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minigurl (10), kevmikwa (4), rock (1083), guitar (860), damaged (2), dark (300)
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Ok, so I'm back again with this tune. Only this time, I've had the very talented kevmikwa hanging out with me on drums, and his track blew my mind. So a HUGE thanks goes out to him for helping me out again. I've re-worked the vocals a touch as well.
In case you missed it the first time:
This is a song that I started writing probably about three years ago, and never made it past the first verse and chorus. Every once in a while when I picked up my guitar, I'd start strumming these chords, and the song would sort of sprout up again. Well, finally, after three years of tinkering, it's finally done. Lyrically it's a little darker than I would typically write, but expanding musical horizons is always a good thing.
As always, comments and suggestions are greatly appreciated.
Lyrics:
I was standing out as the rain was pouring down
I was too dry to come inside
I was on the edge on the verge of breaking down
My sanity would not comply
Chorus:
Where do I go now
I've got nowhere to turn, that bridge has burned
Where do I, where do I go now
Honey you did all you could, but I am
Damaged Goods
I'm all alone in an over crowded room
I want to run to face my fears
In my head well that little voice consumes
The thoughts that it engineers
Chorus
I'd try to sleep but these ghosts exhaust my bed
Those who came before torn away
Sick of hanging on they chose to cut their thread
Didn't realize I'd be healed to stay
Chorus
I am damaged, I am damaged goods
Hardware:
M-Audio PreUsb
M-Audio Keystation 61es
Art and Luthrie Acoustic Guitar
Wensen Hollowbody Electric Guitar
Epiphone Special Electric Guitar
Software:
Garageband
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Wow this is great &mdash 01/12/07 - 04:06:01 PM
What a good live in the studio sound you've gotten here. I especially like the way your voices overlaps itself from verse to chorus. The guitar tones are fantastic as well as the playing all around. Lyrics and vocals are wonderful - I really connect with the second verse. Well done. What a difference a drummer can make - great job kevmickwa - excellent collab. This song is also structurally interesting BTW. [ Reply to This ]
Thanks bud... &mdash 01/12/07 - 04:38:49 PM
Thanks for the comment Bud. Mike did an awesome job on the drums, completely upped the tempo. So a big thanks to him. The chord progression is a little different, but that's what I was going for. Thanks for the listen and comment!
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cool &mdash 01/12/07 - 08:08:13 PM
I like how you start this one. Good build up and I dig how those guitar play. Well done drums, and the song is put together real good. Your vocal is just right for this tune. I have just good things to say about this one:) [ Reply to This ]
thoddi... &mdash 01/12/07 - 08:19:32 PM
Thanks for the listen. I had a lot of fun laying the guitar parts down. It's all a learning progess, trying new things and seeing if they work. Playing outside the "box" that I'm used to playing in.
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Great! &mdash 01/12/07 - 08:14:12 PM
Great voice, fits the style of the song. Love the Neil Young style guitar solo. Very convincing! [ Reply to This ]
Thanks Oniblah &mdash 01/12/07 - 08:22:37 PM
You're not the first person that's mentioned Neil Young, and I take that as a compliment, so thank you! This was a fun one to work on. Thanks for the listen and comment.
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pretty &mdash 01/12/07 - 08:23:05 PM
This is again a very charming track. You're evolving so greatly with every tune you upload. The chorus is a killer, lingers on in my head. One little thought: I might like to hear you breaking out a bit more vocally. I mean: in some parts you tend to follow the chords with your voice too litterally (especially in the verses). A little extension of the vocal scale - up and down - would bring some more melodic variation to the song. But apart from that, once again, very well done.
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Thanks Walter! &mdash 01/12/07 - 08:30:48 PM
Thanks for the listen and comment. Glad to hear that the chorus is sticking in your head. One of the girls that I work with is constantly humming it, and that always puts a smile on my face. And having a good hook is never a bad thing. Thanks again!
