I realize you're already at the point of trying to sell this, so the
production is kind of locked in, but here's some thoughts anyways.
Generally, this is really good. Good vocal, though to my ear, your vocal
should be more immediate. It sounds like you were in a small empty
room. A dry compressed vocal that was mixed a bit higher would suit
my ears better. I really like the synth part. In the beginning, it sounds
like there is a main theme to it that really enhances the introduction,
but then it's like there is a few "extra" notes that don't really do much
to add to the part. I'd sooner just hear the theme itself and loose the
"in between" notes that sound to me to be just taking up space. As the
Edge once said : "Notes are expensive" use them only when necessary.
Anyways, overall, great job. Good rock n' roll.

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Nice debut song, Finermusic! Sounds kinda British to me, which is a
positive thing to say. There are lots of great British artists here, but then
again probably you are not.

Vocal performance is straightforward and clean, with effective jumps to
the next octave. Your instrumental playing demonstrates confidence and
mastery.

Would serve everyone well to have a glimpse of the lyrics too.

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yes, posting the lyrics would be good. i like the contrast between the rock vocals, with that synth you'd expect in a more poppy style of music of even video game music. the synth has a nice hook.

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Thanks for listening guys! I really appreciate the comments...I've just
uploaded the lyrics.
I am indeed British, from London, so that was well spotted, Leon!
Thanks again! :-)


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Thanks for listening guys! I really appreciate the comments...I've just
uploaded the lyrics.
I am indeed British, from London, so that was well spotted, Leon!
Thanks again! :-)


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