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Monday morning I woke up with the tune for the chorus of this song in my head, so I tried my best to fit guitar and lyrics to it, and the song sort of took on a life of it's own. Two guitars, piano, drums, and vocals. I'm very happy with the outcome.
I think this version works well enough, but I'm more excited by the potential. I think the bones of the song are solid (lyrics melody, and basic rhythm), and a good base for additions and modifications. I'm thinking of it as maleable and hoping that others will help me finish it up. Specifically I'm thinking of a better percussion section, any harmony or background vocals people think could be added, or an improved piano part. Also if someone wanted to redo the main vocals I'd be happy with that. So basically I'm asking for help, and giving anyone the freedom to mess around with, change, and improve on this sketch. Thanks. Enjoy.
P.S. - this is the first song I've recorded with my own voice so if anyone has any suggestions about how it could be improved I'd appreciate it.
I think this version works well enough, but I'm more excited by the potential. I think the bones of the song are solid (lyrics melody, and basic rhythm), and a good base for additions and modifications. I'm thinking of it as maleable and hoping that others will help me finish it up. Specifically I'm thinking of a better percussion section, any harmony or background vocals people think could be added, or an improved piano part. Also if someone wanted to redo the main vocals I'd be happy with that. So basically I'm asking for help, and giving anyone the freedom to mess around with, change, and improve on this sketch. Thanks. Enjoy.
P.S. - this is the first song I've recorded with my own voice so if anyone has any suggestions about how it could be improved I'd appreciate it.
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Lyrics
I'm flailing against the walls of my captors,
But they're not listening, no.
I'm flailing against the walls of my captors,
But they're not listening
Then I realize
They're behind the bars with me,
Outside these walls lies a world unknown,
sung of only in cheerful tones
I have a small window in this room
I always look, expecting to see you
But you're behind the bars with me.
This song is of those who
I've always given agency to
There are no captors holding me still
Only the shadows of my will
They're behind the bars with me.
Now I realize,
they're behind the bars with me.
You're behind the bars with me,
But they're not listening, no.
I'm flailing against the walls of my captors,
But they're not listening
Then I realize
They're behind the bars with me,
Outside these walls lies a world unknown,
sung of only in cheerful tones
I have a small window in this room
I always look, expecting to see you
But you're behind the bars with me.
This song is of those who
I've always given agency to
There are no captors holding me still
Only the shadows of my will
They're behind the bars with me.
Now I realize,
they're behind the bars with me.
You're behind the bars with me,
loyd vader
i have a melodica line id like to add to this track. what i can do is just d/load your track, load it into cubase and start my recording at the beginning of your track. then ill send you my line and just start tracks together and then you can remix to your liking or not bother with if you dont think is cool......if thats cool?