...here's my input. You've got a very nice voice. The song is a little bare
bones for my taste. It's a straightforward pop song without all the
dressings, the additional instrumentation, harmonies, development
that you would normally hear. The initial lead part jumps out but
doesn't really come back with greater force to build the song up, and
so I was a little let down by the ending. I think somebody voted this a
little too low, though, I think it shows some promise, but it really needs
a lot more development. Of course the person who voted that way may
not understand that voting something as "Average" on MacJams means
that it is somewhere less than that. (that vote might get removed as
"bombing", anyway)You might be thinking of putting out a CD a little
too soon, because I think you need to develop a little bit more as a
writer and recording artist, but that's coming from one who barely gets
off the blocks in that CD race, so consider the source for what it's
worth. I admire your enthusiasm!

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It wasn't me...I usually abstain from voting until I get a better chance to listen,
either on headphones or better speakers...sometimes it takes a while, aqnd that
is if I get around to it at all!

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Yes someone have voted faaar too low. This song is well done. You are a
great singer. Don't know if it can help much, but I give you nines to make
your points more fair.

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that this was a draft. I appreciate the guts it took to publish it before it
was finished. I like the melody and the message (of course). I look forward
to hearing it when it is completed.

God bless,

Rick


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I dig the tune and your vocal stylings. The vocals seem a tad too loud, too
up front, compared to the mix. Jim is right about it being a pop tune, but
maybe aimed more at the early John Mayer crowd. (Listen to his stuff and
hear how loud he places the guitar, the clarity and importance it provides
his playing.) Love is a kind of transformation, a conversion of perspective.
I would have liked a moment when that comes thru, dramatically, in the
music, with a moment that everything falls away, and then build more
than before. This does indeed have a demo feel, from the click-countoffs
to the sudden ending. This is worth the work, a solid bit of writing.

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..both good arrangement and good vocals. They may be a tad too loud,
or too up front, but it is a good vocal. I don't have much critique, all the
others kind of crossed it all already, however, if you feel that you are
ready for a CD then make it. Some people wait forever, never record
because they seek perfection, and it isn't possible to acheive, no matter
what you use or write or produce with. Sometimes it just has to be done,
no matter what the timing is. And there is always some moron who votes
too low...I think someone went through either yesterday or today and
bombed everyone. Oh well, welcome to the rating system. :)

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since this is your demo. i'ld suggest adding a second acoustic (one left a
second right) double vocals on chorus more pronounced drums. i liked
the guiitar solo at the begining. i'm a guitar fool anyway so i'ld of liked to
of heard another. this song could really rip with a little effort to flush it
out. great vocal s and songwritting.

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To differ with others views a little, I think your voice sounds great here.
This is a fine song in my opinion. Production sounds top notch. Lingers in
the mind. Great stuff !!

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like the opening guitar. i was expecting the chorus to come out more and hit hard with emotion, but still sounds great. like your voice on this one. like the vocal change on the bridge it breaks up the melody more.

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