Nice starting point (well, not QUITE the start, but you know what I
mean) Steve. I wouldn't discount your singing here - the more you do
it, the better it gets, and the more you take risks with it, the more
you'll surprise yourself. You can clearly carry a tune better than I could
when I started (and some may argue than I can now).
Keep em coming!
Neil

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Extra points for the Blues Brothers reference.

Your singing isn't bad...it fits well with this low key kind of song.

Good song, maybe a little repetitive.

That's my opinion anyway.

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I kinda like it!
it's a fun tune.
Hmm, i don't really know what to say.
Have a nice day?

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.. of the ones you've uploaded to date .. I skip more platitudes and
try to be helpful ..

I don't recall why I didn't comment before - but I had heard this ..
(just new to MJ and in a mass of snooping, listening etc) ...

I like the feel of this alot - very pleasant and unassuming - it has a
definite 'grows on you factor' and I don't mean in the fungus kind
of way either ...

your vocals are fine - just the effects are a tad
too much for me, sounds a bit flanged to me but I'm not sure (again I
do the same - slap effects on when I am not overly
confident in my voice) but I think you sound fine and I'd prefer you
don't overdo the effects - I'd rather hear you sing a bit squiffy than
try to mask things .. it's all part of improving - that's what I'm here for
anway.

Another small quip, grumble etc for me was the keyboard bit at the
end sounded a bit derivative .. but I can't place it ... it might just be
the way it's employed .. not a biggy either.

Another little structure suggestion would be to have 'the girlfriend' in
at the start, still talking as you come in over the top and fade that
out under .. it sets the scene better IMO rather than having it at the
end.

Keep up the good work. Laters Steve.



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Like jiguma says, don't diss your singing. Sing with a little more power,
that's all. The phrasing and timbre are great. Best of all, you are
singing on pitch. Hell yes. Good song, lyrics and instrumentation. Nice
descending chords. Bass line is solid. I wish I could play piano.

What the heck was that thing at the end? The devil trying to get his
licks in? Scary!

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I think Rich is right on target about your singing. This is a nice little song;
not really my genre, but I still enjoyed it in a slightly Syd Barrett kind of way.
Nice absurdity at the end.

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Your singing isn't bad. Not bad at all!
The track maybe got a tiny bit repetitive - but it didn't really bother me.
Pretty well done.

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i think it's a good song, and I think your vocals sound good. The only complaint I have is the drum machine doesn't fit for me. I would probably do 2 versions of this song: one kind of electronic keeping the current drums, and then I'd do a really sparse, melancholy version; that gets really sparse during the little choruses. It's not too repititive; but would be nice if you just changed the instrumentation and dynamics up a little (but I think the arrangemnet is good). This is a nice song.

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