Olaf, this stands up pretty well as it is, but could also be developed by
improving the ending (not changing it, just making what you've done a
bit cleaner). I know this probably isn't what you want to hear aber es
klingt zu mir wie neunundneunzig luftbalons. Ich bin ein Nina-fan,
und so dass ist ein kompliment! I'm sure that there will be people here
who can give you better advice than me in this genre, but it sounds
good to me. By the way, the pic on your artist page is a classic!
Neil


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hello Neil. thank you so much for droppin by, leave your comment and thank
you for allow me access to the dark side of your soul.... :-) the man who write
songs like -northern road- is secretly a NENA-fan....ooooooh my god!!!:-)
in my childhood NENA was part of a big commercial thing called NDW
(german new wave). every girl used to look like Nena.... no radiostation
without 99luftballons... me and my friends were little punks... so for us it was
a kind of nightmare.....
to the song: you and the other MJammers bucked up my courage to try it a
2nd time..... think i have to rearrenge it....
and btw: saw your forum post........ an overlooked artist......:-)...... no no.. it´s
me: olaf..... not a bit of ARTIST....
thank you again. best from berlin
olaf

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With a little clarity to the overall sound this can reallly be a good song.
Especially the main riff works very well together with your vocal quality.
There seems to be a popping sound, maybe a drum or percussion that
seems to be muddying up the whole thing, I'd get rid of that, but other
than that, it is a good arrangement! Good job.

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jonathan. thank you for your advice, thank you for visiting this page. the song is
an outcome to change any aspects of my doing..... especially the style of playing
guitar, playing riffs instead of strumming my 12string... the kind of
programming drums too.... ok... hope i´m on my way
best from berlin
olaf

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... this track could easily become a solid rock song. So I agree with Jonathan and Neil on that. I think German really fits this kind of genre. So please also publish the lyrics :-) My advice is to work this out, 'cause it's really worth it.
Walter

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walter. hello again..... i added the words... this lyric is not typical for this
sound... i wrote this not really for a guitar-based song... most likely for an
industrial-tune....
.....but now i have to listen to version 2 of your +waiting again+.........
best from berlin
olaf

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Good energetic performance here. I like the song - haven't any idea what
you're singing about, but that's OK. The mix is muddy, but that takes me
back to the sounds of 1976, so if that was a choice of yours, I can go with
it.

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It's a fun little ride. I think it's perfectly realized. This sounds very
theme-songish. Like it could be on tv show or something. I think you
just need to add another cycle, maybe toss in a bit of a break and then
finish it up! It's a great melody.

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ja, das kannn schon sein. Erinnert ein wenig and die fruehen "Aerzte".
Es ist was es ist, ein song der Spass macht und die Laenge is perfekt.
Ein richtiger "Garagen" song, rauh, kurz und schmerzlos wie es sein
sollte. Hoffe es gibt ein paar mehr von diesen "spin-offs" in der Zukunft.

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