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Description:
A more complete complete song that I've been working on. Background vocals need to be added, as well as a little "surprise" 1/2 way through. The drums and bass may be a little of, but hey, I'm not a drummer or a bassist, and trying to play instruments on my keyboard, well, let's just say I'm starting to develop carpal tunnel! Written for someone who is very close to my heart who I love very much !
Lyrics:
Do you see me in your dreams, am I a familiar face to you
Can you love me like I need
I need a special kind of love, maybe some help from up above
Will you touch me feel me need me
What did she take away from you, and can you see it clear as day
Why won't she love you like I need to
Do you wake up late at night, wishing that I would hold you tight
Thinking touch me feel me need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Let your spirit guide you through the darkness you're finding in your soul
Let you fantasies come true
You can feel it in your heart, you've know it from the very start
Thinking touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
I can see you in my dreams, you are a familiar face to me
You can love me like I need
You are my special kind of love, you are my gift from up above
When you, touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Touch me, feel me, need me
Hardware:
M-Audio Mobile Pre-USB, Wenson Hollowbody Electric guitar, Art and Luthrie Acoustic Guitar
Software:
GarageBand
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very cool when the drums &mdash 11/17/06 - 10:37:15 PM
thanks ! &mdash 11/17/06 - 10:39:53 PM
thanks egobandit ! I thought that the song kind of lent itself to a natural progression. I've still got a little something to add during the "bridge" so to speak! Thank you so much for taking a listen !
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minigurl, &mdash 11/17/06 - 10:45:44 PM
...this sounds very nice on headphones...
You have nice, non-dramatic sense of a well-panned mix here... I like the way that you're using your voice here... It's heartfelt, without getting overdramatic and sounding over-acted....
I also like the two different guitar sounds, left and right... One of my favorite tricks... The acoustic picking is good... I like the electric sound you're using, and I like the little almost-squeal pick noises you leave in...
Sure, there are little production details that could be tightened up, but this is also, to my ears a very well realized song, and one that would probably sell millions...
I think you've got something going here....
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wow!! &mdash 11/17/06 - 10:58:28 PM
What a great comment, thanks so much Ed! Every day I learn something new, and I've spent a great deal of time mixing this to the best of my limited abilities! Thanks for taking a listen!
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Nice Job &mdash 11/17/06 - 11:19:42 PM
Minigurl,
I agree with the previous post. The song is very well conceived and arranged. As far as the learning process of mixing I can tell you that I have been at this for only 10 months and thru trial and error and alot of help from fellow MJer's you will be suprised how quickly it comes.
Great Job
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Party of Ed's in here tonight??? &mdash 11/17/06 - 11:34:07 PM
Thanks very much Ed! I've been at this for a couple of weeks, and I'm very excited at what I've been able to come up with. It needs a little tweaking, but I know that I'm not totally done with it... Yet! Thanks for the comment !
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To be honest .... &mdash 11/18/06 - 02:00:23 AM
.. I would like the volume of the vocals to come up a little in the mix .... I kept reaching or my volume "lever" and it was already at full .... I wanted both the whole thing a little louder ... but especially I would have liked to hear the vocals a little more ... they were slightly muddied in the music ..... don't know if it's just a volume issue ... or another mixing issue .... BUT ... if there is ONE thing I have learned at Macjams is .... what it sounds like through headphones .... it sounds TOTALLY different in the Ipod ... Mp3 player ... CAR stereo ... CD ETC ... so HARD TO MIX !!!!! [ Reply to This ]
Alannah... &mdash 11/18/06 - 08:57:23 AM
I'm still fighting with the vocal levels a little myself. I was listening on the iPod this morning on the way into work, and there are definitely a couple of changes that I want to make. Thanks for taking a listen !
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i like the feel &mdash 11/18/06 - 02:03:10 AM
sometimes the feel of a song says alot more then techicality. a very strong tune. ed (ejh) is always first in line to comment on guitars and his opinion is gold. and i agree acoustics and electrics where candy to my ears, i confess to being a guitar junkie. the melody and vocals fit like a gove. excellent work!
