I am not a huge fan of comparing songs I hear here at MacJams to existing artists, but I'm going to make an exception here. Your piece is very reminiscent of the Alan Parsons Project in their late 70's heyday. I have all their CD's and love their stuff. So please take that as a major complement.

The vocal popping is unfortunate, since the track is otherwise solid. I recently bought a 30 dollar pop filter and am very impressed how it filters out most of those annoying p's and b's.

Great harmonies and a very appropriate "go with the flow of the galaxy" delivery of the vocals.

One other quibble. The first notes of the shimmering guitar in the first musical interlude, before you sing "was it ever such an issue/to confront..." sounds sort of wrong for the chord underneath. Can't quite put my finger on it.

Enough quibbling. Good job.

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Thanks for listening and commenting Charlie. Although the 70s was my main musical era, for some reason the Alan Parsons Project went under my radar and I never got to listen to them. I’m intrigued now by your complementary comparison and will have to dig out some of their stuff to find out. You’re right about the need for a pop shield and I really must get down to the music store. On listening again to the up-the neck guitar bit just before the final verse it does sound a tad off-tune so I’ll fix that at some stage.
Cheers,
Phil


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The vocals seem a bit "quavery" on my speakers, but not distracting,
almost like there is a chorus filter that is clipping. I didn't really notice the
popping plosives.

I think this is a nice gentle song that I could imagine getting radio play.

Sung well, played well, and the lyrics seem old school and decent.



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thanks for the positive feedback ...... I really appreciate it. Until very recently I've shied away from writing lyrics and attempting to sing so it's a big confidence boost to hear favourable comments...... only trouble is it might enocurage me to write and sing some more ...!
cheers,
Phil

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This is a rather lovely song...it almost has a kind of pyschedelic Moody
Blues/Spirit feel to it. I really like the vocals and the way you layer the
harmonies towards the end. A nice clear, atmospheric production too
Thanks for sharing this with us!
Steve

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many thanks Steve for your positive comments

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You've gotten good comments here, Mr. Philonnie - taking care of the
small things that can make a significant difference in your songs:
adding a pop filter, watching the use of the chorus effect on your
vocals, checking the scale at the end of the guitar solo section... these,
as mentioned, are small things, but will make your subsequent
submissions that much better.

I like your use of harmonies, the chord changes, and the form of the
song. I was a fan of both the Moody Blues and the Alan Parsons Project,
and I think the comparisons here are accurate. This is a very nice song,
and the mood of the instrumentation and vocals matches what the
lyrics are saying very well.

Nice job on this song. I'm sure you're proud of it - you should be.

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many thanks for your kind words of encouragement futzpucker. They mean a lot to a relative newcomer to song writing/singing like me. I'll work on those imperfections and hope to post an improved version sometime in the future
cheers,
phil

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This is a nice tune. Midway through the first verse, I found myself
thinking "Man, there could be some seriously great harmonies on this"
and lo and behold, you brought them in for the rest of the tune. Nice. I
love the changes. They give it an interesting little twist. Enjoyed it.

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thank you kindly sir for your positive comments ..... so glad you like the vocal harmonies
cheers, phil

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