I love the chorus part of this song, just because it sounds poignant and
pleading and the melody hooks you and reverberates in the mind even
after finishing the song.
The ending was a bit abrupt and kinda killed the drama that was
brewing from beginning. After the last chord was strummed and the
last lyric uttered, I felt like there was a sense of being hung up...like,
"that's it?" It was very good which is why I felt the song was too short
and deserved some extension. Also, you could be a little more
generous with lyrics. A great chorus deserves more verses. I had the
impression that you got lazy to think up more verses for this, but
maybe you had other intentions which got lost on me.
Inspite of the fact that there is room for improvement, I think it's a
remarkable song that I would consider to be one of my favorites for the
week.
I hope that will "un-lost" your song! :-) Speaking of drive-bye shitters,
someone dropped a few 4s and 5s on my latest song, too. I used to
take that seriously, but now I actually anticipate for that maniac to do it
again and again. (He did it about 5 times on one of my well-reviewed
songs actually, bombing it repeatedly within a one-hour span!) I think
he needs a way to vent his psychosis and I think my song helps him do
that. In a way, I am helping in his therapy. Hope that makes you feel
better. LOL!
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