nice panning. like the drum change when the poem is read the second time. seems to be pretty nicely put together. you do a nice job of making sure the song mellows down when the speaking comes in.

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appreciate the comment about panning. It took me ages manually drawing in the panning parameters in Logic for the guitar solo so it appeared to be a dialogue.

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Good mix. The music doesn't seem unbalanced like most techno is.
Maybe bring out the vocals with a few different ways, reverb, echo, things
such. Also, when I listen to this I am expecting singing vocals, since i am
so used to it. Maybe throw in some background vocals, soft. Just ideas.
Sounds good either way, and I like the back off of the music when you
speak. Good job. God Bless.

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I like the idea of backing vocals. I may play with vocal synthesizer sounds. thanks!

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oh yes - incidentally, it's not me speaking on this - the vocal is a sample from a poet called Drew Roberts (see link in blurb on song). I can't sing and if I did it would be in a ghastly welsh mixed with liverpudlian accent.

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The music seemed not as energetic as it could be and I think part of it is
what jsacker called it being 'balanced' - yes the instrumentation is
balanced, yet it is somewhat static - not as dynamic as it could be to
shake the listener up a bit.

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The two artists at MacJams who come to my mind when I mention dynamics (soft
to loud/slow to fast/etc) are sil-VER and Electro Estate. They are very good with
this.

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Hi Mungo, thanks for the comments. I know what you mean about the dynamism, but I quite like the solidity of it as is, although I will have another listen to the artists you mention to steal - ahem - I mean learn - their approaches to creating a shifting musical landscape. I suppose part of my aim is to produce something monolithic like a kind of music mountain! But maybe that's a bit boring for the listener. You've given me food for thought!

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I don't know - a gastly Welsh-Liverpudlian accent might be a nice addition to macjams : >

Of course, it would have to be the right type of music, but I would think industrial techno rock might work for it!

In this particular piece, I think the lyrics are a nice fit with the music.

All of your pieces exhibit catchy melodies. I like the various textures you wrap them in.

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Thanks very much for the comments, but I think I'll keep my tonsils where they belong for now!

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