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I hear more air in this mix... &mdash 01/12/07 - 09:56:19 PM
...more difference left to right, I think...
Still hear the Liz Phair, still love that ascending electric line at the chorus...
I think I'm hearing more acoustic in there, too, playing rhythm against the cymbal lines...
It's great having that real drumming for a track like this. I might even suggest trying a mix with the drums more forward, building the mix from the drums and the best sound you can get on them, coupled with the best sound you can get from the vocal... then layering in the other stuff...
I can really see you working at your craft in these versions, and I admire it...
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Thanks Ed... &mdash 01/13/07 - 10:19:03 AM
Slowly but surely I think that I'm figure this stuff out. I read and re-read all the comments on the previous mix, and tried to make sure that I made a couple of changes. Glad to hear that I'm slowly figuring it out. Thanks for the listen and comment!
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Stop it &mdash 01/12/07 - 10:15:05 PM
Please, minigurl - you're killing me ... you're gonna give me a big fat head if you keep praising me so. If I was doing some groundbreaking stuff (i.e. something that Tadashi Togawa or Perceptual Vortex might do), that would be one thing. I'm just kinda playing along - your groove was already laid out there. However, I will say that I kinda pride myself on drumming like that - simple and supporting. You're da bomb, I'm just the guy behind da bomb with the drumset.
Thanks for letting me play on your track! Oh, and thanks to bud, thoddi, and Ejh for the kind words. [ Reply to This ]
kevmikwa... &mdash 01/13/07 - 10:22:04 AM
My father always told me to give praise where praise is due. And anyone who can take a song, listen to it a few times, and then lay a drum track as quickly as you did, certainly deserves my praise, so thank you again.
As always, it's a pleasure working with you! Thanks so much for taking what I hear in my head, and making it sound better than I imagined!
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Right &mdash 01/13/07 - 11:35:58 AM
Gonna doff the humble hat for a minute and be gracious: thank you for the kindness, JK. I'm horrible at taking compliments, aren't I. [ Reply to This ]
Yes... &mdash 01/13/07 - 11:43:51 AM
You are. But that's ok!!! And, you're welcome!
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nice!! &mdash 01/13/07 - 10:34:56 AM
You have a great voice!!!! It's pleasant to listen to but real! In combination with your lyrics and melodies I'd say you're a shoe in for some good things in the future. [ Reply to This ]
Thanks! &mdash 01/13/07 - 11:26:12 AM
Thanks for the comment and listen. What a compliment!
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beautiful &mdash 01/13/07 - 12:43:08 PM
Beautiful!!! I love it!!! The emotion is so moving. Great playing, great sounds. The singing is precious too!!!
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thanks eanbardsley! &mdash 01/13/07 - 04:42:52 PM
This song has taken forever to come about. I can usually write something in one sitting, and edit it a few times over the course of a couple of weeks. But for whatever reason, it took 3 years for this to get finished. And as far as I'm concerned it was well worth the wait. Thanks for the comment and listen!
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Woah &mdash 01/13/07 - 06:37:30 PM
Thanks &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:00:55 AM
TheReverendAG, thanks for the comment. I spent more time on this vocally than I have on anything previous to it.
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Nice!!! &mdash 01/13/07 - 09:26:42 PM
Great job, your vocals fit this song perfectly!! The drums are incredible. Just when I thought I could get this song out of my head, you go and get it stuck right back in!!! You have 2 new fans a 10 year old and an 8 year old...Nice song!! [ Reply to This ]
niquers... &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:08:49 AM
Glad to hear that you're finally listening to me!!! Ha Ha Ha. Very cool about the two new fans, have they figured out the words? Thanks for the great comment!
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Woooah &mdash 01/13/07 - 10:13:50 PM
Powerful song--incredible lyrics. Well worth the three years it took. Nice vocals too. Kudos. [ Reply to This ]
j2morrow... &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:04:12 AM
Glad that you liked the lyrics, I'm very happy with how they turned out. Thanks for the listen and comment.
