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This is my first song posted here, it is also the first song on the album I'm currently making.
I wanted to create to create a song that would capture the feeling of city life, filled with it's paranoia, isolation, and it's daily routine.
I'm new to all of this and would appreciate any feedback.
I wanted to create to create a song that would capture the feeling of city life, filled with it's paranoia, isolation, and it's daily routine.
I'm new to all of this and would appreciate any feedback.
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Lyrics
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This city makes me complete
Where no one cares to know you
Emotions are forced to Decieve
Suspicious glances on rainy streets
We'll meet tonight in some cafe
and pretend that we're in love
Though theres no chemisry
between you and I
Our lust will be quenced
by the morning light
This city makes me complete
Where no one cares to know you
Emotions are forced to Decieve
Suspicious glances on rainy streets
We'll meet tonight in some cafe
and pretend that we're in love
Though theres no chemisry
between you and I
Our lust will be quenced
by the morning light
drakonis
Welcome to Macjams, nice first post! This has a bit of the dissonant minor-mode synthy "Darkwave" gritty feel I like, and I also think the lyrics will fit this well. Some quick minor critiques though... The main (melody) synth you use has a really harsh sound, and though it fits here, it is slightly loud in the mix I think... you may want to back it off a little. Of course, if it is the melody line and you're going to sing over this, then it will need to go further back anyway. I liked the city sfx near the end, but you may want to foreshadow them by having just a taste of city noise near the beginning (prior to any vox) as well, just to set the mood. I like the dark, plodding pace of this, and the twisted tremolo-synths... I think it comes close to giving the gritty-city feel you are after. I look forward to the development of this, and more music from you.
ttfn,
Drakonis