You've got a cool sound on the guitar during the
strumming part. But the "song" as a whole contains what
seems to me as a great deal of uncertainty. Take a couple
of elements from this track and build on them.

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Thanks for the critique Ide say its pretty acurate. I just started playing
acouple years ago and I just got Garageband a month or two ago.
I've since added some parts and but have yet to record it. Thanks again

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Pooey commented, this was a rather tentative start that
needs some work. what effects did you use, its a little too
echoey for my taste and a lot of hiss. it
doesnt gel together properly, as a track at the moment,
keep at it some more!
SlimGirlFat

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Your absolutly right. I actualy just found this sight yesterday and im at work
I was pretty anxios to try it out, that track was one I happened to have
with me.
I really dig your songs everything I herd is pretty tight how long have you
been doing this?

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Then it seems you lose all control.

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Thanks man Im glad you liked part of it, I'de say I diffenitly got carried
away.
this is all new to me, but thanks
I hav'nt herd your stuff yet I'll check some out today.

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but I do agree. However, it's a very tasty flavor you've
created. There's a darkness floating around in there,
would fit very well on the Heat soundtrack. Perhaps,
some strings and deep synths to grow the song?

And probably take out that second part or find a way
to bring the two flavors together. Kewl stuff as I
know you were eager to post, heh!

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Thanks man. Soon I think I'll re-record that and post it again

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I like where you're heading with this. I thought the early guitar parts sounded a bit like a Pink Floyd track. Keep on creating!

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i think it definitely has a Pink Floyd feel to it. I would try some thing like the single hi hat loop in garage band to add some sort of secondary beat to it to link it together. Although I think it is good, it sounds a little disjointed and the hi hat might give it some kind of continuity. just a thought.

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