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A song that I've been playing with in my head for quite a while. The person who it was written for can't get enough of it, so I figured that I'd give it a go. The vocals may be a touch out of my range, but with a little work I'm sure that they will come around. Thanks for taking a listen!
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Lyrics
I never could see the light never could feel
My sorrow
I was living through my life past mistakes
Not for tomorrow
I was lost and had drowned
In this love that brought me down
Chorus
Come and stay for the night stay for the night now
Forever
Come and hold me tight now hold me tight now
Forever
And I want you to be
I want you to be
My last kiss
Did it ever feel right when she held you
You're left wondering
Did you sell your heart out did you give up
On all your dreams
You are lost and you have drowned
In this love that brought you down
Chorus
I want to let it all do give into
My desires
You wanna feel my soul close that spark
That lights your fire
We are lost and we have drowned
In this love that we have found
Chorus
My sorrow
I was living through my life past mistakes
Not for tomorrow
I was lost and had drowned
In this love that brought me down
Chorus
Come and stay for the night stay for the night now
Forever
Come and hold me tight now hold me tight now
Forever
And I want you to be
I want you to be
My last kiss
Did it ever feel right when she held you
You're left wondering
Did you sell your heart out did you give up
On all your dreams
You are lost and you have drowned
In this love that brought you down
Chorus
I want to let it all do give into
My desires
You wanna feel my soul close that spark
That lights your fire
We are lost and we have drowned
In this love that we have found
Chorus
bug67
This could use some polish. I really dig the simplicity of the piece. I there a flange effect on your vocal? I always did like that effect.
I really dislike giving critiques that are critical...if that makes sense :)
But, here goes:
I don't think the song sounded out of your vocal range but, it did sound a little off key. This could've had something to do with the acoustic guitar being a little out of tune. It'll be interesting to hear a remix of this once all the factors are fixed. I really like the song itself. It has a nice folky, poppy groove to it that appeals to my own musical tastes. Another thing I noticed that kinda, I dunno, rubs me backwards, is at the end of the song. The drums don't stop when the rest of the song stops. Maybe this was intentional but, in my opinion, it adds to the unfinnished-ness of the song.
Please don't take this as a total flame. I and a lot of others on this site are hear to help. Building and using a personal studio effectivly can be a daunting task. If there are any questions, don't hesitate to ask. Keep on keepin' on!