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the moth


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jonx

 Genre: Alternative Rock

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she could be most anywhere:
she smells like apples and tastes like pears...
she comes and goes without a care,
like she's the queen of here and there...

she wears the same tobacco dress
and left a name on her school desk...
now the coffee color of her skin
leaves a stain where she's been...

some days i feel so in-between...
-between the window and the screen...
in all these other lives that flutter by,
there has to be a source of light...

now, she could be most anyplace...
a shadow across your sleeping face...
-but she won't stay, like the rain and snow,
she's got a million places to go...

some people seem to grow so small,
they don't even begin at all...

-could the ones we love be anyone?

-would you open up your heart
and let them in?
Song Stats
Hits: 3112
Comments: 42
Fans: 40
Plays: 720
Downloads: 137
Votes: 35
Uploaded: Oct 25, 2006 - 08:00:41 PM
Last Updated: Oct 25, 2006 - 08:00:41 PM Last Played: Nov 10, 2009 - 02:06:56 PM
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Comments
Ed Hannifin said 1125 days ago (October 25th, 2006)
There aren't that many people....
...on this site who awe me as lyricists, or as combined lyricist/
melodicist, but you're one who does...

And then you have that voice....

Not fair, is it?

Great production, too... and Lisa top of your fan list.... Man...

Terrific song and everything that goes with it...

Ed
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ledebutant said 1125 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
Sigh
You posting a new song is probably in my top ten list of things that
make me happy! I told you in chat, once, how much I admire your
writing, but I truly can't say it enough times.

You pack so much into your lyrics, the second verse, starting, "She
wears the same tobacco dress.." is so rich with associations and
implications, a tobacco dress could be dyed with tobacco, or it could
be a dress that smells like cigarette smoke, or the color of a moth; the
idea of a stain runs through that whole portion of the song, a name on
the school desk, coffee color, a stain. It makes think of the ring a
coffee cup leaves on a table, the evidence that it was ever there at all.

If you get me started on all the terrific sound in the song, I'll probably
type my fingers off. The half-rhyme of by and light, the assonance with
pear and care...it goes on and on.

The line "could the ones we love be anyone?" is beautiful and profound.

Of course, it's not just the writing. I love your voice, the arrangement,
your touch on the guitar. Thank you so much for sharing your songs
here and letting us download them. I've been listening to 'Happiness,'
all week on my daily walk and I enjoy it so much, and sing along every
time.


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ledebutant said 1125 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
double sigh
...one day I'll master proof-reading.
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futzpucker said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
I'm with you, Lisa
I don't sing along (it's called "Spare The Neighbors" in my case), but I also love Jonx's Happiness. I've been compelled to send it to some friends whom I knew would likewise be enchanted by it, and it turns out they are. Mr. Jonx is a true artist.
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grah3am said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
Professional
Well - balanced song, with excellent singing, playing content, dynamics. It's going straight onto my hard drive, with all the other jonx recordings.
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drakonis said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
She stole my mind...
I was pretty much going to say all the things Ledebutant said, but she
seems to have gotten here first... so please multiply her sentiments and
connections to the lyrics and writing and singing by 2 (thousand) or so. I
even like the up-and-down melodic line that feels like a fluttering moth.
Extremely well thought out and performed.
ttfn,
Drakonis
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MissChaos said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
good god,
go get signed already, wouldya?
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Parichayaka said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
One person?!
So many good things to comment on! Your poised vocal performance, the songwriting, the excellent choice of rhythms and beats (love the panning effect), overall combination of the instruments. Not to forget the lyrical quality of your song. What a soothing and thourougly enjoyable performance. Marvellous! Only small thing I was wondering about were the frequent "stop and goes" towards the end. But this is a song I would normally expect to pay for. Can't believe your amazing level of musicianship! MissChaos does have a point there!
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Scott Carmichael said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
Words.... Words
words are your play things... words are your toys.... words are your paints... I want to grow up to be just like you... you have more than just a gift, this doesn't happen by itself... you put in the work, and your intuitive sense brings it the rest of the way home... but you sure make it seem effortless... I love this

sincerely outstanding
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Mcboy said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
kick ass
master lyricist.......equal to u.... any number of pro writers out there...... but non better.........
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futzpucker said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
Added to the Jonx collection on my iPod
Your considerable artistry is becoming the worst-kept secret at MacJams. Everything you produce brings us great beauty and depth.

Thank you for enhancing this site with your magnificent gift. Thank you for presenting your music here for us to be enriched by.
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ziti said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
master
yes...i picked the right word.

really quite amazing....

alert the media

a monster in our midst!

z
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Ed Hannifin said 1124 days ago (October 26th, 2006)
Hey!
You've got a picture on your page!

Well then.

Ed
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ktb said 1124 days ago (October 27th, 2006)
perfect
for my morning wake up song, and I know that feeling will stick as i listen to it throughout the day. The production is only surpassed by your crushing performances on vocals and instruments. totally unreal.
there's an albums worth of exceptional lyrics in a single track. the feel is tuned to my personal space.
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Ed_Moran said 1123 days ago (October 27th, 2006)
Excellent
Great song. Production, performance and content what else can be said.

