This reminds me of Dire Straits in some spots. I really like the vocal delivery and the bass guitar has a nice sound. I like the lyrics also. I really like the line "Get off your high horse and lower your nose". The hand claps are cool. I'm not crazy about the guitar being on one side and the keys on the other. The guitar side seems a little more present making the mix a little off balance if that makes sense. Maybe bringing up the volume on the keys will resolve this issue. I agree that some real drums would spice things up a little. So would a horn section but I'm not sure where to get one of those. This is my first listen to your music. I will definitely have to check out some of your older stuff. Thanks for sharing!

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Thanks for the listen. You are right about the mix. I raised the piano volume, but not enough. I struggle with not putting eveything straight up. Thanks for lending your ears. You are hearing the same things i am. I was a little impatiant about getting it posted. I kept playing with the mix and sometimes i feel like its never done.
Thats why i thought somebody else could help me figure this mix out. So i really appriciae your comment.
Check out "Temo"
peace

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you continue to fascinate me with your quaint vocal delivery, something refreshingly appealing about your singing.. and of course this song is very well written and has an appealing come-on-join-the-fun beat. It gets better from beginning to the later half of the song. It is short on production details, but overall it lays the foundation for a big radio hit.

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Leon, thank you for such kind words.
I feel like I'm still learning how to get the sounds i want from GB.
Just when i feel like i have a good sound i here what others have managed to achieve and I go back to the drawing board.
Thanks for the comment.

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Although - and like you know - the production can be much enhanced, the core of this song is just wonderful. I'm with you when you decide to keep it simple. This is one of those tracks that is driven by a catchy melody and therefore shouldn't be embellished too much. The singing is somehow fragile but very convincing. And like Leon says... this has radio hit potential. Just send me a note when you think you could use any of my limited skills for this.

- Walter

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I am inspired by your interest in helping me with a re do on this song. I thought i sent you a reply to your comment but must have been interrupted. (four Kids)

Do you have any suggestions on how to get a better sound for this tune.
I'm looking to keep it simple as you agreed. I was inspired by the tune dreadmon..Bing has posted called "Crazy feels like"...Have you herd it?
He has a simple sound that i really dig. I had that in mind when i put this together.

Your tunes are so well constucted and have such a pro feel that I thought i'd ask befor getting started.

I was dreaming about having a few people perform differint parts. ie... lead guitar, bass, or adding a little twisting counter melody to a longer intro or what ever. I actually thought dreadmon could play ducimer instead of the rhythm guitar part...enough dreaming from me.
any thoughts?


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the clapping in this song :)
lyrics are easy to relate to...


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all tens ...THANK YOU!
u da bomb girl
I wasn't sure about the claps but your not the first to comment on them.
Thanx
how those exams going?
got any grades yet?

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Frozen Steak, GREEN grass, and I don't know who won.
Sounds like a Friday!

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Sweet bass work. I'm lovin' the multi-layered vocals. The piano is a real nice touch. I like the claping and of course the lyrics. In spite of the subject matter this song gave me a really good feeling inside an everything is ok kind of feeling. Great work Tim this was a great listen thanks for informing me about it.

-Nikos-

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This is great, Tim!
A catchy, well structured tune.
Sounds like a guitar player playin bass, ala McCartney. Vocals are perfect. This could be done in a Dire Straights style or even move the beat to an island vibe. Very cool stuff, Tim!

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This has a great rhythm track, and your vocals are sweet too.

Weird thing: your intonations is sometimes a bit funky, which made it sound in the first couple of measure (and somewhere later too) as if you were singing a sharp 4th step, meaning a scale of C-D-E-F#-G. That would have been pretty creative. Maybe you should take the places where you sing it "right" and "uncorrect" them....


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This is great! Screw the rat race! There's more to life than that to be sure! Beautifully done...Love the vocals...harmonies work well. Piano and bass play off each other nicely. Lyrics are fab! Bravo and encore!

Be well!

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paul simons soul, lovely voices lovely percussion, Dr Hook's ghost. I think at times the bass could be a little dancier, maybe a latin tone might work better there IMHO but that is only me, picking. This is a great song and, polished up could be very radio friendly. EXCELLENT.



