I can hear some decent riffs in this, but I think you need more variation
early on in the song to keep the listener's interest. The arrangement
seems very "by-the-book" until the breakdown about 2/3rds of the
way through the song.

The drumwork is a bit basic and you would be better served with some
more interesting fills to really accent the changes. I also think the
guitar sound is a bit fuzzy around the edges. If you can tighten it up a
bit, you'll have a really nice sound.

I think all the pieces are there for you guys to have a great tune, it just
needs some work to round out the rough spots and bring everything to
a bit more cohesive point. Maybe upping the tempo by 5% or so might
keep this moving better and give you more energy. Good luck with this
and I'll keep checking back on your other stuff - you've definitely
peaked my interest.

Malachai

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Thanks for taking the time to comment. The drums are not live but pre-
programmed. I try to do fills as best I can but they can be tough to program. The
idea behind this song in particular though was to try and keep it simpler than
other songs I have done. If you have a chance, you can check out some of my
other songs on my website www.crashcontrol.ca. I have song explanations as to
what I was trying to do with each song as well. But this song in particular I was
going for a much simpler style and a bit of a looser feel. I hope that comes
across in the song ok without making the song too simple.

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