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Breathless Acoustic by Joshosh [Email]
Genre: Acoustic Rock

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Comments: 15
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Plays: 312
Last Played: Sep 20, 2008 - 05:08:39 PM
Downloads: 72
Fans: 3
Uploaded: Dec 08, 2005 - 09:52:31 PM
Last Updated: Dec 08, 2005 - 08:41:18 PM



Keywords:
breathless (1)waiting (16)away (18)acoustic (477)
Description:
A re-mix to attempt to make this song more powerful. I would love to hear any suggestions from people on how to make this song sound bigger, and whether or not it needs a different instrumentation.

Lyrics:
In the action he surrounds himself with silence
And a stillness then descends among the crowd
In his head he has retreated, the privacy of the defeated
And he doesn't seem to realize that the people aren't staring anymore

He is somehow led away but his mind is so astray he doesn't realize it's his feet that's done the leading
Getting wet now in the rain overshadowed by his pain
he passes people more concerned with their own problems

Away She Goes

Chorus:
Breathless and waiting for you
Then pushed into something new
He's down on his knees
Lost in losing you
Saying yeah sure I'm OK
But dying a little evryday
He just can't believe she'd let it slip
Away

Days turn into weeks which somehow pass into the emptiness
He's back to what some consider normal
But those little things per day, will they ever go away
And he feels haunted

Blinded by the hope provided, hanging on her words
Hoping they convey a hidden meaning
Racing towards distractions hoping they will fill the void
They can fill the void

Oh can they, can they?

Away she goes.

Chorus:

Let me, Let me, Let me
Remind you.

Chorus:

Hardware:
Powerbook, mic, martin D15 acoustic

Software:
garageband only.
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Heartfelt! &mdash 12/09/05 - 07:36:50 AM
Has a great feel! You might want to bring the guitar up a touch.

Great voice!

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Heartfelt! &mdash 12/09/05 - 08:29:38 AM
Thx. You're right about the guitars. I realized it when I went back into garageband yesterday. Thanks for listening!

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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cool singing and playing &mdash 12/09/05 - 08:51:24 AM
Good voice here!

Like that soul, especially all the softness and transitions into louder
sounds. Thanks for shariing your talent.



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cool singing and playing &mdash 12/09/05 - 09:16:40 AM
Now, if I could only play guitar like you I'd be in business! Your music is consistently outstanding, so thank YOU for sharing. Emmanuel is really beautiful.

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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Better &mdash 12/09/05 - 01:18:07 PM
I like this version better than the other version.

I'd love to hear you do more with the guitars. When I record anything, I always try and lay down at least 2 completely different guitar tracks over each other, just to fill the chord/scale in playing in. That's just an idea, not a complaint.

I totally dug the last chorus when you began to sing your f'ing ass off - makes me get into it. I guess that's what music is about, right?




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Better &mdash 12/09/05 - 02:03:55 PM
Honestly, I'd love to see what you could do with the guitars on this. Any interest in adding some dented flavor here?

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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Seriously &mdash 12/09/05 - 02:45:07 PM
Hell YEAH.

If you want me to give it a shot, hit me up on email and we can set things up.


This kicks ass.

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Seriously &mdash 12/09/05 - 02:48:42 PM
Hell YEAH.

If you want me to give it a shot, hit me up on email and we can set things up.


This kicks ass.

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Seriously &mdash 12/09/05 - 02:49:26 PM
Hell YEAH.

If you want me to give it a shot, hit me up on email and we can set things up.


This kicks ass.

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Seriously &mdash 12/09/05 - 02:50:23 PM
Oops, bastard DSL.

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First of all... &mdash 12/13/05 - 07:12:39 PM
...this is a really, really good song. I love the lyrics and you sing it with
a lot of emotion. It suffers from some problems with production, but I
definitely think you need to go back, revisit, rerecord cause this one
will be worth it.

All of the things I'm about to point out are things that have been
pointed out to me on various songs of mine. First, there's a lot of hiss
in the song. I don't know what type of mic you are using or if you are
using a pre-amp, but, as I have just recently discovered, a really good
mic (doesn't have to be expensive) and a pre-amp (again, doesn't have
to be expensive), make a HUGE difference in the vocals and in
recording accoustic guitar. When you do record vocals, make sure you
are far enough from the mic where you don't get a bunch of pops. You
can buy or make a pop filter for your mic and that will help.

On the production, definitely the guitar needs to be brought up some.
As you get to more powerful sections, you may mave to back it down
slightly so it doesn't overwhelm. One of the things I do to get a wider,
thicker sound is to pan everything off center. Most of the time, I
duplicate tracks and them move them off center. You really kind of
have to monkey around with this until you find a spot where they
sound right. (I usually keep my vocals toward the center and spread
guitars, keyboards, bass and drums out further.)

As for the arrangement, I would definitely experiment with some
different instrumentation, especially as the energy of the song builds.
Some bass, definitely. Maybe some strings and a touch of piano (at
least the way I hear it) and then the soft ending.

Like I said before, I like what I'm hearinf so far and I think the tune is
worth you putting some more work into it. I hope you got something
out of my rambling (If you already knew this stuff, then I apologize for
rambling). I'm no master of recording or mixing, but I've learned a lot
from others here at MJ and I'm glad to pass it on.

Good luck and I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with this one.

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First of all... &mdash 12/13/05 - 10:46:01 PM
Wow, that may be the most helpful comment I've gotten this year. I have no pre-amp, hence the hiss. I'm hoping the chiristmahanakwanza season will remedy that problem. Second, I duplicated the vox and guitars and worked on the panning, and what do you know! Huge improvement. My dad added some kick ass bass lines, my sisters did some nice harmony work, and Dented has been gracious enough to bring his significant guitar talents into the fold too. I'm really excited about how this song may turn out. Keep on the look out for the finished product, and thank you SOOO much for the suggestions.

-Josh

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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Powerful vocals! &mdash 12/14/05 - 11:19:02 PM
Fantastic voice, Josh! With that alone you'll be posting killer tunes here,
I can tell. Great lyrics -- nice storytelling. I love good storytelling in
lyrics. Really wonderful, Josh. What a joy!

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A very solid song &mdash 12/14/05 - 11:27:02 PM
And sung very well!
You have a great voice. A better mic would let it shine--and would be
great for when you sing full voice.
Looking over previous comments...yup. yup. yup ;)
Hiss would be helped with a better mic setup. Do experiment with gain
levels, distance from the mic, pop filter.
Added percussion, bass etc would really round out this tune. But the
guitar playing is great! More of it balanced to the voice...yes.
Keep singing, though! You do have a great voice and wonderful
expression!



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feeling &mdash 12/21/05 - 10:01:04 PM
it has some good feel to it. but could use some fine tuning. as stated bringing up the guitar will help. in the very beggining it sounds almost like its just vocals. so just bring the instrumentation up a little.

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