Hope is always good &mdash 03/30/07 - 04:17:15 PM
Wow, this is just incredibly solidly written and I couldn't love the chorus more, especially as it comes into it with the first line, "and the day will come when you'll open up your eyes," because the song itself opens up at that point.
Terrific message, too and I dig your hair. ;-) [ Reply to This ]
Thanks &mdash 03/31/07 - 01:17:02 PM
Thanks a million - great compliment coming from you. I still have work to do on the song (like improving the lyrics in the third verse, for example) and I'll probably post it again when I've done that. BTW the hair was a temporary thing sculpted and created by the same person the song is dedicated to (although a few years ago). Thanks again. I appreciate your taking the time to listen and comment. [ Reply to This ]
You got me with this - &mdash 03/31/07 - 02:52:42 PM
My daughter is sixteen and I'm watching her find herself day by day. Nice playing and production - strong voice and a fine message. Glad I stopped by. [ Reply to This ]
Thanks &mdash 03/31/07 - 03:08:20 PM
Thanks for listening and commenting. Yeah, it's wild watching kids grow up. My wife and I spend a lot of time wondering where the years went! The hard part is when you see them finding all the changes hard, and you want them to know that there is light at the end of the tunnel, but that can be hard to believe when you're in the thick of it. I hope the song manages to express that, and that she will hear that (when she hears it!) Thanks again for the comments. [ Reply to This ]
Wow! Welcome aboard man! &mdash 03/31/07 - 04:00:23 PM
Solid singing, playing and production! Very nice hook, that chorus. Really nice lead guitar work as well. Positive. Upbeat. An aural treat!
Be well friend! [ Reply to This ]
Much appreciated &mdash 03/31/07 - 10:16:04 PM
I tend to think nothing I do is ever finished or ready, like there's always something else I can do to it to make it better (one of the reasons I post so rarely) so your positive comments are welcome indeed. Thanks for listening and taking the time to comment. [ Reply to This ]
I hear you man.... &mdash 04/01/07 - 01:41:59 AM
...sometimes (quite often in fact) I feel the same way about the "finished-ness" of a tune I'm working on. There's always a temptation to second guess myself! But more often than not "less is more" and you just have to let it leave the nest. Of course, there's invariably a few well intentioned MJers who think you can and should do more with a piece; but in the end only you can know what's right. Go with your gut! if it's good it's good. If not, live and learn.
Take care friend!
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"We are put upon this earth a little space that we might learn to bear the beams of love." (William Blake) [ Reply to This ]
Solid &mdash 04/03/07 - 05:35:35 PM
Strong solid rhythm track-- I like your voice- do I hear a slight bit of Irish accent? LOVE the guitar solo--wish it was longer! Nice work. [ Reply to This ]
Well spotted... &mdash 04/03/07 - 07:19:39 PM
...yes, indeed, I am Irish, although I became an American citizen last year, and currently reside in Minnesota where we are having some snow right now to celebrate the beginning of Spring. Your comment on the rhythm track is really appreciated, especially since the stuff of yours I've heard is great in that department. Thanks for taking the time to comment. Appreciate it. Peace. [ Reply to This ]
Killer chorus &mdash 04/08/07 - 05:50:56 AM
Hey Dajama - this is a really cool track, with a killer chorus. I love the guitar on this - the verse guitar carries the track along, right into the wide-open chorus - I really like the layered voacsl you use. The solo is really nice, but kind kicks in and out very abruptly (if that's a word) - maybe needs to be announced a little?
I really like your voice on this - it's strong and very distinctive.
I liked 'hurricane', but this is a big step up.
Nice work
Steve [ Reply to This ]
Many thanks... &mdash 04/08/07 - 09:19:19 PM
I know what you mean about the solo. I'm happy enough with it, but it does kind of just appear and disappear. I had thought about skipping the lyric on the final bridge immediately after the solo and having the guitar continue right up to the final chorus. I might revisit that. I appreciate your comments about the vocal performance. It's not one of my strengths, and I'm never too confident about it. Again, thanks for stopping by. Much appreciated. [ Reply to This ]
Great &mdash 04/08/07 - 05:31:57 PM
First of all: please post the lyrics! It's nice to read them as we listen. Of course, your voice is very clear and I understand everything you sing. Very nice lyrics.
Great music all round. GREAT voice.
I was left missing a little more umph for the chorus. Maybe a little bit stronger rhythm guitar or some low-volume rock riffs - I'm not sure what - but the chorus is ever-so-slightly flat because it follows the same sounds as the verses.
Also, there's just one line you sing which sounds a little rough: It's when you sing "And I know you think you're out there all alone", just before the guitar break. It sounded a little weak compared to the rest of your excellent singing.
