I like that you've kept this a solo guitar & vocal piece -- it really
doesn't need anything else. A separate version with more
orchestration could be cool, though -- what about a midi string
quartet? Arrangementwise, I might have had one or two less
repetitions of the guitar phrase, it just gets a little redundant & seems
like you're kinda steeling yourself to sing at the beginning and it seems
like you haven't really worked out what the ending should be. You
have a nice voice, and the song is generally pretty good. Think about
pacing & feel -- what do you want your listener to come away from
outta hearing you perform this? Should they be angry along with you?
Or at you (if the audience is the girl)?

Those are just different things to think about. I think the song is pretty
effective just as-is. Thanks for posting it, I enjoyed hearing what you
do.

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