Melody Song (demo)

urbnite

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a demo. not perfect. i think the neighbors must hate me.

just finished writing today - this is a get it down recording. first take. may flesh it out later with more guitars or something.

the birds sang with me.

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Lyrics

i can't fly
with you
i might cry
will you

soar
higher than ever before

your stone cold skin
gold complexion
leave no room for
imperfection

make mistakes
we will
but we'll move tanks
uphill

and

soar,
soar
higher than ever before

i can't fly
with you
i might cry

Song Stats

Hits: 1428
Comments: 42
Fans: 0
Plays: 232
Downloads: 34
Votes: 5
Uploaded: Jun 09, 2006 - 05:44:38 PM
Last Updated: Jun 15, 2006 - 06:59:00 PM Last Played: Oct 12, 2009 - 10:30:26 AM

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Song Actions

Keywords:

fly (24), cry (27), you (152), i (132), move (11), tanks (1), soar (2), higher (4), goodbye (33), darren (11), urbnite (11), birds (26)

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seagull
powerbook
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voice
bluetube
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Comments

perceptualvortex	perceptualvortex said 1265 days ago (June 9th, 2006)
	I really dig your guitar playing. And though this isn't a style of music I listen to at all, I did enjoy the song. Check out my latest song called Machine Man (w Beastie Boys)

urbnite	urbnite said 1261 days ago (June 13th, 2006)
	I hey pv - thanks for the kind words. glad i got you with something you wouldn't normally like... - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

perceptualvortex	perceptualvortex said 1260 days ago (June 14th, 2006)
	song art By the way, that is one weird cool image... everytime I look at it I try to figure out what the heck is going on. I really dig it. --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/21652">Night Cats (w Vac)</a> Check out my latest song called Machine Man (w Beastie Boys)

loyd vader	loyd vader said 1264 days ago (June 10th, 2006)
	my cat loves this song when the track started, she jumped right up on the table near the speakers and listened intently until it finished and then meowed in approval. i would meow in approval to but would rather tell you how melancholy this track made me feel. suits the rainy weather that we have here in brisbane............. Check out my latest song called im not lazy, im just tired

urbnite	urbnite said 1261 days ago (June 13th, 2006)
	my cat loves this song there seems to be a pattern of my uploads matching your weather... maybe i'm living in the wrong place. it's sunny here! anyway, glad you and the cat liked this one. thanks vader. - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

loyd vader

loyd vader said 1261 days ago (June 13th, 2006)

my cat loves this song
hahahaha, thats true. allthough id admit i sorta choose to play your stuff when the weather is drab cause your music brightens up the day. this mindset implies that if i listened to your music when its bright and sunny, i would end up in a fluro world.
this doesnt happen.......
sends the cats crazy but............................

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stevel	stevel said 1264 days ago (June 10th, 2006)
	intimate a great vocal performance....nice intimate live feel of a demo...you could flesh this one out nicely some day with a full band Do you record everything in one go as a live take? Steve Check out my latest song called Electricity

urbnite

urbnite said 1261 days ago (June 13th, 2006)

intimate
hey steve!

thanks - glad you enjoyed it.

i might do this real soon with a full band.

and yes, i've decided to use my home rig for just one track demos. i'm not
one for fiddling with dials - i just want to play. i'm going into a studio soon
with a band and engineer and whatnot, so i figured i don't have to bother
much about that.

anyway - thanks again for the lovely words.

- d

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springclock	springclock said 1262 days ago (June 12th, 2006)
	DEMO?? this is pretty dandy for just a demo....like that acoustic tone once again and the voice resonates very nicely....I like that you sing with a yearning, it's really comes through strong on this bare bones track.....cool song and cool lyrics....Peace....Ian Check out my latest song called Magnetar

urbnite	urbnite said 1261 days ago (June 13th, 2006)
	DEMO?? demo is a relative term maybe... but yes, the song is there. and i'm glad you liked it. thanks man. - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

alley-oop	alley-oop said 1260 days ago (June 14th, 2006)
	hey mister I think you should fully orchestrate this tune. Drums, bass, key board, more guitars.Maybe strings, brass and woodwindsas well. This a very nice song Check out my latest song called anymore

urbnite	urbnite said 1260 days ago (June 14th, 2006)
	hey mister hey tom - that sounds like a lot of work and i don't have the mind to think of all those parts - i might give it a go with bass and drums, though... thanks for the kind words! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

