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Last Played: Oct 11, 2008 - 02:12:26 PM
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Uploaded: Jan 03, 2006 - 01:19:42 PM
Last Updated: Jan 08, 2006 - 07:32:20 PM
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Late one night while the rest of Wayfarer was sleeping, Mokus lights up a track...

An idea I've been wanting to finish for a while...the first couple lines and the basic melody have been swirling in my head...I'm not sure if I'm quite happy with the music...but it says what I was feeling so I'll let it lie.

Lyrics:
I thought I saw you smile
from across the room
a light unto all these lies

I want to watch you a while
and maybe listen for this
peace that has left my life.

You are the sweetest thing
that I have ever seen
You've opened up my eyes
through the darkenss and the pouring rain
I'm witnessing it's you that guides my life.

I thought I heard you sigh
from behind the door
dividing truth from all we hide

Vainglory dons her genius disguise
and clever, pointing up she
claims it's his design.

But you are the sweetest thing
that I have ever seen
You've opened up my eyes
and though the dark of her duplicity
I'm witnessing it's in the night stars shine

Just do one thing for me now.
get up off your knees now
to see the sun set
over a sea of good intentions
it's alright now...it's alright now!

You are the sweetest thing
that I have ever seen
You've opened up my eyes
through the darkenss and the pouring rain
I'm witnessing it's you that guides my life.

words and music by Ryan Chubb
plus some drum loops added for good measure.
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Big Music &mdash 01/03/06 - 01:46:53 PM
Wow - this is great.

Really good structure and chorus - everything is there. Love the (edgy, in both senses) guitar.
There's a few things to tweak in the mix maybe (the bass seems a bit weak in the verse), but the song, and the band sound , is there.

Look forward to seeing you live ...

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Big Music &mdash 01/04/06 - 08:06:23 AM
We also look forward to seeing us live, but are we not all dying but one long death?
...oh wait, that’s not what you meant...sorry.
Yes, it is one of our countless New Years resolutions to start playing some shows this year...
(crossing fingers). We shall see.

Thanks for the comments, cheers…

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Big Music &mdash 01/15/06 - 05:11:45 PM
This is a great track. I love rock songs that center around the acoustic guitar.
I think it should be used more. Reminds me of the acoustic guitar on the fast
section of "Band On The Run" by Paul McCartney and Wings. (Okay, so I'm 46
years old, if anyone is trying to do the math.)

Your vocals are very solid. Keep it up -- I see a future for you in this biz.

Guitar playing is well done.


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Yeah! &mdash 01/03/06 - 02:41:25 PM
Only you can know what you intended, so I can't judge how far you went
from that. All I can say is that this a fantastic track, one of the best I've
heard at MJ. I love the arrangement, heavy with acoustic tones. It has a
strong U2 flavor to it, particularly in your excellent vocals. Really, this is a
great tune, all around, that I think would do well commercially.

The only critical point I have is the ending. It doesn't seem like a "fade
out" kind of song. I think it needs a real ending. But if you stick with the
fade-out I'd at least make it a longer one.

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Yeah! &mdash 01/04/06 - 08:08:26 AM
Thanks again Peter for the thoughtful comments...yeah, once we start goofing with this in a live sense we will have to work out a different ending…In my head I have numerous adjacent ideas that I would like to transition out of this into. We will see what happens. many thanks.


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Great... &mdash 01/03/06 - 03:00:52 PM
As usual... it's a much more polished piece than you use to post here... nice to see you've taken your time to mix... :)

I like it a lot!!!

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Great... &mdash 01/04/06 - 08:09:50 AM
He he...yeah...I still love the rough cuts though...call me crazy!
Thanks Aivan!

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bono voce &mdash 01/03/06 - 04:54:47 PM
or good voice. Really, great actually. The mix is tight, the music is strong, but the voice is what really stands out. Very professional. It almost sounds TOO much like Bono, at first I thought someone posted a new U2 song by accident. Great performance here.

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bono voce &mdash 01/04/06 - 03:27:44 PM
Oh boy, now I'm blushing...I personally think I sound more like my father...but hey I do love U2...and perhaps the maxim is true that ‘you are what you eat.’
Oh man, I need to go on a diet...
Thanks for listening...

p.s. Please support DATA and let's put an end to economic apartheid ;)

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Enjoyed it &mdash 01/03/06 - 05:03:25 PM
It was a great listening experience. I like the vocals a lot. Thanks for
sharing

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Enjoyed it &mdash 01/05/06 - 01:03:45 PM
Thanks BranDaMan...glad you enjoyed it.

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Terrific song and a great voice to deliver it &mdash 01/04/06 - 02:39:23 PM
Perhaps there are too many Bonoisms in here (but who am I to talk, I can't
even imitate Adam Clayton singing) but I like this a lot. The only thing
bugging me is the drum mix, particular the snare, it's too far back in the
mix to propel the song properly.

