Sweet Agony, Sweet Friend

ElPeruano

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This is my first posted song. I've never really done anything like it. Its very simple. Please let me know what you think.

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Lyrics

sweet agony, sweet pain
sweet suffering, hello again
you're my old friend
i know you so well
and when we speak
you put me through hell
i'm bleeding inside
black and gray emptiness
i'm bleeding outside
empty tears i shed
you drag me down
goodbye for now

Song Stats

Hits: 1529
Comments: 26
Fans: 5
Plays: 266
Downloads: 68
Votes: 9
Uploaded: Mar 02, 2006 - 03:24:20 AM
Last Updated: Mar 20, 2006 - 10:52:07 PM Last Played: Nov 18, 2009 - 03:14:31 AM

Song License

Creative Commons License:
Attribution-NoDerivs-NonCommercial

Song Actions

Hardware:

iMac G4
Casio CTK-611 (w/ midisport uno)
Behringer XM8500 mic
M-Audio USB Fast Track Interface

Software:

Garage Band 2
iDrum

Comments

charliechen

charliechen said 1361 days ago (March 2nd, 2006)

I could hear the fun
You had a ball putting this together, didn't you. Despite the lyrics and theme, I heard the joy contained in the effort. As depression as they are, I quite liked the lyrics. I like depressing.

I did find the instrument choices and final mix off, however. There is a tinny sound to the product which goes against the heaviness of the lyrics. It sounded like tracks and sounds produced by a Radio Shack keyboard, unfortunately.

Some suggestions:
1. Use a more rock sounding drum track/loop from GB2.
2. Turn the staccato synth sounds right from the beginning into longer notes.
3. Support the whole thing with a bass line.

I liked your vocal recording work.

Keep having fun. And I look forward to your future posts.

Check out my latest song called Sparkles in a Lullaby

ElPeruano

ElPeruano said 1360 days ago (March 2nd, 2006)

I could hear the fun
Thank you so much for the feedback. I actually did have a great time working
on this. I was pleasantly surprised that you could tell. I don't expect to come
anywhere near the veterans that I have heard on this website, but hopefully
with suggestions such as yours I may find some improvement.

With regard to the drums, I have decided to stay away from loops altogether
in my music, meaning that they are a creation of my own through iDrum.
Unfortunately, I know nothing at all about drumming. How could I make it
sound more like a "rock" loop? Honestly I am completely in the dark. I just
experiment until i find something i like ;).

I was interested in your comment on the synths. While I cannot vouch for the
one that I have, it is Midi and thus all of the instruments are Garage band
Instruments with various effects. How can I get a better sound?

As for mixing. . lol. Again, I know nothing. I just tweaked it until I thought it
sounded good. Any specific suggestions?

I guess this post asks more questions then I intended it too, but if anyone has
the time I'd love to hear more feedback.

Thanks again for the listen.

Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

mandimonkee	mandimonkee said 1360 days ago (March 2nd, 2006)
	1st this is a wonderful first post and great jumping off point. I agree, you can tell it was fun to produce! Keep it up, I got my eye on you Check out my latest song called Regression (collab w/Moses)

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1360 days ago (March 2nd, 2006)
	1st thanks mandi. I liked yours too! Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

Scared sacred	Scared sacred said 1360 days ago (March 2nd, 2006)
	A Comment You're not Peruvian! �S�? Check out my latest song called sept 30 [illegal cocaine drugs]

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1360 days ago (March 2nd, 2006)
	A Comment lol. thats funny, considering you know nothing about me but what i have posted on this site. Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

urbnite	urbnite said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)
	nice nice beats and such... it all works together well! i'm not sure what this is about to you, but to me it's about drugs! nice voice, too - fits really well in this style. keep 'em coming! Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)
	nice thanks for the nice comments. About the drugs. . Im not sure if you were kidding or not but the interpretation made me smile. I love hearing what people think about the meaning of my work, whether it be music, writing, poetry, art., etc. You just made my day. Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

urbnite	urbnite said 1341 days ago (March 22nd, 2006)
	nice no, i wasn't kidding... that's what i took from it. so that's what it meant to me... i also enjoy hearing what people think my stuff's about, although people rarely even guess. i try to write stuff so that the meaning is clear to me, but it's ambiguous enough that anyone can take something personal from it. guess you do too! Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1337 days ago (March 25th, 2006)
	nice lol. . . yup. thats exactly how i feel. how fun. Thanks again for the listen! Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

	said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)
	Hi Tony The melody is attractive along with your singing voice. The mix and instrumentation need to be built into something more substantial. Cheers

	said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)
	Hi Tony The melody is attractive along with your singing voice. The mix and instrumentation need to be built into something more substantial. Cheers

ElPeruano

ElPeruano said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)

Hi Tony
thanks for listening! It took me while to finally post a song but im glad you gave
it a listen. Im sure we'll speak again.

As for your kind criticism. . i agree that it is very simple. and somewhat
repetitive. I will stand by it though because I created it intentionally that way
and I strongly believe in staying true to the moment of creation. I listened to it
on repeat as i fell asleep that night and the mood that it created as it waxed and
waned was quite special to me. Sigh. . . ive always been the sentimental type i
guess. . .