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I'm tellying ya &mdash 01/14/07 - 12:38:35 AM
it's a hit. It's got a a hook, it's got feeling. Plain and simple, it freak'in works. [ Reply to This ]
damiengh... &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:10:54 AM
Wow, thanks! So much work went into this song, and I'm very happy that the "hook" is there. Thanks for the comment and listen !
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wow....very kool &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:11:02 AM
piece of songwriting........well crafted......damn good song...fanned and downloaded...... [ Reply to This ]
and.... &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:13:59 AM
yes u to need to be "discovered".....the world needs another contemporary to alannis morrissette, etc.......
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Wow... &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:23:07 AM
Thanks McBoy. I'd love the be "discovered" that's for sure. Thanks for the great comment and listen.
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NOT BAD &mdash 01/14/07 - 07:54:54 PM
Diggin the tune but I'm not sure what it is about that electric guitar. I don't know what it is? Sounds a little loose. Seems like there might be a bad note in there along the progression. Maybe it's just me? [ Reply to This ]
Thanks Doc... &mdash 01/15/07 - 09:35:21 AM
Not sure about the electric either. I'll have to take a closer listen to it, because I haven't noticed anything yet, and I've listened to this song a million times. Which may actually be why I can't hear it. Thanks for the listen and comment!
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soaring higher each time... &mdash 01/14/07 - 07:58:02 PM
Wow, this gets better each pass. I know you want this to be slightly dissonant to get the point of "Damaged Goods" across, so I accept that here. Your very first vocal line is slightly slurred and hard to understand the words, but then the rest of your singing is clear after that. The initial guitar and drum leadup in the song is awesome, really gets things moving and its unstoppable after that, Mike, absolutely awesome drumming there! Jen, your guitar playing and singing is great, and very professional sounding mix. Love all the little nuances.
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Drakonis &mdash 01/15/07 - 09:40:59 AM
As always your comment is greatly appreciated. Not sure what you meant by the first part though. Maybe I just don't have enough coffee in the old system this morning. Thanks for the listen my friend!
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And yes... &mdash 01/15/07 - 10:01:53 AM
Although he hates to hear it ;) Mike did an amazing job on drums!
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Well ... &mdash 01/15/07 - 01:52:03 PM
I don't know that I'd say I "hate" to hear it :). I may not be the best at accepting compliments, but everyone likes to know that their part made a difference, so it does mean a lot to me when you (and drakonis and jiguma et al) say nice things.
I guess it's only tough for me because I'm not doing anything particularly inventive - I just heard the groove Jen had already laid down and played along. Heck, I totally lifted the "I am damaged, I am damaged" turn (the tom roll thing) from Jen's original track!
Seriously - your kindness is appreciated, and it does make a fella feel good. [ Reply to This ]
Still love this &mdash 01/14/07 - 09:54:12 PM
Liked this a lot in the earlier version, and Mike's drumming certainly improves it - nothing beats good live drums. The Liz Phair comparison still holds, and your singing, playing etc are all great - I think you might have even lifted the bass a little, as it certainly has more presence than the earlier version. I'm a little trepidacious in saying this, but I think this has another step to go before you've squeezed the best out of it - to me, the production could be a little more aggressive and driving. I'd be really interested in hearing what someone like racerat or SIL-VER or one of the other production gurus could do with your GB tracks. This is a really good song, and top-notch production would make it even better. I'm only saying this because it's so good!
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Thanks Neil... &mdash 01/15/07 - 10:12:09 AM
I agree with the "pro" production thing. I keep telling myself that I really don't know what I'm doing (and I really don't). I just tinker around with things until they sound good to my ear, with little thought as to what exactly it is that I'm doing. Glad that you enjoy the song, thanks for the comment and listen.