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Terrific song and a great voice to deliver it &mdash 01/05/06 - 01:05:28 PM
Adam Clayton singing...that would be awesome. He could be the next Sting. Hey, he's got the stage presence :)
Seriously, I take this as a great compliment, but I do not hear the Bonoisms...in other songs I have certainly been guilty, but not this one...no?
I will definitely pay closer attention to the drum mix on future tracks.
Thanks very much for your perspective.

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like the bouncy strumming and &mdash 01/04/06 - 07:12:56 PM
the u2 like singin and bono feel.

Nice guitar arpeggios in high sound on electric guitar.
Like when it opens up in chorus when everythings seems to happen.


Nice rock singin and playing.

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like the bouncy strumming and &mdash 01/05/06 - 01:06:48 PM
Bill, I am glad you liked it...thanks for listening and commenting!

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Bass-ic Instinct &mdash 01/05/06 - 08:51:05 AM
Other than the obvious fact that this sounds heavily-influenced by U2, I
agree with Peter Greenstone that this is a very good track.

But I think if the bass part had a more prominent/dominant place in the
mix, it would help de-emphasize that similarity and punch up this track
quite a bit.

Overall, I think you did a terrific job here.

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Bass-ic Instinct &mdash 01/05/06 - 01:08:59 PM
I'm currently crossing my legs real slow-like while pondering your suggestions.
The bass level is always a challenge...different references reveal different results.
I tend to use my car for the final say...that said, my car can tend to be bass heavy which may coax me in to dropping those levels in the final mix.
Along with the drums...I will focus on these things a little more for our next track.
Thanks so much for your comments!

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Very impressed!! &mdash 01/07/06 - 05:00:56 AM
Wow, I LOVE that jangly guitar. That's fantastic.

The vocal is first rate. Really really good.

This is really excellent. All the elements are beautifully arranged to
complement each other. The result is professional sounding and just
gorgeous.

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Very impressed!! &mdash 01/08/06 - 12:36:57 PM
Thank you very much Rebsie!
Slowly I'm learning how to mix...

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Great sound! &mdash 01/07/06 - 08:59:21 PM
Awesome voice, dude. Couldn't help but wonder if Bono was testing
out some new material. I love the rawness of the acoustic guitars.
Great sound.

The backing gets a bit messy in the chorus, I reckon. But you've
obviously captured the sound you were going for and that's more
important than anything. Really liked it, instantly.


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Great sound! &mdash 01/08/06 - 12:48:07 PM
Thanks Nolan, I agree with the messiness - especially in the chorus...This is the second time I have tried recording a song element by element...and I feel, well out of my element. Singing with headphones on feels really weird...Since posting this song I can't listen to it at all...the singing bothers me so much. I hear all the dissonance and disunity...all the things I would not have done if it was live.
Next time I will try some different techniques...a great learning experience.
Thanks for commenting!

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nice tune &mdash 01/08/06 - 02:24:50 PM
I like it alot, great arrangement, very U2, sounds good, I'd buy it

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nice tune &mdash 01/09/06 - 03:53:32 PM
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U2 sound &mdash 01/09/06 - 01:37:52 PM
This is a very great track! Top notch singing! Vocal hooks all over! Just great! Maybe it's my head phones, but I felt the bass was light sounding. Maybe center it, bring up the bottom end. Excellent

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U2 sound &mdash 01/09/06 - 03:56:39 PM
Thanks very much Tom...I'll have to pay closer attention to the bass levels in the future...maybe if I win the lottery I can by some monitors...that would be sweet.

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:D &mdash 01/09/06 - 04:03:32 PM
It has a fantastic quality to it. Almost makes me think of U2 for some
reason. Great job on it and I know why it has been downloaded so
much :D


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:D &mdash 01/09/06 - 09:12:19 PM
Thanks WG

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raw &mdash 01/09/06 - 08:44:11 PM
i can see the u2 ness. but i think this has something else. it's a bit more raw. and i prefer that over u2. i would as said like to hear more bass, and personally i'd like to hear the guitar more to give it more drive. but then i love being able to hear the guitar and prefer it not to be so much in the background especially when it seems to be really good.

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raw &mdash 01/09/06 - 09:02:54 PM
Would you like fries with that???

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raw &mdash 01/09/06 - 09:23:52 PM
yes, and a milkshake please. and any other food you have up for grabs :)

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Robert Smith lied, boys do cry

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dude you sound &mdash 01/11/06 - 08:10:07 AM
awesome.your voice is a winner..you must be a U2 fan..This song is very radio......great job...you rock

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dude you sound &mdash 01/12/06 - 08:05:31 AM
Thanks Pyrofly!
Well if by u2 fan you mean I buy some of their music and listen to it occasionally, then no...
but if you mean I’m front row throwing my underwear on stage at every stop of their tour that comes within a 500 mile radius of my house, then yes guilty as charged.

