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18 Steps by sherrill56 [Email]
Genre: Acoustic

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Comments: 5
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Plays: 45
Last Played: Nov 11, 2008 - 03:41:43 PM
Downloads: 0
Fans: 1
Uploaded: May 20, 2007 - 06:18:49 PM
Last Updated: May 20, 2007 - 06:18:49 PM
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Keywords:
acoustic (491), harmony (57), folk (370), relaxing (49)
Description:
this is a song based on an image that came to my head as i was trying to write lyrics, the guitar part had been in my guitar for the past 4 years and i had struggled to find a place for it, until a friend and i started our acoustic guitar duo. we wanted something that emphasized the guitar part and the melody, lemme know what you think!

Lyrics:
He trugdes along with a dog on his side
bright sun shining down on his shaded face
His awkward gate makes progress slow
But he grins when he tunes into the bluebirds song

She shrugs her shoulders condescendingly
Laughs out loud while he clumsily walks his dog
Laughter couldn’t cure her frightened eyes
He asks himself what had spawned that wilting smile?

He waits and waits for the lights to fade
Its 18 steps to cross the crowded street
The bluebird’s song has been replaced
By these thoughtless machines harsh sand paper gusts

Don’t go he said as he took his hand
Death drives by while the lights are green have you seen
I haven’t seen in 70 years
He says as he motions to his canine friend

The street had stopped and the lights were red
They took their first step onto the parted sea
He counted softly with his tender steps
Almost home he said as they struck 17

Offered his thanks for the pleasant help
Now I can go be with my wife while the sun sets low
He let him go and they split apart
Step by step around all of the hand shaped stones


Hardware:
acoustic 6 string (steel) acoustic 6 string (nylon) two voices

Software:
gb
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Nice song, needs work... &mdash 05/20/07 - 06:42:17 PM
just in the mix though... It sounds great until the voices come in and because they are too loud and with a little too much low end and midrange that they cover up the nice guitar part. I would really like to hear the mix tweaked, as I like this kind of music, great guitar playing and a sort of a quirk in the melody. Reminded me of the Penguin Cafe Orchestra.

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thanks for the listen &mdash 05/20/07 - 11:08:43 PM
i really appreciate your comments, the problem with the vocal mix is that they were recorded with the onboard mic on my computer, i lack a mic that has good sound quality, which is the reason the mix suffers especially on the vocals, but nonetheless thats for the comment and hopefully after i start workin a while ill get a mic, any suggestions?? thanks for the kind words!

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Agree with &mdash 05/21/07 - 06:31:53 AM
Jim Bouchard about the mix. The vocal is too loud and distorts slightly in my speakers, but, more importantly, also drowns out the guitar, which I like a lot. The tone and playing on the guitar parts is very nice, and the melody on the vocal part is also good - simple, but effective. The singing is very good, by the good - the harmony works well, and suits the song perfectly. Remember, the important thing is the song. The recording can always be fixed. This is rather cool. Nice work.

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i agree &mdash 06/03/07 - 06:27:05 PM
that the vocals totally dominate the guitar work and they DISTORT!!, which makes me very unhappy that we didn't catch that, but you know how reecording is, once something sounds finished there are always 100 other things that you can do ... that guitar part has been thrown around in my musical mind for the past 3 years and ive finally put it to work, thanks for the encouragement,



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great guitar &mdash 10/15/07 - 11:03:31 PM
Great guitar work! excellent melody picked out. Yes, I agree, the vocals are a bit too loud. The higher melody should be more present over the lower harmony. Its just a mixing thing, I think it can be fixed. Invest in a better mic and mix it in better and this song will sound sonically better! good song all in all...love the guitar picking and rythms.


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