It's always interesting to read posts by someone in the forums, and
then listen to their music for the first time afterwards, because you get
one sense of who they are from their posts, and another from their
music. "Vines" is basically some remarkably attractive musical ideas
that flow easily from one to another, but it seems to run out of steam.
This is a classic example of one of the points I was trying to make in
the Song Writing forum; inspiration only gets you so far, and craft is
what's needed to complete a composition.

Here are a few suggestions:
1. Consider modulating; it's pretty static, harmonically.
2. Play around with different chord progressions; see if there's a
different harmonic direction you can take some of your ideas.
3. Most music, and certainly virtually all classical music, has a sense of
movement between relaxation and tension, stability and instability,
thematic presentation and thematic development. It seems to me that
you have lots of beautiful ideas, but I would suggest they could be
developed more, and it might be fun/interesting to delve into greater
harmonic/emotional tension for a section, before returning to the calm
of the opening.

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The piece has a very cool character, reminds me of feeling anticipation,
It sounds like you've put doen a nice bed to work over. This could go in
many directions. Solo instruments would work great over this and
vocals too. I think this is a great start

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