Actually, I only listen to MacJams music now...down with consumerism!
Love me some more bio-friendly MacJelly...


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woah! &mdash 01/13/06 - 06:06:49 PM
i agree with pgreenstone about the U2 flavour. this is a really well-crafted
professional sounding song, without that holier-than-thou
overproduction i hear from bands. damn. this is really awesome. i look
forward to hearing the other tracks!

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woah! &mdash 01/19/06 - 09:57:18 AM
Ah yes, the flavour...I guess I cook with that spice a little too often...gotta plant me some new herbs and exotic flora in the muck and mire.
Thanks Pengy!


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good song! &mdash 01/14/06 - 08:10:14 AM
This is a very Good song. And it is Very U2!! If someone said this was the new U2 single i would have believed them!!! Great great tune!!

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good song! &mdash 01/19/06 - 10:00:21 AM
Blessed is Ye who hath believed without hearing... (said with cliché southern preacher accent)


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i lubb chubb &mdash 01/14/06 - 07:25:01 PM
great rock tune!
this is my first exposure to Mokus.
I just hope my next hit gets me just as high.
sure, there's a few performance issues but fixing that is easy.
The hard part which is writing a great song is done!

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i lubb chubb &mdash 01/19/06 - 10:04:59 AM
Chubb feels the lubb...thanks Eleveneyes for giving this a peek...please note though that prolonged exposure to Mokus can cause shortness of breathe and in rare cases blindness.
You've been warned!


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Wow! &mdash 01/18/06 - 05:51:52 PM
Really nice... Mix is great. Reminds me of Bono on vocals or should I
say the band is U2 all over. Nice job. Great addition to macjams...
Your icon caught my eye. Good thing I checked it out.

Regards,
John

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Wow! &mdash 01/19/06 - 10:07:52 AM
I truly appreciate the comments John...kindness as big as Texas.
I’m glad our icon caught your eye...kind of an eye for an eye, then...it was worth it!


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sellout! :) &mdash 01/20/06 - 07:40:51 PM
wow! very nice mokus. did i say wow?

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sellout! :) &mdash 01/20/06 - 09:16:30 PM
hahaha....
The rest of the band beat me so bad I can barely type this....
and all 'cause of my deep-seated longing for low-fat sugar-free white bread wrapped in cellophane....sigh...


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Best squirrel song I've ever heard &mdash 01/24/06 - 02:55:30 PM
This is good! I'd love to hear more like it....maybe even live ;-)

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Best squirrel song I've ever heard &mdash 02/01/06 - 01:00:05 PM
Thanks Gov…
To everything, töten töten.
There is a season, töten töten
A time to kill, A time to kill
A time to kill
A time to kill

Sorry, I forget to take my meds today…

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Great "live" sound. &mdash 01/31/06 - 05:43:37 PM
This really feels "real," and not loop-based. Your voice is just right for
this kind of track.

I hear echoes of Robert Plant.

Good work, Ryan.

(And your avatar is still the best on MJ!)

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Great "live" sound. &mdash 02/01/06 - 01:02:14 PM
John, thanks again for the kind words…
Ps. I hear echoes of Robert Plant too…my psychiatrist and I are trying to work through it.

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Definitely U2 &mdash 02/04/06 - 02:56:02 PM
Could be a U2 cover it sounds so much like them. (G/F asked me to
download it. That sound tell the whole story!)

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Definitely U2 &mdash 02/07/06 - 03:20:45 PM
A drink of prune juice will alleviate most if not all your daily problems...trust me on this...

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This was... &mdash 04/07/06 - 11:29:44 PM
...an enjoyable tune! I usually don't like stuff that "sounds too
much like something else" but this has a raw energy that can't be
denied. It feels more like a homage than a rip off.

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This was... &mdash 04/09/06 - 11:26:55 AM
Perhaps a 'homage du fromage'...It has that certain...how do you say, je ne sais ce qui...curious, what song does this remind you of?
Thanks Stun Nutz...I appreciate hearing your thoughts!

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Sexy &mdash 07/01/06 - 08:02:49 PM
Sexy voice and lyrics, music is also very good but a bit too loud with vocals. Needs some kinda remix there, unless it's just my headphones. :)
I really do like this one a lot but would love to hear a better quality on the sound and hope you'll make a better version of it.

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Sexy &mdash 07/03/06 - 09:27:30 AM
You could be right on the levels...I don't know...but chances are I won't revisit this one. far too many other ideas to mine.
Thanks so much for listening...

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U-also &mdash 07/24/07 - 01:56:03 AM
Man it must really suck sounding just like Bono. What a drag for you. But seriously, Man I wish I had pipes like that. Good job! Really great track.

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