This was a very enjoyable listen. I loved the smooth folk rock sound. Not
much on GarageBand's drum loops but the one you chose fits the tune
well. Eh, I use 'em too when I have to :)

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...just go with it. And you have it bad, my friend. I love the sentiment of your lyrics. Witty and rings of truth. (What does that say about my love life!?!)

Your musical setting here is well suited. Easy going and fine.

I use drum loops in my songs as well. But I would have liked some variation, some fills, some changes throughout the piece.

Quibbles aside, good job.

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Well, I certainly agree with you on the drum loops. In fact, I started a forum thread asking for advice on how to generate fills and variations. I'm new to GarageBand and not very experienced with loops! But I've picked up a ton of info already in about 10 days on this site! THANKS for the listen and post!

Jim

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nice feel,chord progression.vocal. enjoyed.keep it up ,cheery

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Catchy tune - and good lyrics, like with the little word play in "tripping me up with your smile/and I stumble gracefully."

But I'm curious about one line in the chorus. Just what did you have to forgive her for?

Wait. Maybe it's better not to know.

This is a great first posting. I'm looking forward to hearing more as you continue to work with garageband.

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Sweet tune. I really like the clean sound with some intricate acoustics.
Loved the Melody and the backup vocals are right on. Nice job.

John

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Haven't heard the previous version. This is an excellent song. It's one
of those rare tunes where the hook is actually the ultra catchy guitar
riff. Great writing and phrasing. Clear and well mixed. I completely
enjoy this. The line "wrapping your legs around me" reminds me a little
of seeing Grand Funk Railroad performing Some Kind of Wonderful live.
They change the lyric for their live show from "When she wraps her
lovin' arms around me" to "When she wraps her lovin' legs around me".
He he he...I always loved that. Brought back a ton of memories from
when I wore a younger man's shoes. I'm guessing the Grateful Dead
have occupied some space in your music collection at some time or
another. Seriously, thanks so much for sharing your music hear. It was
a pleasure to listen to this.


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Thanks Skipper--I'm glad it worked for you! Yeah, you're right, I spent way too much of youth hangin' out at Dead shows....I won't go see the current incarnations, though. It just aint right without Jerry...

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Wow, this puts me right back on the beach in Santa Cruz - I love the lyrics, especially the line "You have this way of tripping me up with your smile
And I stumble gracefully" - quite a wordsmith, and you hit the nail on the head regarding the mysterious nature of relationships. Nice arrangement and feel - you really sell the tune and I'm buying it fully!

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clicked on this in the participation area.

Loved this song...harmonies are great and the folk-rock rhythm sets up
my mood for today. light uplifting music with awesome lyrics... guiatr is
crisp and vibrant... one of dozens of songs i listened to this morning and
it stands out among them all.

Keep them coming! A fav! 9-9-9-9!



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This remix does sound better mixed than the previous one. Sounds more pro
this time. I did comment on it previously too, and i do notice the difference!

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.

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Hi Jim, and a belated welcome to MJ (and the acoustic rock genre,
where I tend to hang out!). This is a really nice song you have here -
clean guitar sounds (not as easy to get as some assume), excellent
vocals and good production combined with thoughtful lyrics and good
arrangement. If you've just started out on MJ this is a very auspicious
beginning. I say this a lot in comments (and I have to admit I'm
listening on iMac speakers at the moment as my headphones are being
repaired - again!): is there a bass line in there? If there is, it's difficult
to hear, if not, it needs one. I have problems with songs where there is
acoustic guitar and drums without bass - just doesn't sound right. To
me this has some serious potential to be driven harder - a decent bass
part would add a lot.
Generally excellent.
Neil

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Thanks Neil--No, there is no bass line. And I don't play bass--I've tried, but MAN those necks are fat and those frets far apart! So, I did pass this on to a friend who plays bass and asked him to come up with a part, 'cause I'd like to hear what it sounds like with one, too. I'm currently struggling through writing a MIDI bass line on another song and trying to use my voice as a bass on yet another.... Thanks for the feedback. I've been enjoying some of your tunes as well!

Jim

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This is a Very Accomplished piece of Music.

The Record/Mix is both entirely engaging and, at the same time, subtle
and complex. Sonically and Dynamically there are no compromises,
here.

Guitar work is, in my opinion, entirely on point - Pro-Level.

While I am totally "infatuated" with the Tone, Manner and Feel of the
song, I come away feeling that I missed something. Specifically, I don't
have a feeling for the "you", who has "This Way" about them. I know,
pretty much, how the narrator fells about a sense of helplessness, but I
don't know why it's somehow OK, how it began, where it's going, other
than to "drift away on the waves".

Can't there be a verse that shares the secret you're keeping, Eh?

Regards,
rtc

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Thanks for the thoughts---I try not to be too specific in the stories I tell in my songs, leaving them open to interpretation. For me, a song that lays it all out there too specifically doesn't stand up to repeated listening--I already "get it" the first or second time through and I'm done with it... So, that's the rationale behind the vagueness, but I appreciate your thought that this may, in fact, be too vague to be satisfying. For me, the song describes one partner's perspective on the ups and downs, desires and frustrations, and co-dependence that all come with a long term relationship. Thanks again for the listen and thoughtful critique!

Jim

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Great sonwriting and excecution all around...

Love it!

. - Harold

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Hi, this is really nice! And a guitar freak like me especially like the guitar work a lot .. You have surely got a nice sound out of the Santa Cruz.

The guitar loops are great .. only I could have wished a bit more variation.

Faved and downloaded!


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Glad you liked it!

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Again, very balanced songwriting. My ears wanted a bridge, something to modulate, add a new perspective, give it slightly more depth. Break up the great groove you've got going, to give it additional freshness when it returns. But even without this, it is such a nice, charming groove, which is a nice complement to the lyrics/concept, especially since I imagined that the lyrics were full of self-delusion, as the relationship actually seems quite doomed. It made it all quite fun. Wonderfully strong acoustic guitar work.

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I think you are right--some sort of bridge is in order. I though that by varyingthe way the melody and chorus are delivered over the progrssion, I might get enough of a change in there, but I think it could still use a bridge...

Thanks for the listen!

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