Welcome to Macjams, and welcome to the heart-wrenching world of
coming apart (ugh, been there.) I really liked your guitar playing, and the
melody & structure of the song were great. Your recorded vocals needed
to be a little closer, they were a little soft compared to the guitar. Also, I
don't know what your vocal range is, but this sounded like it was pushing
you up into difficult registers, I think the song would sound better shifted
down about a third. Very nice well-paced lyrics, and they show that you
are healing, they are bittersweet and honest words. Good stuff!
ttfn,
Drakonis

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I already love the guitar, I wish I could play like this. Mmm. Nice. I would
love to hear more of the vocals though. Any way to get them up?

Great song, wonderful emotion, very evocative and poignant. I also like
that you've kept it simple. I love a guitar and a voice. YOu might want to
try to take this down a key though.

Nice job on this.

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