vocals are needed something strong and emotional I like where you pick
up the guitar playing a little more it gives the piece a more put togther
feel. the symbols build up and drumming are a nice touch. then it all
comes together very nice mabey shorten the beginning and have one
chord change but thats just my opinion. this is going to be great when
you put lyrics to it.

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vocals are needed something strong and emotional I like where you pick
up the guitar playing a little more it gives the piece a more put togther
feel. the symbols build up and drumming are a nice touch. then it all
comes together very nice mabey shorten the beginning and have one
chord change but thats just my opinion. this is going to be great when
you put lyrics to it.

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I like the basic chord changes and how the song is built up, but when the
drums enters, why go all the way immediately? Maybe you can start with
drums and not quite as wild to begin with, than add more and more, with
the cymbals and all. The intro IS kind of long, you almost lost me there.
But still it has some great potential, so just keep on "progressing" on this
one!

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I probably should have clarified. I really appreciate the feedback so far,
but I am not really intending this to be a normal 3-5 minute song you
sit down and listen to, this is more of an ambient song, one without
any vocals, to play in the background; thus, its structure is a little long,
and maybe hard to swallow all at once, and may seem repetetive, but
this is the genre of post-rock/progressive rock that I am playing to; it
is meant more to create some sort of environment. In another genre, it
could have lyrics or more chord changes or be shorter, but for this
genre, it needs the long, steady build with a climax at the end....so
when reviewing this song, try to look at it for its ambient/building
qualities, and not necessarily how well it may fit into mainstream
music. Thanks to all who have taken the time to listen so far, I really
appreciate it.

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Hmm... I have mixed feelings on this one. Overall I like the basic
motif, it works well to build on the way you do. I read your request for
specific feedback, and I think this would do just fine *without* vocals.
But "ambient" in my mental dictionary means without much or any
strong beat... so as you morph the music from semi-ambient at the
beginning (it still has a fairly strong beat without percussion) to heavy
strumming and drums near the end, it becomes very non-ambient
background music, it is instead very driving foreground music. This is
a good thing, but I wouldn't classify it as ambient music. I would also
agree with Ego & Henke, that you ought to think of layering
instruments slowly in during your extended beginning, otherwise, the
repeats are so static that it sounds like a broken record and people get
bored waiting for something to happen. Don't just roll it all in at one
measure, let it slowly build. This would be a better way to add inertia
to this song. Also, although you don't want vox, you may want to think
of some kind of lead/countermelody over the top of it at around the
3/4 mark for the climax, before pulling up to a stop at the end. There
was some clipping/distortion here and there, but you said you were
going to re-record this, so I assume these will get cleaned up. Again,
this sounds like it could be a great epic rock-slide... I look forward to
your updates! Oh, and very cool tree photo on your profile page!
ttfn,
Drakonis

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This is quite nice. I see this as a perfect soundtrack song. A vincent gallo movie would lay across this beautifully.

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I love the chord structure on this one, but I have to agree about the drums. They are overkill. And the cymbals are way too hissy. Why not just a very simple bass drum right in the background? Lots of clipping too, keep those dials out of the red!!! But having said all that, it's very good and has the potential to make a great track. Have you listened to a band called Isis, or another called Pelican? They make quite similar music and tread the fine line between ambient and rock.

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Enjoyed this a lot. Look forward to hearing a more polished version with
no clipping. Good work, heavy but mellow.

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