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thanks Vic! &mdash 11/18/06 - 08:59:44 AM
You feedback is greatly appreciated! I had a lot of fun with this one getting as many guitars in there as I could without it sounding muddy and such. Even my own little "lead" line which is an area of playing the guitar which is completely new to me. Thanks a million !
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Oh, Hell Yeah! &mdash 11/18/06 - 02:17:06 AM
Rock on, minigurl! Keepin' it simple and to the point. EVERYTHING is so well recorded/mixed. Super fine job. Great song too, by the way. Listened in my head phones. Heard some noise before and after that coulda been edited out but, it actually kinda added to the feel. I always like hearing albums that leave those little bits in. Kinda adds life to a studio mix. Kinda makes you feel like your musical heroes ARE human after all.
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random sounds!! &mdash 11/18/06 - 09:02:14 AM
To be honest, I just haven't trimmed out the random sounds. BUT, I was soloing one of the acoustic tracks to set a level or something, and very faintly (because I've been micing the guitar) you can hear my dog's collar jingling as he shakes :D I thought it was funny. Thanks for the great comment bug !
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What? &mdash 11/18/06 - 09:11:00 AM
Does this song need? A larger audience! It builds nicely, breaks into a great beat with the drums and bass, and a nice touch with the electric. Great vocals, as usual. A great song; with the exception of the fine vocals in this, the music reminds me of a favorite artist of mine, Neil Young.... . - Harold [ Reply to This ]
You're going to make me blush ! &mdash 11/18/06 - 09:40:47 AM
A larger audience would be a wonderful thing ! Neil Young hey? I'd take that as a wonderful compliment! Thanks so very much for taking a listen !
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great composition, but... &mdash 11/18/06 - 09:55:19 AM
No doubt that you are gifted with the talent of composing very pleasing songs. And I can only agree with all the precedent comments. But...
...so strange nobody mentions this... grrr...I have to play the bad guy again :-( The 'need me' in the verses is sang quite a bit out of tune. I tried to imagine that you did this on purpose (some kind of dissonant singing), but I think it isn't the case. Or is it after all? Don't know. Anyhow, you can avoid this easily by breaking your word 'need' in two: like 'nee-eed', and make two different tones of it. The first tone is a little stepstone to the second one, and that way your voice doesn't have to find that difficult tone out of the blue (like it's the case now). As a non-trained singer, I'm using these kind of 'dirty' tricks quite often (haha). Just to show you what I mean: http://www.macjams.com/song/23340 > at about 2/3th of the song, listen to the word 'instead'. I don't know if this makes sense... And I really hope you don't feel insulted in any way by this comment. Only trying to be helpful :-)
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not insulted at all !! &mdash 11/18/06 - 11:56:10 AM
Walter, I completely appreciate the honest crit of my voice! I had already planned on re-recording that portion of the chorus, and I was thinking that if I added some background vocals it would take the edge off that un-tuned portion of the song.
I'm taking vocal lessons to correct the very things that you talked about. And constructive comments like this are only going to make me a better artist. Thank you so very much !
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Nice &mdash 11/18/06 - 12:35:52 PM
You've got the distorted guitar spot on! I love that warm, cruncy sound, especially when the chorus kicks in. I like your voice, too. Good work. [ Reply to This ]
of course... &mdash 11/18/06 - 12:37:37 PM
Seca... &mdash 11/18/06 - 05:46:45 PM
Thank you very much for the comment ! I'm very happy with the electric and how it kicks in. For the most part both electrics are simply pre-sets that I added to the original track.
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YIIIIKKKKKKKSSSS!!!! &mdash 11/18/06 - 01:44:32 PM
GEORGEOUS SONG!!!!! I love your voice , lyrics, style! The NightBird~ [ Reply to This ]
Thanks!! &mdash 11/18/06 - 05:51:03 PM
Thanks for the comment! Style is something that I've been working on to make things my own, and I appreciate that you like it. Thanks so much for the comment !
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I hade to... &mdash 11/18/06 - 01:48:41 PM
Listen twice and I love it.