The Composer

The Composer said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)

Very nice song
Very nice and mellow song here. I understand that this is a demo, so I'm
trying to listen to how things could sound eventually... and what I'd want
to make sure is that you have some nice crisp diction when you do record
this for real. I say this because my first listen through, I sorta just
thought you were 'Oooh-ing' all the way through until I noticed the lyrics
you had posted. Just make sure you can hear the lyrics properly and
theres a decent distinction between your 'oohs' and your words and I
think this'll turn out quite nicely.

Check out my latest song called 25 Minutes in a Japanese Restaurant (Readers Digest Version) (MJRF)

urbnite

urbnite said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)

Very nice song
hey bryan -

thanks... yeah, i typically need to work on diction. and this was very new when i
recorded it. it's hard to tell because i know the words, i can hear them.

we'll see how it turns out... i might record this with the band. although, i just
really wrote it as a personal thing.

- d

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selters	selters said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)
	What an intro! I have always envied your energic and dynamic guitarplay! This song sounds a bit more available for the mainstream then your other song! Wich of course is a good thing! Im still waiting to hear one of your bands recordings Darren! Thanks! Check out my latest song called So Far (Out Of Reach)

urbnite	urbnite said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)
	What an intro! thanks magnus! you just need to beat up your guitar like i do... but i like your style as well. band recordings - yes - must do that soon! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

Joanna

Joanna said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)

Good song!
I agree with the composer regarding diction, because the same thing
happened to me -- I was chatting with you and didn't realize there
were lyrics.

Other than that, though, some wonderful guitar playing that mirrored
the emotions very nicely. I wouldn't mind you coming out of falsetto at
some point, to add some variation to the vocals, but that isn't to take
away from an emotional performance.

Check out my latest song called Nellie G.

urbnite

urbnite said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)

Good song!
yes, diction has always been my downfall. even in everyday speech. i'm
working on it!

and yes, when i redo this, it won't be so much in falsetto. although my voice
is in no shape to sing a high B otherwise. but yeah, i had been working on it
all day and i thought the neighbors must be going up the walls, so i backed
off a bit...

thanks for your insight, though - it's always worthwhile!

glad you liked the guitar!

- d

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CIPHER	CIPHER said 1259 days ago (June 15th, 2006)
	Nice I would have liked more words my this song creates a mood just with the melody - thus the title I guess. It's like you took a private moment of reflection and genuine joy and shared it just with me. Seriously. It felt intimate and that's the strength of it. Enjoyed it. Good counterpoint to my misery. Check out my latest song called Is this anything

urbnite

urbnite said 1257 days ago (June 17th, 2006)

Nice
thanks cipher...

yeah, i've been trying to write with few words lately, so that's intentional.
simplicity is what i'm aiming for. i hope it worked anyway.

funny that you thought of it as a moment of joy because it kind of is, but i feel
like most people would hear a sad song in this one. maybe it's the lyrics.

anyway, i'm glad i was able to be your counterpoint.

- d

---
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	Mr. A said 1258 days ago (June 16th, 2006)
	Great demo! I really like your singing voice, gives the song the plaintive edge that it demands. Fine acoustic playing too -- can't wait to hear the fleshed- out version! Check out my latest song called baby steps

urbnite	urbnite said 1257 days ago (June 17th, 2006)
	Great demo! thanks mr. a! you might have to wait a bit for a finished version, but hopefully not too long! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

bug67	bug67 said 1253 days ago (June 21st, 2006)
	Nice Thanks for pluggin' this. Has a nice live Niel Young feel to it. Very well done. I really don't know what I could suggest to improve this. I like it just the way it is. Maybe some audience noise. Sounds like it was recorded in a very intimate club setting and all that's missing is the audience :) Check out my latest song called Follow the Bouncing Bear With the Kazoo Blues in E (MJRF)

urbnite

urbnite said 1252 days ago (June 22nd, 2006)

Nice
Thanks for pluggin' this. Has a nice live Niel Young feel to it. Very well
done. I really don't know what I could suggest to improve this. I like it
just the way it is. Maybe some audience noise. Sounds like it was
recorded in a very intimate club setting and all that's missing is the
audience :)

hey bug...

neil young ain't bad - i'll take that. audience noise, huh? laugh track?
brilliant! ha.

thanks for the kind words.

