A good look inside myself, too. We want it all, then look back to see that simplicity is sometimes better, the root of what makes us happy with those we love..

Thanks,

Best Regards,

. - Harold


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You point out excatly what I mean to say:)

Thanks, Harold

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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The music and the vox are truly pro. Yeah---it's all a trade off, and
sometimes the grass isn't actually greener on the other side. I pray for a
sense of balance when I get feeling this way. You have captured quite well
the dilemma we all at one time or another find ourselves in. Bravo!

Be well!

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Good advise. Balance is what it is.
My call for better understanding was heard:)

Thanks:)

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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Thoddi, you have a great voice for this kind of song; it
sounds like it all comes straight from the heart, and it reminds me a bit
of John Cougar Mellencamp%u2019s voice %u2013 I%u2019m talking about the way he sang
in his later hits (Small Town, Paper In Fire, Check It Out, etc.), not in his
earlier songs when he was more of a rocker -- but yours is pitched a
little deeper.

There are some very tasteful piano licks, but I have a suggestion about
that: Consider removing the piano from the intro, and replacing it with
a similar acoustic guitar idea. Then don%u2019t bring it in until the piano
figure that you have just before %u201Cbut it%u2019s hard%u2026%u201D. I think it would make
more of an impact, and contribute to the gradual instrumental layering
you already have going on. I like the idea of starting with just guitar
and voice; it%u2019s got a simplicity that relates directly to the lyrics.

Finally, I must confess that the lyrics confuse me a bit. In your intro for
the song you write, %u201Ca person%u2019s possessions own the person instead of
the other way around,%u201D which is a saying I understand and can relate
to. Its meaning is very clear, and I wonder why you didn%u2019t insert that
line (or something like it) into the song? I guess my basic question,
though, when I read the lyrics is this: Is this a song about a man
looking for freedom, or is it a song about a man who wants to run
away from his responsibilities? I%u2019m pretty sure you mean it to be the
former, but the second verse made me wonder a bit about that.

Also, and this might seem REALLY picky (please forgive me if it does),
but I would not use the word %u201Cwaive%u201D in the song. The meaning of
%u201Cwaive%u201D is perfect for your song, but I would bet that 90% of people
listening to the song without the lyrics would think you sang %u201Cwave,%u201D
not %u201Cwaive,%u201D which makes no sense. If you were to sing %u201Cgive up,%u201D then
there would be no chance of misinterpretation. In fact (and now I%u2019m
being really, really picky!), I would suggest that the meaning
would be clearer if you were to change the last two lines of your first
verse to: %u201COh I know, I know that I could find it, if I give
up, give up what I possess.%u201D

You'd have to change the rhythm a little bit since "give up" has two
syllables and "waive" has one, but I can hear it my head this way, and it
sounds great.

Good song; I personally think it could use a little more work, but that is
just my opinion, and others might well disagree! And just to be clear, I
like it a lot as it is. Keep it up!

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(Well, there are so many weird glitches in the above message that I
thought I'd re-post it with corrections. I know this is long, but hopefully it
will make it easier to read!)

Thoddi, you have a great voice for this kind of song; it
sounds like it all comes straight from the heart, and it reminds me a bit
of John Cougar Mellencamp's voice -- I'm talking about the way he sang
in his later hits (Small Town, Paper In Fire, Check It Out, etc.), not in his
earlier songs when he was more of a rocker -- but yours is pitched a
little deeper.

There are some very tasteful piano licks, but I have a suggestion about
that: Consider removing the piano from the intro, and replacing it with
a similar acoustic guitar idea. Then don't bring it in until the piano
figure that you have just before "but it's hard...". I think it would make
more of an impact, and contribute to the gradual instrumental layering
you already have going on. I like the idea of starting with just guitar
and voice; it's got a simplicity that relates directly to the lyrics.

Finally, I must confess that the lyrics confuse me a bit. In your intro for
the song you write, "a person's possessions own the person instead of
the other way around," which is a saying I understand and can relate
to. Its meaning is very clear, and I wonder why you didn't insert that
line (or something like it) into the song? I guess my basic question,
though, when I read the lyrics is this: Is this a song about a man
looking for freedom, or is it a song about a man who wants to run
away from his responsibilities? I'm pretty sure you mean it to be the
former, but the second verse made me wonder a bit about that.

Also, and this might seem REALLY picky (please forgive me if it does),
but I would not use the word "waive" in the song. The meaning of
"waive" is perfect for your song, but I would bet that 90% of people
listening to the song without the lyrics would think you sang "wave,"
not "waive," which makes no sense. If you were to sing "give up," then
there would be no chance of misinterpretation. In fact (and now I'm
being really, really picky!), I would suggest that the meaning
would be clearer if you were to change the last two lines of your first
verse to: "Oh I know, I know that I could find it, if I give
up, give up what I possess."

