This is gorgeous and new and fresh to me.
I hope you don't mind I have two suggestions. One is to include the lyrics. I love the line about enforcing democracy - what a paradox, yes. That is a common sentiment with me. and the one about showing that rappers are talking -doesn't really matter that it's true, but that they're talking. Great lyrics. I'd like to read them along.
The other suggestion is about the transitions in and out of that little break in the middle. I like abrupt changes like this one, but the ones here, something about them, maybe that they take a little too long to happen, sound a little bit awkward.
Well, I'm really glad I heard this. A lot of talent here : )
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