Moving On

patsfan459

Genre: Pop (Alternative)

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Pop song primarily with piano

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Song Stats

Hits: 898
Comments: 7
Fans: 1
Plays: 75
Downloads: 40
Votes: 4
Uploaded: Jun 04, 2007 - 04:49:07 PM
Last Updated: Jun 04, 2007 - 04:49:07 PM Last Played: Oct 03, 2008 - 02:33:55 PM

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Pop (568), rock (1437), alternative (305), piano (715), macjams (120)

Comments

breezer	breezer said 901 days ago (June 4th, 2007)
	Nice work! Peps you up with happiness! Check out my latest song called Leapfrog

	said 901 days ago (June 4th, 2007)
	jumpin Like the upness cool beans!!!!!!!!

	said 901 days ago (June 4th, 2007)
	HEy! Nice chords! cool music!

	said 901 days ago (June 4th, 2007)
	full round Starts out thin but then the bass licks in. Chord progressions a little bit repetitive. Overlay more variation and polyphony to reduce sameness. Work on dynamics and some tempo changeups or retards. This is an excellent foundation. Try to achieve more organic synth voicings for your piano. Get some singing woven in.

thetiler	thetiler said 901 days ago (June 5th, 2007)
	Like the flow of this LIke how it gets interesting towards the halfway mark. Lots of cool sounds and progressions! Check out my latest song called The Bluebird Cafe (with two other guest)

drakonis

drakonis said 901 days ago (June 5th, 2007)

good building blocks
There are some really nice ideas in here, the main chord progression (and its minor-mode sibling) are very nice. The intro needs a little more build on each phrase, it seemed to be one identical phrase too long. And it is hard to tell, without a main melody line sung/played over this how the overall piece will work... without it this seems a little dry of course. You may want to add an additional instrument in the chorus/refrain that is not in the other parts, to spice it up a little. The drum loops add to the repetitiveness, possibly add more fill-tweaks to break it up. And the ending just trails off, so working on the ending a little would be good too. Those are the critiques, but overall, a nice foundation for a pop tune. Hope these are helpful observations!
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Drakonis

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FEEL	FEEL said 900 days ago (June 5th, 2007)
	Catchy Has a nice catchy progression to it. A lot of good changes, some great builds and then if finds it's way back to the theme. Thanks for sharing. John Check out my latest song called Pigs Fly

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Artist Info

Name: Bijan Olia

I have been playing piano for 12 years and percussion instruments for 8 years. I have been using Logic Express and Garageband for two years, and composing has added a new dimension to my musical background. I participate in the Symphonic Band and Jaz... [see more]

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