The best of the 2 songs you posted, in my humble opinion. Good melody, nice singing. Just a bit flat in production, I think. Nice, anyway.

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I apprietiate you taking the time to listen and comment, I will return the favor very soon. -MJG

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very expressive I would like to hear your singing turned up a bit but, thats about it everything else sounds solid. steady back beat holding it all together. good song

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Once again for the positive feedback, yeah, I must work on my shyness around the vocals, thank you though-MJG

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vox, and bass :) The NightBird~

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swoopin' in for some late night comments, thanks, I'll post them at some point today(vocals/lyrics), glad you liked this song,helped me express some personnel issues-MJG

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Nice song, melody, performance and production. It has an almost David Byrne feeling to it, but don't be shy and push up that vocal of yours a little bit, it's good. Nice guitars and arrangement also. I could actually take a little bit more vocals as mentioned, but also a bit more bass in some sections. This is very good though. /Mikki

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For commenting,voting, but most of all for listening. Yep, definitly could use a few touch ups. Vocals up for sure, and the end, my lead could have been dropped, or redun. Glad you enjoyed-MJG

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and melody. I concur with the other comments here about pushing those vocal forward.

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Muchas Gracias, mi amiga, thanks for listening & Commenting. Yep, just tryin' to blend in with those vocals, by request:Next song I upload, I'll push em'(vocals)up! Thanks for the tips-MJG

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I like the melody and your careful, laid back vocals. Good guitars.

Remove the drum loop, and you have a winner:)

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I hear ya, if you get time check out "Light of Heaven" , This is recorded live with my cousin on Drums and our friend Josh on rythm guitar, I play the lead/vocals, I think you might enjoy it, -Thanks for your imput though, I do apprietiate it,
p.s. I think that glitch occured when I transferred the tracks onto disk from the Boss 8-track

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The lyrics are nice in their understated irony. I agree with several others that the vocals should be a bit more up front. I also think you need more variety in your drumbeat--a nice fill here and there would add a lot to this song. It sounds too much like a machine. Nice guitar work.

The abrupt ending bothered me. I don't think a fade would be appropriate but the end sounds like a mistake as you've posted it here. Also I listened to the beginning two or three times and I heard some sort of glitch--maybe it's just a gremlin in my computer but check to make sure. I'd like to hear another version of this once you've worked on it some more.

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I agree with just about everything, The Glitch, I think happened on the transfer from the Boss Br864 8-track-to the Sony CD Recorder I used. Then from the Disc onto the mac. The 8-track drum machine, yeah, I should probably learn to slow down and speed up the loop. Thanks for the guitar props, but you probably heard my f-up on the last verse, & yeah, that ending is way to abrubt, I'll try and work on this, again, I apprietiate your ear, love to hear more from ya, you give quality, sound , advice-MJG
If you get a chance please check out this tune, "Light of Heaven" Live version I think you'll enjoy, http://www.macjams.com/song/27009

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.. I agree with pretty much what been said. In short, like tune vocals carry it, they need to be louder but they need support. Iron out wrinkles in production, guitars in places and think about the drums and bass doing something "a bit more". Liked it all the same, the feeling is there. Worth coming back to.

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I apprietiate your comments, got to work on those vocals, your constructive critisism helps me to make production/ideas,better-MJG

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This is a GREAT GREAT SONG !!! Great Tempo & delicate Lyrics REALLY Good:) ! Wish Your Voice was Much more Forward !! This makes me dream... of a drumsolo at some point : ) THANKYOU Happy I stumbled in to Your Music !

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Beautiful Picture too .. Thanx

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I've heard better versions of this tune.

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