Thanks again!

Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)

a little more meat and dressing
Your voice ranges from lilting to oppressed in this interesting
exploration of emotional pain. However, I'm not a big fan of that
fluttering vox effect. It takes away from the credibility of the
narrative. As already mentioned, you could work in more legato
(connected, flowing notes). And some bottom end instruments or
percussion can help drive the high end and balance it out. The
high percussion gets on my nerves after a while. But the song
does have a wholeness and purpose. I can see some potential with
it. All-in-all, a good concept and certainly a great start at music
self-production. Keep on!

ElPeruano

ElPeruano said 1342 days ago (March 20th, 2006)

a little more meat and dressing
I greatly appreciate the listen and the valuable comments. So far i am seeing
a trend in what people think, and believe me I have taken the advice to heart.

As for the vox effects, do you think that a clean "un-doctored" vocal track
would be better suited for the mood? Thats the impression i got from your
comment, but I was just wondering if you could clarify. Also, as I stated
above in reply to another post, any solid drum advice .. specifics? I know
you said you didn't care for the high pitched drums (hats and snares). .
should i throw in toms? more powerful kicks? I'd really love to hear any more
input you have in that realm.

Again, thank you for listening and sharing your experience with me!

Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

James_ Medd	James_ Medd said 1340 days ago (March 22nd, 2006)
	Interesting... I like the vocal as well as the bass. I'd be intersted where the inspiration came for the lyrics. Everything fits well however I'd pay money for record like this, it's far superior to alot that I hear on the radio. Good Stuff. Check out my latest song called Capas

ElPeruano

ElPeruano said 1337 days ago (March 25th, 2006)

Interesting...
Thanks for the great compliments! I think I have a long way to go before I'll be
making any records but ill be sure to let you know! lol.

As for the inspiration for this piece, I was inspired to write it both for a dear
friend of mine and from my own experiences as well. I don't like to say much
more than that simply because I like to let people relate to it without any bias.

Again, thanks for listening!

Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

BobRoberts	BobRoberts said 1325 days ago (April 6th, 2006)
	Not usually my taste... ...but, it was still well put together. Really liked the vocals and the phrasing. In some spots the vocals are a bit up front, but not too bad. Reminds me of that new band Chromeo. Check out my latest song called The One and Only

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1323 days ago (April 8th, 2006)
	Not usually my taste... I'll have to check out Chromeo .. ive never heard of them before. I appreciate your feedback, especially since I have so much respect for you as a musician. As always, I will be wandering through your extensive collection of music. Thank you for taking the time to listen and comment! Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

Leon

Leon said 1325 days ago (April 6th, 2006)

Sweeeeeet...
For a debut post, this is leagues ahead of the freshman learning curve.
I like the minimalist treatment of the melody line and you wisely
avoided to try too much too soon in your first attempt at arranging.
Already I can sense a promising musician with your ability to produce a
melody with a catchy pop.RnB hook. Your natural voice is more than
just listenable... in fact it has a pleasant N'Sync quality to it if only you
let go a little bit more. (I don't sound anything like a boybander so that
comment does not reflect any bias). The radio-megaphone effect is
ok, but a little too extended and overall loses its appeal... keep it in
restricted areas of the song and it becomes an interesting novelty
feature. Most debut songs here are passable, but this one, I have to
say, is downloadable for repeated listening. High marks from me for a
bold-- and really good-- start.

Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

Leon	Leon said 1325 days ago (April 6th, 2006)
	Sweeeeeet... If that N'Sync comment rankles you, I'll have to choose a different pop/RnB singer to compare you with. I meant that in a good way. --- The lion roars, the eagle soars. Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1323 days ago (April 8th, 2006)
	Sweeeeeet... you have no idea how nice it was to read your comment. i never expected such kind words and encouragement. . I will be posting another song relatively soon. . now i have to make sure that I can live up to any virtues you all have seen in my music. Thanks a million for the feedback! Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

Hectorious	Hectorious said 1256 days ago (June 15th, 2006)
	Sweet Agony, Sweet Friend This Idea is really cool. I think if you give it a Nine Inch Nail feel it would kick ass. Just my opinion. Hey do you want to work together on song just for kicks. I can't really sing just play a lot bass some rythum guitar. Any how keep writing you've got a lot of potential. Check out my latest song called Short Circuit (Sample)

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 1238 days ago (July 3rd, 2006)
	Sweet Agony, Sweet Friend Thanks for checking it out. I'm definitely up for a collab. I've actually never donw one on Macjams before. Just get at me and we'll work on something. Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

fireater	fireater said 668 days ago (January 23rd, 2008)
	really good ! This was my favorite, from the simple but effective beat, to the soft depressing filtered vocals. Right up my alley. keep em coming. Check out my latest song called to late to turn back now

ElPeruano	ElPeruano said 514 days ago (June 25th, 2008)
	thanks man twas my first song, so its nice to know I did something right with it. thanks for taking the time to check them out!! Check out my latest song called Requiem (w/ TNTrio)

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I'm a 20 year old college student that loves music but never seems to have the time to do it justice. I dont really know what I really want out of life yet. Musical experience is fairly limited. I played piano since I was five off and on. I quit in h... [see more]

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