There's so much good stuff going on here: lovely lyrics, great melody
(with a cracking chorus) strong arrangement and you have a great voice.
Some of the percussion sounds a bit clunky - maybe there's a bit too
much going on at times. This is just a niggle however - this is fantastic,
well done.

KK

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thanks for commenting! Yeah---Im not the best with figuring out percussion
and making it sound the way I exactly want for my songs. Eh--I guess ya do
what you can do. It can be trying at times because so often people can hear in
their head how they would like their song to sound--but hee hee-- some of us
dont quite have the engineering and technical skills to realy acheive that. : )
Thanks again for writing! Great to hear from you!

(Look! I wrote a letter back! I knew my communication skills would improve
once i wrote this song--wahoo!)

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"Ask not what your fortune cookie can do for you, but what you can do for your fortune cookie"

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You're really GOOD!!!!
What a pleasing song! I feel have to put an exclamation point after every thing I write! Maybe two!! You have a simply wonderful voice!! I love that little ocatve yodel you throw around!! Very soulful melody!! A relaxed composition backing the song, nice choice.
I think during the short piano break about 2/3's the way through... a simple instrument solo could have been layered there. Violin perhaps, maybe harmonica. Something unexpected.
Again very very pleasing song!!!

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hee hee. see? :) Thank you for your comments! It's fun when other people
besides those that know you kinda like the things you do. Thanks for the idea
about the layering--I'll have to go back and listen--and figure something out.
Thanks again!

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I really like your vocals on this, the clear pop diction, the stylized way
you play with the melody, the emotion you bring to the lyrics, the use
of harmony. There is something brittle and not always on about the
drum loops, rhythmically, that detracts from the easy flow of the song,
especially in the first third. I'd also boost the piano (piano players are
never loud enough). Sometimes the way you pronounce your vowels
(especially "o" and "eh") can make the sound drift from the pitch, and I
mention this becuz mostly you sound right on; it may be a matter of
opening more, support, or being more demanding. But don't change
those Joni Mitchell or Jewel moments when you play with pitch on
purpose, which work well. Very nice track, intimate and honest. It is
fun to watch how much better your tracks are improving.

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It's maybe paradoxical, but it's a long time since I wrote the last comment. I thought I was getting lazy, but when I listened to your song I felt the necessity to COMMUNICATE you that it was one of the most touching songs I have listened to in MacJams. Your voice is delightful, the tune is so nice and I love the piano. And since I'm writing this, congratulations, you got your aim! (By the way, I voted too :)

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It's maybe paradoxical, but it's a long time since I wrote the last comment. I thought I was getting lazy, but when I listened to your song I felt the necessity to COMMUNICATE you that it was one of the most touching songs I have listened to in MacJams. Your voice is delightful, the tune is so nice and I love the piano. And since I'm writing this, congratulations, you got your aim! (By the way, I voted too :)

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I just love your voice--and I hope you will be posting here more often!
This is a wonderful track. Your voice sounds very poised, confident in this
one. Excellent.
I'd like to hear it a little more forward in the mix?--or maybe the
percussion could be a little farther back, since the piano is also a bit
'hidden' in the balance, too.

Great song--thanks for posting this!


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I love the piano, goes so great with the vocal. Not sure I'm feeling
the lyrics, but this song is nice. I have to agree with Komrade K
that the vocals have a sort of "cracking" noise, but that's just me.

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You tell a truth here that a lot of us have been guilty of. I like your
voice. Very sweet, nice quality. Good song and performance.

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Beautiful voice, beautiful song. Keep on writing and performing.
Great vocal sound from a microphone of that price.

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I'm feeling what your singin, but no guild, the rocker got to be rockin, still all the loving people stays in my heard. every time I just got tot move one.

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This is some really good stuff. You really know how to write a progression. Very catchy and I really dig the chorus. The middle is a nice addition. Thanks for sharing.

John

P. S. You'll have to check out the lyrics to "Drop Me a Line".

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I loved this one .. Wow, such a great job ... I am new to this site so I am
still figuring out how to earn points to post my work, but I have to tell you
that I am very excited to see such a wonderful song. Awesome!!!

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Arin, what a pleasure to listen to this. surfing thru so much stuff here
at MJ. this just stood right out. hope to explore more of your posts
here. thanks respectfully John

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excellent. I left a comment on one of your other tracks about vocal
placement. If you need an example this track is it!!! Beautiful song.
Thanks for sharing. Cheers! :)

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You have a wonderful voice. I love the parts where it almost breaks and then comes through stronger. The chord turnaround in the "Far away" parts really lifts this song up. The sentiments are wonderful and I imagine there's many people (including myself) who could relate. This could definitely be a single.

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lovely song and a beautiful voice. well structured.

I am a postman in my other life so thank your friend for keeping me in a job. Cheery

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such a true idea, and with your perfect grace and style you bring it to a wonderful song.

So many people probably feel this way. Me, you've just reduced to tears.

Incredible job.

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Great lyrics! Love the song!

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Cool singin. i was at my song "Like An Angel" and was looking at the last comment by baucus. So I proceeded to her page and she didn't have a tune. But her first one she had on her list was this song and I am glad I listened to it.

Like that Phebe Snow sound you have going on in the tune. Plus, the words nobody makes it all alone is fitting, Cause if is didn't see her post I wouldn't of heared your wonderful tune.

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.. for the new addition of the random song player .. I never would have stumbled across this ... fabulous vocals and truly amazing harmonizing abilities ... now to check out more of your stuff ... I wonder how many people are on here (all silent and unknown) ... really start posting replies in the forums etc. ... more people will hear about you and check out your songs ...

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