Hm... it is very simple and repetitive, didn't really keep my interest.
However, the raspy sawblade lead did indeed make me wonder if
important parts of my brain were being removed with rusty pliers and
potato peelers. And I mean that in a good way... that is, you definitely
got me feeling queazy and uncomfortable.
ttfn,
Drakonis, shaking scrap metal out of his head

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Hm... it is very simple and repetitive, didn't really keep my interest.
However, the raspy sawblade lead did indeed make me wonder if
important parts of my brain were being removed with rusty pliers and
potato peelers. And I mean that in a good way... that is, you definitely
got me feeling queazy and uncomfortable.
ttfn,
Drakonis, shaking scrap metal out of his head

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Yah, thats why it needs vocals, or a guitar solo.

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I believe this needs some sort of "drums" and some sort of structure... I can imagine this as a hard rock or heavy metal song, but not without, well, hard rock or heavy metal!

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the rhythem part sort of near the beggining is nice, but doesn't seem to flow too well. it's very choppy. if you want to try and use a poem of mine for lyrics i have some very dark painful writings that may be sung. i do like the sound of the rhythem

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...with previous commentators - it gets a little repeatitive.
There were some sounds in it, though, that I kinda liked - very psychotic
and depressive, but in a good way.
I think it should break out in a certain point. The songs seems to build a
bit towards something, but then it leaves you just hangin' there between
creepy sounds and melodies.
This has some potential - with a little more work this could get pretty
good.

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Got to love a song named Evisceration.
Websters: disembowel; divest of strength and force. evisceration.ha ha...cool I thought I'd write some lyrics for you, you ought to sing them yourself. I'm assume you have a fine set of vocal chords

From the beginning
to the end
My guts are screaming
question once again

Running from the alter
lost in pain
sacrifice my peace of mind
anguished tears in rain

Broken and bleary eyed
Only left to roam
follow the setting sun
Never heading home

Eviscerate my empty heart
beating weaker still
Always lost always lonely
Slowly lose my will

There you go. see...easy
inspired by the the title and the music

great job! Sing! it's easy. why have someone else do it?


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I love this track! great work man.

DOS

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I like those lyrics too.

DOS

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Deadication of Sufacation

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here that could potentially play a part in a song. There is a clean
balance of sound but it needs alot more development before it could
really be enjoyed. It's worth your time to keep messing with this and
see where it takes you. cheers I hope this is constructive. :)

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Naggle fundiddle carepe el munchero cotton blood sash wash blood tister poison piss blasphemy puntang shiver supper buns pies puke and parties! Needs metal guitar!

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what amazing chops and song writing it must have taken years of
practice to develop such mind numbing skills. I'm really surprized you
have not been signed yet truly amazing.

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did someone forget to quantize????????
do do do, dah dah dah..................what????????
this to me would be what a kraftwerk sound check would sound like......sorta

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not sure what you mean, lol

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