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Paul Simon, The Cars.

Direct, catchy and vulnerable.
Real Life.
Very Cool.

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Two paul simon comparisons in a row.
Paul is the best. I don't listen to his stuff much anymore but i love the stuf he did with the African musicians.
all his solo stuff is an insperation. Well all his work.
I kind of forget about him then he releases something after a wait and heeee's back
Thanks for the comment.
i love the support


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I dig the tune. Catchy.
could use a slick solo.
I also here what the other have already commented on ie. Dire Straites and Paul Simon.
A complement.
The vocal could use a bit more moxy in some spots, but I love the harmonies.
I read what Vic said about the F# thing and was also wondering if maybe you could use that as a harmony rather than the first melody line. It works but is strang to my ears at first listen.
Gonna download and save this
thanks
jd

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I liked this track. I agree with some of the additional comments: catchy, simple, rythmic.

You e-mailed me for honest feedback, so here goes: I was having a hard time getting the bridge to the end. I liked the vocal structure, but also feel in some spots a bit "more" could have been applied. I would loved to have heard a rephrase of the intro as well as a "why" you can't do it no more ( i.e. a reference to family or self or maybe that it's just not worth it for whatever reason). I think this tune has a lot going for it: your recordings are good and strong and well thought out and well put together; your lyrics are easy to remember and easily digestible; the feel of the tune is laid backand succinctly "not uptight" which is very appropriate.

I suffer from many of the same limitations I listed, and I dare say I commit them frequently.

I truly hope this helps.

you have still rated quite high with me :)

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Your right about the bridge and when I look at it in black and white I 'm note sure where it starts. I think I got two ideas going here.
Most songs here on Mjs dont even have a bridge and this one has a prooolonged one.
I've been thinking about re-doing this tune and should more clearly define the bridge.
The lyric suggestions you made also make scents.
Thanks for your honesty and checking in.

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Is this you singing Timothy? You sound great here. No need for another singer in my opinion.
I also love the careful, sparse guitar soloing you've put on here. You have a cool signature sound with that guitar playing. I think I would recognize your playing if I didn't know it was you playing:)

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You always lift me up with your comments. You dig my signature guitar sound. Wow, cool.
and a vote of confedence for my vocals too. Thanks man.
Vic Holman gave me a push to post a vocal thing. Your words of encouragment along with a few others here have helped me as well.
Thanks for checking in.
Oh yea congrats on that Blues award...well deserving for sure.
peace


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Sounds to me that you're fairly reticient about singing here though - my suggestion would be, if you want to re-do it, that you re-do the vocals yourself (rather than having someone else do them) after taking on board the positive comments people have made here - of which there are justifiably many. Coop nailed it for me with his "The Cars" reference - this sure does have potential Tim.
Cheers,
Neil

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Thanks Neil. That means a lot coming from you .
You stuff is very cool.
peace

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Those guys that drive around selling meat really annoy me. I don't know why. They just do. Something about buying large quantities of meat that I know nothing about from a stranger driving around in a truck I just don't understand and can't bring myself to do. However I used to get lunch everyday from the roach coach which is even worse. Human behaviour is a curious thing. Anyway, very relateable song. Keeping the score will only drive you to a fruitless insane end. That's why I just declared victory long ago, game over, the rest of my life is just a long victory celebration. Good tune here. Can't wait to hear it when it is fully produced! and you MUST keep those hand claps.

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'...life is just a long victory celebration...'
great line.
Yea i don't get those meat guys, they must really need work.
What a pain.
Thanks for your words.
I always amazed that people are checking out my music.
I think I'll boot up my GB and celebrate a bit tonight.
peace
tim

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Great hook for the ear. I love this tune. I hesitate to advise you on this; hardly knowing anything myself, and being plenty entertained just the way it plays now. The core of this song offers great potential for the production buffs (which, unfortunately I am not) so I can't wait to see what happens here. Horns, hmm.........cool.

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Great vocal delivery. Reminds me a little of Mikkylunds stuff. I love the line "selling me frozen meats or some kind of upgrade" classic! The bass work walking around is excellent. Love the claps and flappy lead guitar. The mix is sparse and clean, not too much fluff. Direct and neat. Nothin like a real piano.......

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