and your list is all there, except... make that a big bowl of vanilla ice cream, with chocolate syrup on top.
The piano goes perfectly with the words.

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these are things i've seen through the eyes of my grandson - my children - my parents - and through my own eyes over the years... it's a progression of viewpoints...

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Very nice piece Bill. I appreciate the wants without the longing - just the honest admission. Well done.

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thanks Bud. i was chasing universals here i guess.

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You have captured the wants and needs of "everyman" (generic). This evokes so many emotions...Well spoken over lovely meandering piano...This is really good my friend!

Be well!


http://www.macjams.com/song/29504

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Amagi - thanks. talking to "everyman" is a poet's dream come true you know!

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Can't wait to play this for my wife in the morning... I'm betting she'll laugh one of those good laughs...

Let me know when this is available as wall art...

Ed

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i was hoping this poem wouldn't become too pretentious, since blathering about life tends go that way, so i added some humor to the seriousness.

your response concerns me a little. i hope the humor didn't overshadow the serious side of it. and i really hope the entire thing isn't just laughable.

was it that music box thing?

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...is "one of those good laughs". As in, a laugh of recognition at the truth of something... and I think the truth of serious things IS funny, sometimes... Please don't worry about how your poem comes across... it comes across as very human, with all the shadows and light that comes with that...

Ed

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...go searching Google for an In-A-Gadda-Da-Vida music box... Didn't find one yet... I found ring tones, but it's just not the same....


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Ed - let me know if you find one - i might consider actually buying the darn thing!

i heard the claim that the true title was "In the Garden of Eden" just sorta slurred... i wonder if it's an urban myth?

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ahhh... *that* kind of good laugh. thanks for clarifying it for me. (oops, i left my insecurity hanging out again!)

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Bill, this is ... i don't know, it really touches me. This captures what it's like to be human.
You read this beautifully.

thank you

Steve

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i'm glad it spoke to you. there is a lot of me and my family in there, so maybe this means you know me a little better now.

thanks


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Well you got one of your wants for sure: you are a poet, and thank you for making my day. The piano serves to frame your spoken art well. I only laughed once, but it was hearty; that line about Inagada Davida, and it was because I indentified with the line so quickly that it surprised me. I love this piece.

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wow - a new fan! your comment made my day.

thanks


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Like a moment behind the mic at the piano bar when the guy finds himself talking out loud as one thought leads to another, catching everyone listening (maybe 10% of the restaurant patrons) by surprise, but oh what a grand surprise. After, several raise their glasses to you. One even gives you a generous tip, even tho he realizes that is beside the point, yet important and welcomed. Excellent performance too, by the way. And honesty. Stunning track.

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thank so much Tobin. i appreciate it.

re: honesty. somewhere long ago i read that good writing of any kind comes from the expression of the author's own real experiences and emotions. somehow i guess that notion stuck with me.

now, the real trick is to somehow observe yourself "objectively." and even more so to observe others and somehow place yourself in their shoes, and to express these ideas just vaguely enough so that they are misinterpreted (which is somehow vaguely dishonest in itself) as universals.

i try for that anyway. at least sometimes. when i remember to. :-)

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you to know i thoroughly enjoyed this. i liked bud's remark, and in-a-gadda-da-vida. delicious piano.

well done,
anne

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thank you very much for the encouraging word. i'm glad to have sent a mind-wave in your direction.

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I like the mix of the serious and the silly. Most human beings, who have grown beyond the frivolousness of youth, have felt these wants deeply knowing that this world can at times be a precarious place where we come to realize what is of true importance in a life well spent. And my favorite line, which is repeated is, "I want - to live out my life with you."
There is no greater love - no greater tribute than this - to be blessed with a soulmate in this life. I'm a sucker for a great line, and this is one of the most beautiful I've ever encountered. Another that takes my breath from my body is, "Vous et nul autre." (french) "You and no other." Simple, but profoundly elegant. Very few are posessed with the ability to express their love so outwardly. It speaks to the soul. She must be an amazing woman to inspire such prose. Shakespeare in present day.

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yes, i agree. life is a mix of the silly and the serious. but i also believe that one must try to appreciate both sides to really see it as it is.

& she is amazing.

thanks

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And I want to listen to your poem again on my Ipod too.
and I want you to keep writing more poems, please.

I love this. captured the imagination perfectly. I want to be a poet
you are a great one. thank you. Piano really goes well too.

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wowee!

it's so nice to read your comment. i'm very pleased to find out that i touched another soul. that's what all this creating stuff (be it words or music) is all about!

i hope i can live up to your expectations.

thank you sincerely

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if you follow the link at the end of the song description you'll find your way to lots of my other poetry...

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