Thanks for sharing this great LOVE song.
Take care
Kenta
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much appreciated ! &mdash 11/18/06 - 05:53:57 PM
I'm so very happy that you enjoyed it! Tough "love" situations seem to bring out the creativity and inspiration, and I've got plenty of both these days! Thanks very much for taking a listen!
I checked out the link that you left, and that's a truly great song. The vocals are inspirational !
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touched... &mdash 11/18/06 - 04:03:42 PM
Very very good song... I love the way it is soft, then you feel it building toward the chorus and getting powerful there, really like the way you did that. I am terrible at singing, so I can't offer any singing advice, but I know you need more practice breathing so you don't waver and run out of breath here and there... that takes away a little from the song's impact to me... but on the other hand, your delivery is actually quite honest and riveting... and your guitar playing is great for this. Oh, this reminds me a lot of a Japanese folk singer I have some recordings of... I really like this melancholy style... I'll have to send you a couple mp3s of "Yamasaki Hako" to compare sometime.
ttfn,
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as always... &mdash 11/18/06 - 05:55:54 PM
Your comments are bang on Drakonis ! Vocally I'm still working on things, but every lesson, and every week they are getting stronger. Still working away, and I always will be. Thanks so much for taking a listen, and leaving such a great, constructive comment !!
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A Lover's Plaint &mdash 11/21/06 - 11:36:49 AM
The Two Acoustics are Solid and enveloping. Immediately, the Song embraces the listener. A strong Rhythmic pulse to the slow walk of the story. Reinforcing.
The Timbre and Texture of the Vox is so attrative and compelling, here, Again! I do wonder at the use of the gliss at certain points where it looks like you would, rhythmically, use a taught interval. (Are you using Tracking Phones and cutting the FX during tracking? The FX can lead one astray - he says from experience.)
The Soundscape is full and dynamic, reflecting and representing the Emotive of the plaint. My one reserve is the size of the Bass, it seems a drop of, say 3dB, would be sure to support but not crowd the Vocal.
A Fine Offering, here - Again!
With Best Regards,
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Tracking phones??? &mdash 11/21/06 - 12:28:56 PM
Thanks for the comment RT !!! What are you referring to in regards to tracking phones and FX. My complete noob brain has no idea what you're talking about... lol And are you suggesting to lower the bass? That is something that can definitely be done !
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The Jargon &mdash 11/24/06 - 05:18:32 PM
Personal Reply and Explication Sent.
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Wow! &mdash 11/22/06 - 05:55:38 PM
This really takes off in the chorus - love it. Great job all around - no complaints here on the bass an drums - just the fact that you avoided using loops is extra points. Lyrics and vocals really crown this great production. [ Reply to This ]
thanks Bud !!! &mdash 11/22/06 - 07:01:17 PM
What a great post, thank you so very much. I'm by no means a bass player, or a drummer, and I'm very happy with how they came out. Not too bad for using my mac keyboard as far as I'm concerned.
I've checked out some of your stuff, and I really enjoyed it!
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good song &mdash 12/27/06 - 01:51:39 PM
needs some touches but is very good... Nice production. Tight arrangement and mix... Very well done... :) [ Reply to This ]
thanks craft! &mdash 12/27/06 - 06:52:51 PM
This song is next on my list for a little reworking. Now that the holidays are over, I may actually have a few minutes to myself to get back to making some music. Thanks for the listen and the comment !
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need me. &mdash 01/08/07 - 08:24:45 PM
I like the chunky surprise 2 thirds in, nice. I agree with the need me part of the vocals, if you broke it up a bit or lowered the pitch,maybe get a bit angry at the end of it and add the rasp that you have to your voice..a quality that can't be faked,the way it is now it may be going a bit outside of your range, but Im not a singer so what do I know. I love the song anyway, and will be added to my favorites [ Reply to This ]
niquers... &mdash 01/10/07 - 06:11:10 PM
Thanks for the comment! I'm in the process of tweaking the vocals this week (part of my weekend project to get a few songs "totally" finished).
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