Great track. :O) [ Reply to This ]
Thank you and duly noted &mdash 04/08/07 - 09:25:02 PM
You raise an interesting point - something I had not thought of (even though I often do it on other songs). This is why I love this place - smart, perceptive comments that can only make a song better. Your point about the singing is duly noted. I may well give the vocals another try just as soon as I finish working on another song that I'm finishing off right now. Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to listen so carefully. Much appreciated. [ Reply to This ]
P.S. &mdash 04/08/07 - 09:28:45 PM
P.S. Lyrics posted! Been meaning to do that and keep forgetting. Thanks for mentioning it. Cheers. [ Reply to This ]
Hey, neighbor! &mdash 04/18/07 - 01:01:04 AM
The more I listen to your songs, the more I discover something aurally pleasurable about it. Couldn't explain it at first... then I read down the comments that you are Irish, which probably explains why I felt there was a quaint appeal to your rhythm, your voice and melodies and arrangement. Lots of great European voices here, and glad to have you as the next addition to that awesome list.
Oh, and by the way, I used to live in Roseville at Silver Lake Road. You're just a short drive away!! [ Reply to This ]
Hey neighbor &mdash 04/21/07 - 02:27:24 PM
It's a small world (but I wouldn't want to paint it!) Yeah, I know Silver lake Road. I believe I was just out that way recently, on my way to see a movie at that Carmike place. Glad you hear something unique in my stuff, although I can't really take credit for my roots! [ Reply to This ]
nice song &mdash 04/30/07 - 08:40:53 PM
that chorus just jumps right up and announces itself to the world. very cool chord changes. this song would work in any genre, i was just playing around with it on my acoustic (a sort of elliot smith indie folk version). great job, and nice tone on the solo. [ Reply to This ]
I also... &mdash 04/30/07 - 10:10:33 PM
...like those chords. They've been floating around in my head (and my hands) for a while. Also delighted you're playing around with the song. Thanks for stopping by. Peace. [ Reply to This ]
Nice &mdash 07/31/07 - 12:21:34 AM
Real nice song with great Niel Young guitar at the end.
Sounds like he jumped in there ...i think.
was that niel... i thought i saw him...
I'm a bit nuts tonight.
Great tune man.
Great tune.
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Neil was here! &mdash 08/21/07 - 10:11:51 PM
I wish...Thanks a lot for the comment. I like that guitar at the end too. In fact, i think it's my favorite part of the song! Never thought of it as Youngish, but now you mention it...Glad you liked the song, and thanks for taking the time to comment. Sorry it took so long to respond! Peace. [ Reply to This ]
Stars &mdash 12/12/07 - 09:28:30 AM
Thank you &mdash 12/12/07 - 10:26:51 AM
for your kind words. It's always great when someone checks out some of the older stuff! Yeah, I like this song. In fact, this is one of the tracks I did a while ago that I'm looking at again in terms of remixing and remastering. As I get better (in tiny increments!) at getting the sound I want, I'm trying to go back to older recordings and apply what I've learned. You never know, I may even repost this one day. Thanks again for taking the time to trawl through the archives, and thanks for your comment. Cheers. Peace. [ Reply to This ]
Bravo! &mdash 01/13/08 - 12:46:27 AM
David,
This is another solid song. The only thing that is not my favorite is the acoustic on the opening. I might have made it more airy and a little less bottom end, but that's just my taste. I love your guitar work, vocals, your style and your songwriting. Do you have a CD by any chance? Hope is the keyword here and it comes right through. Good Job. [ Reply to This ]
hey dude &mdash 01/13/08 - 10:09:11 PM
Thanks for taking the time to go back and listen to some of these golden oldies! I'm with you 100% on the guitar. This is one that I recorded a ways back and there are so many things I would like to change about it! As you say, the song was trying to communicate hope. If it does that, my work here is done! Cheers. Peace. [ Reply to This ]
Gawd &mdash 03/27/08 - 12:59:52 AM
how I envy that voice! Wow... each song it just gets better and better!
Beautiful song man! [ Reply to This ]
Thanks, man &mdash 03/27/08 - 10:26:03 AM
I'm happy you liked this one.Your going back to comment on this prompted me to listen to it again, and i realized that the version up here and the version I have on my iPod are pretty different. I went back and made a few changes a while back. I must tidy it up a bit and perhaps repost. I'm flattered by your comments about the singing. Very glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again for taking the time. It's very encouraging. Cheers. Peace. [ Reply to This ]
#2 &mdash 10/31/08 - 10:24:19 AM
Hitting your second one. Glad I did. Brilliant structure to this song. Glad my girls are not teens, yet. BTW
Terrific dynamics and love the chorus. The solo was perfectly placed. ( a little crazy horse-ish)
Would love to collab with you. I have a cool idea.
Happy Halloween.
The other dave [ Reply to This ]
Hey other Dave &mdash 11/03/08 - 09:13:38 AM
I love that you went all the way back to this. Glad you liked it; it has a few recording problems and it's definitely on the list to redo at some stage. Yeah, the teen years can be challenging, but I guess every age has its challenges. In our house we have a 20-year old, a 16-year old and a 6-year old, so we're never bored.
A collab sounds very cool. I would love it. What's your cool idea?
Cheers, man.
Peace. [ Reply to This ]
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Terrific message, too and I dig your hair. ;-)
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