Those good old days are just a memory away : >
Your opening stanza here is fabulous. A nostalgic mood is instantly created by the soft acoustic style and your laid-back vocals (I love the subtle innotations of those slightly drawn out syllables). You paint a dreamy colorful neighborhood scene, nicely accented with deft short-line rhymes, like between "porch" and "tiki torch." We quickly are pulled into a special place - that's good writing and performance.
The theme gets finalized in the line "That's the way it used to here around here." Now we know for sure the singer is looking backwards in time, and the comparison with the present is not likely to be a good one.
The danger here is how to avoid simply writing a complaint song - that the world has changed and I'm not happy about it. At least, that's what ran through the back of my mind when I recognized the nostaglia theme. I think you avoid that trap in a couple of ways. One is the verse in dreaming about your mother - while it's sentimental, it avoids excessiveness by her message
she told me about the past
and how nothing ever lasts.
And the other is how you wrap up the story. Change hasn't been for the better, but I deal with it by patching up the house as it falls apart (nice life metaphor there) and by continuing to plant seeds - even if they are small ones. No big grand solution, but an individual finding ways to cope in a disintegrating universe.
All in all - a very fine effort!
I have always liked your productions - so if Logic Express proves to be an enhancement, that's great!
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Logic gives a much cleaner sound for my money, and this is a good
example. Really nice story well told - all the instrumentation sounds
perfect for the song. Agree with Robert about the mic noise - just as
easy to simply adjust it out with the volume control - although the
sound effect idea has real merit.
Cheers, Neil
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