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Keywords:
pulchritude (2), piano (602), hip-hop (60), rap (166), girl (114), music (148), love (945), trees (9), breathe (8), peace (95), breeze (7), Kurbstomp (48), Holistik (40)
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Description:
This song sprung from a piano piece I wrote while well inspired.
Lyrics:
[Chorus]
She deserves much better than this
Why she's with him I never did get
She's wit' him instead while I'm sittin' in bed
Lost in my thoughts of her
She deserves much better than this
When she's with me the rhythm is set
She'll get in my head but she's wit' him instead
Lost in my thoughts of her
She's like a shadow, a friend of light
Blackness of yin that'll blend with white
But go beneath her surface and her limits are gone
When together I get the feeling we could live in a song
A riveting one, the type that'll make you feel whole
Wit' her I believe we can trace where dreams go
Even if we alone I believe that we've grown
Deep inside the secrets that only the trees know
The leaves blow based on the nature that she shows
People tend to take her for granted but please don't
Her fire is eternal, no need to restoke
When I listen to the words she speaks I breathe slow
Age deep relief, a breeze so peaceful
That if I'm lost or hurt the peace depleats both
She keeps me warm while feet beneath slow
Degrees below when I should freeze but heat wont
[Chorus]
See? In the end if I'm wit 'er it doesn't matter
But he don't even think of her freedom, it doesn't add up
I don't have any complaints, if she's happy I'm fine
But the way that she's bein' treated's in the back of my mind
I rap it rhymes and wit' a pen I trap in the lines
The magic aside, I'm actin' outta habit of mine
When I managed to find out that she's a free spirit
I believe when she breathes that even the trees hear it
A piece of me needs to speak with these lyrics
The other part wants me to leave so she can flourish
Now God has a way of makin' it all right
So if I see her hurt then I'm lookin' with false sight
When dark befalls night then it's hard to choose
Between leavin' her be or feelin' the Pulchritude
[Chorus]
Hardware:
iMac G5, LTO Max-100 mixer, Shure SM58 microphone, coathanger mic stand ;)
Software:
Garageband 2.0.2
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hey, I kinda dig it &mdash 01/03/06 - 05:47:12 PM
I like the vibe - kinda like a Weird Al dorkiness meets Eminem (I actually
mean that as a compliment). Some interesting vocal phrasings in there,
but I think you could make it better with a little tighter control of your
voice. Fun song. [ Reply to This ]
pulchritude and attitude..you got it dude &mdash 01/15/06 - 11:19:16 AM
Great debut. your lyrics are intricate..you are a natural at writing rap. try
to steer clear of the eminem style though and make your own mark..i
really think you have the potential to be a unique rap talent. the
background music is a little thin and bare...but this song is all about your
lyrics and voice anyway. melody in the refrain/chorus is catchy but not
quite well-developed, and i think an awesome melody is what gives rap a
musical break and disinguishes it from other raps. overall, an awesome
debut...looks like youre heading to the top after you gain some name
recognition around here. D/L for repeated listening. [ Reply to This ]
stick with piano &mdash 02/03/06 - 08:32:21 AM
these vocals are horrid...you have no flow...piano is good....the lyrics arnt
bad, they just sound bad with your voice [ Reply to This ]
stick with piano &mdash 02/06/06 - 11:29:57 AM
i disagree, i like this man, i've listened to alot of your stuff and you are
steadily improving but i like the tune in this one, good work i look forward to
you next post! [ Reply to This ]
stick with piano &mdash 02/06/06 - 02:13:35 PM
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mean that as a compliment). Some interesting vocal phrasings in there,
but I think you could make it better with a little tighter control of your
voice. Fun song.
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