This is a wicked great tune and I immediately fell into it! There's a sort of Lennon-esque quality to it, dreamy-yet-dark. Your voice is just wonderful, the harmonies, both parallel and backing, are superb. Production is top-notch. IlLove the line "broken back from placing stones upon my grave." This is a great subject and you handle it with a quiet, reserved intensity that really fits well with the overall mood. My one critique involves the bridges ("it's a mad world") - to my ears, they don't resound melodically like the rest of the song does. The chord changes and harmonies are killer, but the melody, to me, seems unresolved, and your vocals don't sound as sure-footed here as they do throughout the piece, where every note seems woven into the fabric. The bridge is a kvetch, because this tune really knocks my socks off! Keep up the excellent work.

D/L 8-8-8-8

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thanks for the comments, I found it really interesting what you had to
say about the song. What would you suggest be subtley different for
the chorus? I am pretty into it, but I would like to know how it was less
resounding than the verse. I think I do need to play with the backing
vocal levels and blends for the chorus and maybe add some more
instrumental transition into them. thanks again.

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This is so good. Please consider posting your stuff under Folk Rock, cuz
it is great stuff and would find a great audience their. Love your stuff.

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thanks tobin, yeah I have a really hard time putting my tunes into a genre, but I think you are right. Glad you like it this song was a big step for me.

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Dem have two choices, Rastafari or war, me choose Rastafari....praise Jah!

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