Great song. It had me hooked from the first bar. The
guitar lead is great. Your voice is pretty unique.

Is M. really going to feel the depths you describe
here? I doubt it.

Good stuff.

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Yeah, I doubt M. will feel any of this. As I said it was just kind of an influence
on what I was writing, I wasn't going for any one person per se. The voice was
also sort of the kernel of the song. After I recorded the some of the first
guitar bits I started trying to figure out what to do with them and thought
about a "Tom Waits" type of voice singing about being "King of the World" and
that's what most of this evolved from. Actually singing that way was pretty
tiring but it was a core concept of the song to me.

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Beauty should be edible, or not at all.
-- Dali

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Two criticisms:

1. The (I think it's called trochaic) hippety-hoppety easter bunny beat and New Bohemians bongo tappin'. Really sets a light tone for a kinda heavy song. The contrast is not redeeming... it's distracting. I'd like to hear it with a straight beat. Something big and stompy like a Led-Zepplin song or somethin'. Or even clinkety-clank if your into the Tom Waits thing.

2. The intro is a bit long. I really thought it was just gonna be a guitar song. I don't know though. Not a big blues guy, so I don't know what's acceptable/unacceptable practice within the historical frame of the genre. I know you called it Indie Rock, and maybe that has something to do with the drum loop you chose, but this is blues friend!

Now, onto the nice stuff:

The guitar work is solid. Sounds like your fingers are YEARNING for a straight beat; maybe they're used to them? The vocals are executed very well. It's tricky, trying to stylize the way you have: obviously, you don't show up at work and say, "Heeeeyyy Booobbbbb" in that dark, muddy, groany tone. It's a style that you taken on to fit the song... and it does. As well, the vocal style is the perfect fit for the lyrics... which otherwise could've have come across cheezebally. You're balancing a number of unstable elements really well... you're singing is confident and unrestrained, your guitarwork is thoughtful (by the way, did you sing while you played the lead? Just curious.), and the bassline sneaks right in there without garnering any undue attention. Overall, I'd say this is a great song and one to learn from.

P.S. I love that one REALLY sour note the lead guitar hits about 3/4 of the way through the song:

Defiant.



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Thanks Fosod, I'm glad you're back. You always seem to be able to cut to the
chase honestly and interestingly. The comment about the bongos is well
taken, I put them in for a bit of variety on the chorus parts, but it might do
better w/o them. I might try it. I really need to get DOD so I have a bit more
percussion palette to use.

I hadn't really thought about it being a "blues" per se in that it's not the
traditional I IV V7 12 bar format, but at the heart of it, you're probably right,
that this is essentially blues.

Anyway, I may play w/ it. Won't promise I'll change it, but This is good fodder
(or should I say fosod-er) for thought.

Also, the intro is just 1 chorus length, might be a bit long, but I like it, and no
I didn't play lead and sing at the same time. THough I think I'd rather do that
on this one than try to do the bass work and sing.

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Beauty should be edible, or not at all.
-- Dali

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Very creative. Cool to assume a character and write.
Somehow it's hard to imagine Keneth Lay or Martha
Stewart with such a deep scratchy voice (unless it's their
bedroom voice ;-) , or rather their inner-devils
respectively).



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This song song has an excellent groove. I really love how
everything fits together on this song. The vocal
performance is interesting and works well fro this tune.
On a more personal note, it makes me think of a
recording session in the Mod and how I felt watching you
make music. To me this song rates up there with The
Road.

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Excellent guitar playing, sound, mix. Very pro, ready for
CD release. I like how you imitated the sound of Martha's
conscience in your vocals, too.

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