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Cool! &mdash 01/15/07 - 05:41:50 PM
This is a great colab! I should start doing some druming for songs like this (but, first i need to get my computer up in my room with my drum set). Good work! Keep it up! [ Reply to This ]
Lighttronics.... &mdash 01/19/07 - 09:33:38 AM
Thanks for the listen and comments. If you get that kit and computer set up in the same space, maybe we'll colab on something?
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Not bad at all ..) &mdash 01/15/07 - 06:19:01 PM
But there could have been some more instrumental parts (IMHO).
Maybe you do a remix of this the hi-hat is too much on the left and as Moorland said some voice parts could be clearer. [ Reply to This ]
Instrumental Parts... &mdash 01/19/07 - 09:46:50 AM
Thanks for the comment! I'm actually going to move some vocal stuff around so that there is a bigger "break" so to speak. Someone was kind enough to send me a note with some great suggestions, once of which was the "break". So, it's in the works, thanks again!
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Yeah!!! &mdash 01/15/07 - 06:51:38 PM
That's some cool stuff from you troops. Nice, nice, Jen.... Mike for spice! The electric is really cool. . - Harold [ Reply to This ]
Thanks Harold! &mdash 01/19/07 - 09:51:00 AM
I've really enjoyed the journey that is this song, and it hasn't ended quite yet. Thanks for the listen and comment!
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cool &mdash 01/15/07 - 08:01:44 PM
This is what it needed some realy good drums now it sounds realy pro
This is it realy good love how it all came together keep rockin it you got some great chops (voice) that is [ Reply to This ]
Thanks... &mdash 01/19/07 - 09:56:30 AM
Thanks for the listen Ego. And you're right, some pro drums completely changed the feel, and I'm so happy with what Mike came up with (again!).
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pretty song &mdash 01/16/07 - 04:21:07 PM
Lyrics are great but you can go up and down with your great voice... Try it!!! Overall very good job with this song!!! [ Reply to This ]
Craft... &mdash 01/19/07 - 10:05:25 AM
Thanks for the vocal suggestion! I'm still trying to gain some confidence where that is concerned, but I'll certainly give it a try. Thanks for the listen and comment!
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thoughts from the bull... &mdash 01/19/07 - 01:52:06 PM
such an honest delivery and pure indie rock feel. this is good ol' club rock music. great vocal presentation and the filling musical stage is a terrific backdrop that never makes the vocal seem forced or pressured.
great job! drumwork is especially nice! thank you! [ Reply to This ]
Thanks to the bull... &mdash 01/19/07 - 06:28:45 PM
for the listen and comment. It is greatly appreciated, and you're right, the drums are great!
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EKKKEE! &mdash 01/20/07 - 10:37:12 PM
So awesome. You have such a brilliant musical mind it blows me away you aren't a platinum selling song writer. This one reminded me of Hole a little bit. [ Reply to This ]
domdino! &mdash 01/20/07 - 11:38:02 PM
Thanks for such a great comment (you sure know how to make a girl blush)! I just kind of "hear" things when I'm recording and hope that they work out in the end.
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Good Song &mdash 01/20/07 - 11:59:58 PM
Very strong melody, I especially liked the chorus. I too heard a little disparity in the guitar parts as pointed out by Doctor Bizzare. There is a bit of dissonance in the verse between the two electric parts. I actually like it and would leave it. There is certain amount of tension created by it and coincides with the lyrics subject matter. If this song is representative of your abilities you are very gifted songwriter. [ Reply to This ]
Hey, "Minigurl!" &mdash 01/25/07 - 03:06:49 PM
Man, your stuff just keeps getting better and better. Another favorite. This is really tight and musical. kevmikwa's drums suit this well. The only nit I have, and it's more personal preference than anything, I thought the vox could have used the slightest bit of reverb. I did like the vox though. Especially the way you weaved the backing vocal. Very nice. [ Reply to This ]
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