Ed
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Willywagga said 1123 days ago (October 27th, 2006)
Phew
Simply masterful, perfect, beautiful song. A touch of early Prefab Sprout.
There are no tiny little quibbles I can find. This is just perfect. If one of the big studios don't sign you up very fast, they're very stupid. This is an excellent performance.
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blaky smith said 1123 days ago (October 27th, 2006)
Very nice
Nice music. Really a good production. This is a piece to listen to absolutly. Downloaded ... Marc
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Osric said 1123 days ago (October 27th, 2006)
smooth
This is track goes down so smooth. Very proffesionally sounding. Great stuff man, look forwawrd to listening to your other tracks.
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core said 1123 days ago (October 27th, 2006)
One little detail
After all these flowers you're getting, I almost don't dare to criticize your track. It's beautiful. I just wouldn't use those strings that show up only once, shortly before the ending. They seem a little bit out of place, because they are not used anywhere else, and they don't really sound realistic, like the rest of your instrumentation.

But this is for arrangement. Your performance and the simplicity of the recording is excellent.
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jonx said 1121 days ago (October 29th, 2006)
thanks!
thanks all for the kind and flattering comments--yeah core, that string sect didn't really work for me-i wanted to hand it over to composer clark to finish off-if the string voices sounded better...i know what you mean about the stop/starts too-i'll fuss w/ the rhythm backing soon when i have time-thanks for your astute critique and to all y'all here at MJ-cheers!
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BranDaMan said 1122 days ago (October 28th, 2006)
:-)
what can I possibly say that hasn't already been said? To put it simply, great tune!
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Ed Hannifin said 1122 days ago (October 28th, 2006)
Can I vote again?
I've been listening to this all week, especially on my walk to work and back. One of the best lyrics I've encountered on MacJams. Almost novelistically vibrant and clear... Or like an imagist poem or haiku...

And I LOVE the perfect tobacco colored mother graphic... You really did it with this song...

Ed
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jfaaz said 1122 days ago (October 28th, 2006)
Wow!
Superb!
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said 1122 days ago (October 28th, 2006)
totaly excellent
this is my first listen to your music, and I am floored, words cant say enough when are putting out a cd your a pro
Feter said 1122 days ago (October 29th, 2006)
enjoyed the lyrics alot !!
nice singin too ... well done !!
Denny Borsboom said 1121 days ago (October 29th, 2006)
What a beautiful song...
and that's all I have to say. Thanks.
Denny
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echoroom said 1121 days ago (October 29th, 2006)
Lovely track
Jonx, this is great on sooo many levels I don't know where to begin. The production is top notch, arrangement strong but subtle, fantastic voice, but top for me is the lyric.

'The coffee color' line is truely inspired.

Fill the gap left by Crowded House.

Steve
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Pie said 1121 days ago (October 29th, 2006)
I love...
I love the simplicity of this piece. Lyrics are cute. But could i suggest a little more variety in the melody in the second half. And the 'flutter by...' section should have a little more melodic variety too. Hyper-critical mode is engaged by the way :-)

Be cool,
pie


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said 1121 days ago (October 29th, 2006)
Well...
...I see you've gotten exactly what you deserve this time...the TOP of the Fan Picks! Beautiful performed and produced. Very pro. Sorry it took so long to sign on (I almost missed this jewel!)...been a little busy with life lately. An instant fave, this!


Be well!

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Komrade K said 1120 days ago (October 30th, 2006)
Finely wrought...
and beautifully performed. Not encountered your work before, your lyrics work well as poetry and you have a good hand on the tiller of melody!

KK
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Sumo Sisters said 1119 days ago (October 31st, 2006)
Beautiful
Great tune, and superb voice, let alone the professional level of lyrics (as has been said by others). Thank you! Aya
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mariusdj said 1118 days ago (November 1st, 2006)
ahhhhhh
Fantastic...the quality of sound is amazing,and also great voice
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jwoo10 said 1112 days ago (November 7th, 2006)
Teriffic music you have
All the songs I've listened to by you have been very tastefully played... I mentioned it b4... need drums.. (real acoustic drums).. look me up..
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jesushairdo said 1106 days ago (November 13th, 2006)
totally agree with Ejh
i also think that you are one of the greatest lyricists at this site. and of course youve got the voice. lol and i like your guitars and drums.... i really like the drums in this song. light. uplifting. great song.
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jiguma said 1105 days ago (November 14th, 2006)
Hats off to the song master!
Just amazingly good on all levels - lyrically and vocally especially, this is really masterful. Hypercritical me says: "I would really love to hear one of your songs produced by someone with serious production chops" - I suspect we'd all be even more amazed.
Neil
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j2morrow said 1095 days ago (November 24th, 2006)
Marvelous lyrics
You seem to come upon your subjects from a 45 degree angle, never straight on, which always results in a fresh perspective. That...I guess is what a poet should do, right? Great job.
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Ed_Moran said 1092 days ago (November 27th, 2006)
Outstanding
Jonx

I've been listening to this song on my ipod and I have to say it is outstanding. Pro all the way. Great lyrics feel vocals and production.

Ed
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Drew Kopr said 1033 days ago (January 25th, 2007)
Great tune
Wonderful metaphor and symbolism.
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lavalamp said 917 days ago (May 22nd, 2007)
Really nice tune
Really great song. Well-produced. Nothing I can say, but brilliant. Wallflowers-ish (That's good).
LL
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tamadrumbum said 261 days ago (March 8th, 2009)
WOW!
Very Nice!!!
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Char said 179 days ago (May 28th, 2009)
Thank I.G.M.
for ushering me in to this performance. Brilliant writing. What a nice voice: so easy and natural. Your playing had me tapping from the intro. I will listen a couple more times. Yeah, it is that good. Thanks.
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Relic67 said 178 days ago (May 29th, 2009)
Wow!
Coming to this one rather late.
Amazing song. Very well recorded/mixed too...
It reminds me a bit of the Go-Betweens...


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