- d

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bug67	bug67 said 1253 days ago (June 21st, 2006)
	Nice Thanks for pluggin' this. Has a nice live Niel Young feel to it. Very well done. I really don't know what I could suggest to improve this. I like it just the way it is. Maybe some audience noise. Sounds like it was recorded in a very intimate club setting and all that's missing is the audience :) Check out my latest song called Follow the Bouncing Bear With the Kazoo Blues in E (MJRF)

urbnite	urbnite said 1252 days ago (June 22nd, 2006)
	Nice . --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

Tiny_Man_Inside	Tiny_Man_Inside said 1252 days ago (June 22nd, 2006)
	interesting I like the fact that you can tell that you are really stretching for this one. It brings out the emotion and the depth of the song. A lot of interesting dynamics here. This isn't really the kind of music that I usually listen to, but I can get behind the raw energy. That's what we're here for, right?!? Mason Check out my latest song called Left to Swing (w/ The Composer)

urbnite	urbnite said 1251 days ago (June 23rd, 2006)
	interesting hey mason, glad you like the energy... that's what i try to capture i guess. thanks! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

TheReverendAG	TheReverendAG said 1250 days ago (June 24th, 2006)
	I must say that I am a fan. Interesting vocals. Disjointed rhythm. Nice guitar. Good stuff. Check out my latest song called Can't Stand it

urbnite	urbnite said 1246 days ago (June 28th, 2006)
	I must say that I am a fan. thanks reverend! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

craft	craft said 1246 days ago (June 28th, 2006)
	ok Crying style vocals are very good so as the guitar. This is a good bed for a great song. I'm diggin' it. Check out my latest song called Blue Lights (feat. Spleenveil)

urbnite	urbnite said 1245 days ago (June 29th, 2006)
	ok thanks craft! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

Blue Fire	Blue Fire said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	Great Liked the melody (what a surprise). Nice guitar playing too. Check out my latest song called Amber Rain

urbnite	urbnite said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	Great thanks blue! welcome to MJ! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

	said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	Great "LIVE" sound Quaint, intimate, crescendos, decrescendos, expressive guitar, but I want to hear harmonies in the vocals!

urbnite	urbnite said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	Great "LIVE" sound hey alimar! thanks a bunch - you're right, C is my friend. i'll try your harmony idea sometime soon... :) - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

	said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	A very earthy recording I liked the melody and the playing and would like to hear you expand and refine the tune. Cheers

urbnite	urbnite said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	the masses return! hey mr... thanks man... yeah, maybe do something more with this. harmonies as alimar suggested? i dunno... maybe teach it to 'the band'? anyway - glad you're back around! thanks again! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

cjhoose	cjhoose said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	something about your lyrics is always sublime. Perfect if you will. this is such a nice song to space out to (which is what I'm doing now). Demo or not... with this simple approach it's lovely. Check out my latest song called Julia

urbnite	urbnite said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	something about your lyrics cj! thanks so much - what a lovely compliment. i'm glad you're able to space out to my demo! glad to see you around again! - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

AquilA	AquilA said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	Good Stuff Glad I ran into you in the chat. Very real and down to earth performance. Really enjoyed it. Check out my latest song called Bounce Buffet w/ Hectorious

urbnite	urbnite said 1243 days ago (July 1st, 2006)
	Good Stuff hey AquilA - thanks for the kind words - always good to run into new people in chat for sure! see you around, i hope. - d --- <a href="http://www.macjams.com/song/19187">I'm Not Here</a> Check out my latest song called Everything's Perfect

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