I can definitely hear some great potential in a fuller production, but "simple" and clean suits the mood of this tune very well. Love the lyrics. Reminds me of all the nights laying out in the pasture near my parents house while I was growing up just staring up into the sky.

If you rework it, I wouldn't add to much to the production instrument-wise. The only spot you may want to "polish" is the first section of the harmonies at the end, but it's a very minor thing.

Great tune. Absolutely love it.

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I like this recording the way it is, and I think it stands pretty well as it is. If you were to add more instruments, I would hope it was sort of ambient and quiet-like, not really like a rhythm section and all, maybe add some synth bleeps and boops like their being beamed in from outer space. The singing is actually really nice, the only thing I'd change is the roomy-ness. It sounds a little distant and a more intimate sound would be nice. But maybe the room you record in has that sort of sound, but if you get up on the mic a little you can cut that down a bit. But all in all a nice song!

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i agree with jim. a more intimate vocal. kinda like "julia" from the beatles white album. don't think you need the second vocal. nice.

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would be a good idea in my opinion. The singing has a lot of soul and feel. Some mellow percussion, like congas
would sound nice, and some simple bass line.
Doubled guitar would enhance it also. I would keep the
vocals the way they are, they are excellent.
Right now this song is good, with a little "polishing"
at the right spots it will be a great song.
Nice work.



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I concur with Vic's "Julia" comparison. I think simple is best on a tune like this. I also agree that the second vox is unnecessary. Your playing is lovely and your vox in top form here. Great pensive lyrics. Kudos.

Be well!

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Bronco,
I would not change anything, it sounds just fine the way
it is, you, your singing, and the stars. Really enjoyed
the extended guitar playing section.Very Poignant Lyrics.
Really Enjoyed it! To me this was a voteable song.


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