the best male voice on macjam's. I wish your music didn't make me feel so uncomfortable to listen to! But vocally, outstanding. I'd also like to hear this song pick up after the first chorus. I could definitely hear this song picking up, Switchfoot style. Also, I hear just a slight amount of distance in the vocals, a slight "live" feel to it that distances the listener from your words, which I doubt is the intent of this tune. Could be the mic, but first try doubling the vocal tracks and see if it adds anything to the quality. If not, play w/ the eq's, see if there's any way to add a little depth. Your voice deserves it.

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I am humbled by the comment.... I am glad you're honest (so hard to find honest critics..... :S)... Anyway... as I said in the description, this was originally intended as a rough draft, due to the quality of the mic (and not knowing whether to layer more instruments). I am curious of what you meant by

"I wish your music didn't make me feel so uncomfortable to listen to!"

In this song? In general? what exactly erks you? I'd appreciate fedback, as I am always looking to improve....

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Aaron David

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Not the performance at all, just the subject matter. Christian rock just ain't my thing. But good music is, and this song is a great start.

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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Dude you are one blessed dude. I have heard many a tune in my life but you are amazing. No fancy drums or any of the other tricks. Just delivered with simple accoustic and from the heart. You should be signed, Just continue and it will happen if thats what you want. I was totally comfortable with your stuff. This is what music is supposed to be. Simple but extremely powerfull

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Songwriting
Performance
Message
Heart

Welcome to macjams.

Jack

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Thank you Dadai/hackeye for your very kind words. This community has been very good to me so far... I plan on seeing a lot more of me here :D

I am humbled, thanks again.

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Aaron David

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Unlike Joshosh18, I don't believe you might have the best male voice
on MJ. But you do have a good, distinctive voice and more importantly,
you sing this song with honesty and conviction.

The lyric doesn't make me at all uncomfortable, but perhaps that's
because I can view it much as I do any other love song. The object of
that love is the writer's business; I'm only interested in the emotion and
its expression.

I do agree with Joshosh18 that this composition would benefit from an
uptempo treatment after the first chorus, but that's really up to you.

Stark and personal, this is also a very good performance.

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great voice really like the sound of your voice

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Wow, what a great worship song! Simple, moving, and giving glory to
God for all He has done in your life. I wish we could sing this one in our
fellowship! Thank you for sharing it with us. :-)

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Please don't apologies for the genre. Its just good music. Your lyrics are
simple and strong your melodies are right. your voice is pleasing. You
have boiled every thing down to the essence , and that is the way song
should be written. You could even get me back in church if I new you
would be performing there. Ha ha. keep up the excellent work.

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You've got a fantastic voice, mate. Sometimes, though, the way you
pronounce some of your words bothers me. And I feel like there's no
need for it. I hear a lot of people doing this. It's a kind of lazy slur
with a 'nn' sound thrown in where it shouldn't be. It's hard to explain,
but in the chorus, for example, it sounds like you're singing:

'On' by your splendour
'On' by your face

I can never work out where that 'n' sound comes from.

Same in the bridge (1st time):

'Youn' gave it all for me
That I 'mine' grow to know you

And you don't do it the second time you sing the bridge! Can you hear
it? I hope I'm making sense.

I know that's not how you say it, so why sing it like that? I'm making
this comment totally respectfully. I wouldn't bother if I didn't like the
song. I think you've got an awesome voice. But you could sing your
words more clearly. More like you'd say them.

Thanks for listening to me crapping on.

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but hey, it's a great song and you do have a tremendous voice...I would
agree with the possibility of picking it up mid-song, well written though
and really beautiful!

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This is a great song. Lyrically strong. I would like to hear some drums in this song maybe, and possibly another guitar holding th rythm part of the song. It would give it a much fuller sound.

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This song could easily be overproduced. I would like to hear a bit
more, maybe show off your pipes a little, but at the same time... the
simplicity is part of its magic. Clean up the enunciation a little and
maybe intensify the bridge just a little... where's my lighter...

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