daughter of the foreign king.
One's passion to consummate such a union can be all-consuming and beyond
reason.

I'd like to post this song as is and see what reaction it gets. I think it will do
well. Could you send me whatever you'd like to say for song description,
hardware and software?

Very professionally done! I'd love to do another collab. Thanks again.

Richard Schletty"


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perceptualvortex once said to me "I don't know what you're singing about,
but it doesn't matter." http://www.macjams.com/song/3257

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Bronco, first of all thank you for your commentary, I am always interested in
all veiws and opinions, When I added the lyrics to When My Love Swears I
couldve easily expanded on the themes contained within the sonnet, but I
chose not to inorder to give the verse and chorus some contrast and I guess
it worked. The sonnet's passages of love are beautifully written as only
shakespeare could write them. With my lyrics I tried to show the extremes of
tragedy in which people go through all in the name of love, be it crimes of
passion or war on a large scale. In no way did I intend for the lyrics to glorify
war and I am sorry if you took it that way, but I often like to hold a mirror up
to humanity and I guess in this case it was done indirectly, which is good in
my opinion>It is my firm believe that we as humans need to further
evolve...the lyrics really don't state any opinion, they just exist as they are,
just as if a movie might tell a story without saying if the events are right or
wrong.

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Yes, splendid job! And to my ears you are just keeping growning as a
singer Richard! You have gradually developed a really nice and personal
style ... or is it just me who is learning to hear you qualities ... no I dont
think so. Keep on! This is getting just soo good!

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The best version so far! I've been through the Jazz, Rock and Industrial and I like this one the best! Nice job guys!

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