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We were making a sad movie about a lonely umbrella sales man. This was the song.
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charliechen
Hi, Guys. Nice work. Melancholy and evocative. I can feel the loneliness of the protagonist - the isolation. Pretty melody on the piano that is played very well. I especially like the little variation on the theme at the end.
Some suggestions:
1. The low strings unfortunately sound like a fog horn whenever it comes in. Try a cello instead, and turn down the volume of that particular track, it's a little loud in the mix.
2. I'd get rid of the rain stick at the beginning. It's a little too literal. Yes, it's an umbrella salesman, but....
3. The bass is great. But some of the notes don't match up in timing. Just a bit off in places. If this is a software track in GB, then use the align option to line up all the notes.
Overall, a nice composition. Just a little tweaking and this gem would polish up nicely.