You'd have to change the rhythm a little bit since "give up" has two
syllables and "waive" has one, but I can hear it my head this way, and it
sounds great.

Good song; I personally think it could use a little more work, but
that is just my opinion, and others might well disagree! And just to be clear,
I like it a lot as it is. Keep it up!

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New work for live orchestra.

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wow, this was some review:)

First of all, thanks very much for putting som much effort in listening and commenting on my stuff. I'm greatful for that.

I've heard the early stuff of mr. Mellencamp, but will have to check out the later ones. I liked what he did before so...

My intention with the piano intro was to sort of set a mood. But I see you point, and think your idea to bring it in later on will work good when /if it is performed live.

This is a song I made in one evening both music and lyrics. Recorded it straight away and posted here. That's me in a nutshell.. I'm very eager to finish what I start, and I often find things I want to change after:)

I can see that the lyrics is pulling a bit in both directions. And they need a workover. But really, that is what it sometimes is like. Wanting to be free of obligations, like a busy job, expensive house, car and the committments attached to it.
And of course there is the other side that is full of love to the people involved, and all possessions is a clear result of every choice made down the road. And that's where the ''I want it all - not wanting to let go'' comes along...

So the lyrics is a result of what was on my mind at that time... Re-presenting them to others and getting interpretations of them is interesting and your comments is valued. Thanks:)

Writing lyrics in english makes me often look up words I want to use. A dictionary isn't always the prefered translator. So your comments on alternative words to get the meaning right is appreciated:)

Thank you. This was a very helpful review.

T.



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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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Thoddi, the fact that you did this all in one evening is mind-blowingly
impressive! I wish I had your facility. I struggle over every note!

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nice tune.... dig the message!!!

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Thanks. Good to see you around:)

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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Good sound in the mix, pretty laid back feel mixed with some good
serious lyrics. Nice song. Enjoyed this song.

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I always worry about how the result of the mix turns out. My studio speakers gives to little bass, and I often end up with a mix to loaded with bass. So compliments on the mix is nice to hear.
Thank you, glad you liked it:)

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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What a great message, great songwriting. Sounds really good, pretty amazing that it was done in one evening.

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It's interesting to see so many commenting on the lyrics. Maybe it's a phenomenon well established among creative people... and there seems to be loads of them at this place...

Thanks for spending some time with me:)

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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Thor, this is a very nice song- you keep surprising me with the
consistent high quality on your posts. The lyrics on this are very well
stated (especially considering that english is not your first language),
without being overly dramatic and preachy - your vox is excellent as
usual. I don't really have any nits to pick - your playing is also perfect
for the song. There's something familiar about your voice and delivery
which I can't put my finger on, but whoever it reminds me of, I know I'd
like them a lot!
Thanks,
Neil


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It's always a treat to see you've been visiting all the way from down under Neil:)
Thank you for such a encouraging review. Mentioning my english is appreciated. As I mentioned in one of the other comments, I usually have to look up some words... and I don't always feel confident about having built the sentences in a good way.

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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Mr, I don't think that I have ever commented specifcally on your lyrical
content, and maybe it's because here, you've struck me on such a
deeper level than normal, but what's beautiful about the words to this
tune is how simple and very succinc they are - I mean, what could
make them better... And who would say these things out-loud...
Kudos to you! - The delivery was absolutly perfect and w/ what was
needed in supporting accompaniment - A total package! Again...

But it does seem kinda silly telling you some of these things over and
over because obviously, you do have it down - I've yet to hear it, but
anything less than right on from you at this point and it would just be
considered a bad day... - But the tricky part is, we can never know
who's bad day it was...

Thanks Mister, Dion

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Man, your comment is a real thrill to read Cyd:)
You should see my big smile now... Thanks a lot.
And if you think for one second that it is silly telling me such thing... LOL .. I get high on this stuff.

You'd better give me something to wipe this smug impression from my face;)

You're visits here are most welcome!

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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really a great song thoddi, its got such a great feel. I really like the
vocals, the harmonies. Nice mix, solid ending, very nice indeed.

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really a great song thoddi, its got such a great feel. I really like the
vocals, the harmonies. Nice mix, solid ending, very nice indeed.

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Thanks for listening and dropping a line:)

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Imagination is more important then knowledge!
- Albert Einstein.

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A nice recording & message,very well done .Relates to the lot of us out
here searchin' for and holding on to the only Truth!
-Godchaser

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Delicious, Thoddi. Simplicity takes perfectly. That together with your
warm voice causes that the work arises from art, that you do.
Enhorabuena friend.

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the revealing feel to this tune. Seems like you are sharing a deeper part
of you. Refreshing to hear that.

Thanks much!

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Man, this is a real fine tune, and I can tell by the you singing that you
feelin it real deap, very powerful. You done a great job here!

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you are such a thoughtful writer. I hear ya on the meaning of this song.

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